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It's a shame that he didn't finish his food, that way he would never activate Murphy law.
where did you find this?
WE SHALT NEVER ACTIVATE MURPHY'S LAW!
Kestral's got a bad case of the munchies. Didnt even get high for em either.
Can't wait for more.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
“Don't like to me, Kestral.” She said, giving him a stern look. She shook her head. “There's no need to lie to us.
Lie*
nice chapter btw
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You are right, that the first chapter should hype you up for the rest of the story, and I simply didn't deliver that nearly as well as i could have. I don't really have any excuse for it other than it was when i was least developed in story making. Like you said, you're not going to force yourself to like my story, and honestly? That's fine with me. I'm not asking people to adjust their standards to accommodate me, and by explaining what i'm doing wrong, you're helping me understand how to become a better write. So, thanks. I might rewrite the prologue eventually, but it's probably not soon. And i'll more than likely forget about messaging you anyways.
Just one question: Why is Kestral a stupid name?
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I'm pretty sure i only remember it from an episode of 'Freeman's Mind'. Is it from somewhere else, too?
5039500 interesting... thank you for your help.
Interesting chater, I am curious as to what the eggs are for that Luna wants and what Discord is up to ifhe even is up to something.
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Wow. Umm....
I wasn't expecting you to give it another shot, but, cool! Thanks for giving it a try.
And yeah, if you feel that there is something else that could be looked at in a critical manner, be my guest. As the author, I am the worst reader of my own story, because i have more emotional attachment to it, so, whatever advice you have, i'll try to keep an open mind to.
As far as the name 'Kestral', it is a single-letter change from the name 'Kestrel', which is a bird of prey that falls in the 'Falco' genus (Falcons, friggen awesome birds). Their typical hunting style is to hover about a dozen meter over open land, and to swoop down, catching small mammals, lizards, and insects. Of the different species that have the name 'Kestrel', the 'American Kestrel' is supposedly the least similar in genetics, but still holds close to the mannerisms of other Kestrels (Wikipedia).
Absolutely none of that information was given in my story, but i thought it was an interesting comparison nonetheless.
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I just thought moon moon could be a little comic relief character.
5046902 Whichever you feel is necessary. I have no preference.
Also, i'm surprised you read that quickly, to be honest.
I wonder if these eggs are related to Spike in some way.
First off, read this in one sitting. Liked it.
Secondly, lithovore is the word for one who eats rocks and gems (and other things in the lithosphere), if you want to be technical, over "mineralvore". I'll let Shadowmancy go by since it's the title of a in-universe book which you established as having wonky writers, but a restaurant would want to be accurate.
Third, you should read it aloud. You know your autocorrect, there's few outright misspellings, but i've seen "hunt" over "hurt", "sword" over "swore", and a few others (again, read it in one sitting, can't remember exact spots).
Fourth, an enjoyable read, thank you.
5058868 Ah, thank you for pointing that out. I was wondering if there was a word for it. As for the misspellings, i'll just need to find the time to sit down and find them all...eventually.
Again, thank you.
I have exactly one question. What ARE those eggs he keeps finding, and if they cause such emotional outbreaks in the princess why are they in the hooves of normal ponies
5061600 I am going to assume they were created by Starswirl, as the one in Celestia's room had the note that had the signature of 'SS' on it. Beyond that, I haven't a clue, only theories.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
5064600 Would make sense. But, and this os just my personal headcanon talking. Didn't starswirl live before the princess' rise to power? If so, then maybe those eggs are more than they appear. Arcane artifacts of extreme power anyone?. Presumeably, since the english portion describes the princess' personalities. Maybe the stones are the source of their power and immortality. Just wild guessing though since we wont know till the author updates. Which had BETTER BE SOON!
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*refuses to comment on theories, just to cause more anguish* Mwa ha ha ha.
But yeah, next chapter is coming slowly. I'm trying to do a bit of world building with it, kinda show that there's stuff outside of the scope of Kestral's focus.
5066154 You are a sick, twisted, individual. And thats JUST FINE!!
CHIKKIN SAMMICH!!!!!!!!!
Kestral is going to get some Lunar booty in the oncoming future.
He is lucky he didn't get to eat his sandwich, they were Pegasus GUARDS after all, and him finishing it would show them that he was not a Minotaur
Mysterious eggs:
These eggs are quite possibly magical in nature, and the cryptic messages enscribed upon their pedestals in various languages give no clues as to their origins. They also hold sentimental value to Princess Luna and Princess Celestia, as evidenced by Celestia possessing one of the eggs herself, and could be linked to the dragon featured in the pictures in Celestia's chamber. There is no set location for the eggs, as anypony or anyone could possess them at this stage.
Eggs found: 2
Eggs remaining: 4
Achievement(s) associated with: 'Easter Egg Hunt'
so... if the eggs are important and potentially alive, wouldn't it be bad to store them in the rift? cause they might get baked or something? Eggs typically are organic.
7230424 i think they are like faberge eggs, not real news.artnet.com/app/news-upload/2015/03/famous-easter-eggs-by-faberge-in-st-petersburg.jpg
6473829 actually there's seven eggs... Red white black blue green yellow and grey
7861684 yeah, but Celestia has the white one. Thus, he didn't find it, it was already found, lowering the number of discoverable eggs to six.
Deadpool?
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True, though I can also imagine that he gets some nurse booty. He met two nurses already that were promising. Redheart who is into thieves, and the reindeer mother, who's kid he is rather fond of. Or maybe they just form a herd. Heh.