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Slave of an Empire.

This story is about Solar Chaser, a young unicorn scholar, and how a normal pony is affected by the war against the New Lunar Republic and the Solar Empire and being under the rule and law of the all Devine ruler, Celestia.

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Jphyper

Jphyper #1 · Aug 22nd, 2013 · · · Chapter 1 Solar Chaser ·

Learn to use consistent tenses and proper capitalization. Also, don't use "of" when you really mean "have". For example, "must of" should be "must have" or "must've". I'd give you a link to this site's writing help guide, but I can't do that with the device I'm using right now.

Keep in mind that Solar Empire/New Lunar Republic stories are not very popular due to the concept being done to death. Still, this shows promise by offering a unique point of view to tell it from. Keep writing; you'll learn how to smooth out your rough edges eventually.

Kbjinx