When you wish upon a Arrowhead

by EuphorianPony3

Chapter 2 Ponyville

As I trotted along with Roseluck, I felt as my lifelong dream when I was a human, now real! But I never pictured myself as a Alicorn though… Every pony there started to stare at me and Roseluck in amazement as if we were on a date, Roseluck took me to several landmarks around Ponyville such as Twilight’s Library, Rarity’s Boutique and the statue which had a pony and a bouquet of flowers Roseluck started to look at the statue with a dreamily look on her face “The perfect place to take some pony on a first date…” I then looked at Roseluck

“Are you okay Roseluck?” Roseluck then shook her head snapping out of her trance

“Oh no, just thinking of something that’s all” Roseluck then took me to Sweet Apple Acres, Roseluck then started to talk to me when we were a couple of miles away

“Jay, I’m just wondering… if um…” I looked at her “Yes?” After her stuttering she continued

“Um if you had anywhere to stay that’s all” I then looked at her with a sweet smile on my face

“I have nowhere else to go… if you’re considering what I’m thinking I don’t mind” Roseluck then smiled at me

“Thank you Jay, I’m enjoying this time with you” I replied to her

“Yeah, so am I” We was about to move into a nuzzle but a herd of rampaging cows started to move in our direction, Roseluck just stood there and the only thing I could do Is push her out of the way I quickly jumped out of the way. After the cows passed Roseluck got up and thanked me

“Thanks Jay, you saved me” I then nodded to her

“Don’t worry about it”

We then heard the cows come to a stop; we took a glance at the herd to notice Applejack and her pet dog. Applejack then came to look at us after she herded the cows in the pen “Well look at that, not something you see every day, Howdy Roseluck!” Roseluck replied

“Hello Applejack, and this is Jay, I've just met him” Applejack then looked at me

“Shouldn't you be in Canterlot if you are an Alicorn?” I then looked at her in a confused tone

“I only found myself like this a couple of hours ago” Applejack then looked at me reassuring

“Well sugar cube, after the date with Roseluck you should go to Canterlot to see the Princess” Roseluck and me blushed

“Err yeah sure I’ll do that, Thanks Applejack” Applejack then started to dash towards the barn

“Anytime sugar cube” Roseluck then looked at me

“Jay, do you take this as a date?” I looked at her looking around for a distraction

“Err well. Um” Roseluck then placed her hoof on me

“What’s the matter? I take this as a date” I then smiled at her and thought in my head Oh my gosh I’m on a date with Roseluck! I can’t believe it! On a date with my favorite background character! I’m so happy I could cry.

Roseluck and me smiled at each other “Well, Jay you should go to Canterlot and see who you really are I’ll see you soon” we then started to put our hooves around each other

“I’ll be back, I promise” Roseluck then whispered

“Don’t make promises you cannot keep” I then looked at her starting to giggle

“Does it look like I’m going to break that promise? You are a really beautiful mare” Roseluck then smiled at me

“Aw thanks Jay, I really like you as well” we then gave each other a nuzzle.

I decided to walk to Canterlot so I could get used to walking and flying, I started to attempt to fly by flapping my wings but it was useless every try was a fail, I then decided to give up and walk to Canterlot.

After staggering all the way to Canterlot I could notice all the rich ponies, as they looked at me in somewhat of a blunt expression, the mares started to talk to me as if they wanted me for my title “Well, look at you” another one started to talk

“I say, where did you come from?” I then began to put my head down as I walked silently to the Palace, as I approached the palace two Royal Guards was restricting me from going any further, one started to talk to me

“Hey aren't you Luna’s son?” I then looked at him confused as I then looked at my flank, it had the cutie mark of a moon

“Erm what?” The Royal Guard looked at me suspicious

“Well we better let you in to talk to the Princess” One of the Royal Guards then opened the doors and started to escort me, up the wayward stairs, and finally at the humongous doors the Royal Guard then opened the door as he started to kneel I then walked through the doors as I saw Princess Celestia. Princess Celestia then started to look at me in wonder, she then started to activate her horn, several moments later she started to talk at me

