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this will be interesting
He should definitely ask discord for a revolver/compatible muffler. Would keep the guard from coming immediately.
I love the reaction to him being a "drug addict and alcoholic." It is such the perfect deception. I also like Lyra but the funny part is that he has Discord, so it would be hard to set a trap unless they knew who were changelings which they can't figure out anyway. Then again, it should be interesting if he ever has to fight the ponies. Question: why doesn't he also see if he can get some type of sleep ammunition or something to knock out ponies, since he'll have to deal with the guards eventually and just knocking them out from range would be much more convenient.
I know you're trying to create tension by having the law pursue the thief. However, I'm having a lot of difficulty suspending my disbelief here. Sure, there is a human vigilante going around stealing and offing changelings. However, you'd think that the massive changing invasion on the scale of invasion of the body snatchers would be the more pressing issue.
Didn't it say one was arrested?
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Ah, i didn't catch that. I only put one was arrested because i forgot about the one that managed to get arrested on arrival.
Fixed
4287878 The only thing I could thhk of that we have invented like that. Would be tranquilizer darts, and I'm pretty sure he doesn't have a tranquilizer gun on him and probably won't ask discord to get one as long as he could stealth it. He has some ways to knock people out with the syringes, but anything more could be considered extensive.
Alright Javert, you need to die.
Master Thief will single handedly make the Elite Unicorns break away from the Covenent and Join him, bringing all of Equestria to its knees, ending with the killing of its false god princesses. Sound familar?
You're using BREATH and BREATHE backwards.
BREATH is the noun and BREATHE is the verb. Please fix this by using Ctrl + Shift to find said mistakes so you can then add or erase the errant/missing "e".
Aside from that everything is very well done. The pacing is pleasant.
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Found and corrected. Thanks for the assist.
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Uh, no? Should I be familiar with that plot line?
I am going to stop reading notes and comments now, too much info dude.
6134273 It's been 17 weeks since you replied to that one dude, and since he didn't answer your question, I'll give it to you.
Master Thief = Master Chief
It should make sense from there, but at the same time it doesn't. Celestia isn't a tyrant in this fic, and Kestral doesn't seem to be too worried about his public image other than preventing the innocent from taking too hard of a blow from whatever he takes. In other words, the guy tried to make an allusion, and failed horribly.
Longsword's reaction was priceless
Also..
I have no words
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Nice
I'm almost thinking Longsword is a Changeling in disguise.
HAHAHAHAHA, AND YET HE'S BETTER AT YOUR JOB THAN YOU ARE
Hmmm...
Nurse Redheart has a fetish for maybe Rape or I don't fucking know its only assumed
Nurse Redheart seems to have the hots for thieves. I ship it!
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https://m.how did you know i play that while listening to stories on here