“You’re not a pony are you?” since this was the Princess I had to explain myself

“No, I’m not a portal sucked me up and transported me here” Celestia had a non entertained look on her face

“Well looks like wishes can come true,” I then looked at her

“What?” Celestia started to explain herself

“A human and a pony made a wish, and it came true” I still looked at her in confusion

“What?” Celestia then done a short giggle

“It’s nothing, however I don’t allow humans in this world, so do you miss anyone in your world?” I then looked at her

“Back there I wasn't loved, only had my father, no one else cared about me” Celestia then looked at me

“Here’s the thing. Tell Roseluck you’re originally a human, and then I’ll make you a permanent pony” I then looked at her with a worried look on my face

“But what if she doesn't like me anymore” Celestia then looked at me with a determined expression

“She will, also you have one day” I then looked at her again

“But it nearly took me a day to get here!” Celestia smirked

“How about this?” Celestia then activated her horn again and in a blink of a second I was in Ponyville.

I then sighed to myself “Well, better tell the truth” I then decided to go find Roseluck. I looked around town and I saw her trotting along, I then started to run up to her

“Roseluck! There’s something I have to tell you!” Roseluck then looked at me with a smile visible on her face

“Jay! You’re back! What is it?” I then came up close to me

“I’m not originally a pony… I’m a, a…” Roseluck looked at me

“What are you trying to say?” I then lowered my ears

“I’m not a pony… I’m a human” Roseluck then began to stare at me in understanding expression

“That’s okay, I still like you” After those words were spoken Celestia came in a blink of an eye

“Well done” Celestia then began to lower her head so her horn could touch me after the horn stopped flashing, as my body was no longer of a Alicorn`s but a earth pony… I was stripped of my title

“You've proven yourself. I've turned you into a earth pony because that’s what you always pictured yourself as” I then bent down

“Thank you Princess” Princess Celestia then took a few steps back so I could see Roseluck as she began to run up to me forcing me into a hug

“Jay! You don’t have to go anymore!” I then smiled warmly at her and hugged her as well

“I know” Princess Celestia then began to speak

“Jay, I`ve also took off your Cutie Mark as it belonged to some pony else…” I then began to look at her confused

“Who?” Celestia explained herself

“An Alicorn known as Full Moon” I then looked surprised

“What! Full Moon… Exists?” I couldn't believe it! My own character took a mind of it`s own! I couldn't`t believe it “Princess Celestia, if you don`t mind me asking “Where is Full Moon?” Princess Celestia then looked at me with lowered ears

“I`m afraid that`s classified” i then lowered my ears

"Classified? How?" Celestia then dissipated in a portal of light as i was left there with Roseluck.

"Jay, are you okay?" Roseluck's comforting face warmed me out of my depression

"Yeah i'm fine... Are we still... on that date?" Roseluck then giggled

"Of course silly! Why else would we not be? i then blushed

"I don't honestly know where i even got that from..."

Author's Note:

I will not be working on this for a long while since i have exams coming up and i still have to finish the other story

Also i have included my Oc Full Moon to mix things up a little
One Thing.
If you have liked this. I am grateful

If you have disliked this i appreciate your feedback since i would dislike this myself

Comments

[WolfWords]

I like this fairly good story I give your story 9.6 good luck with this I look forward to more chapter's.

[EuphorianPony3]

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Thank you!
I will do more chapters but I am currently working on my other fic..
Plus I also have exams at the moment so I will work on this when I get the chance!

[Limm]

wanted Jay to stay as an alicorn :P, anyways, like the story so far :D

[EuphorianPony3]

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Thanks.
To awnser your question.
I do not see how a alicorn and a earth pony will stay in love.

Apologies.

[Commissar Rarity]

Things wrong with this:

-Brony in Equestria. Never done well.

-Not only that but angsty BiE.

-Army enthusiast. Been done before and always badly.

-Random portal outta nowhere. Laziest damn thing next to dying and waking up in Equestria.

-Alicorn. No. Nobody is even batting a goddamn eye that he's an alicorn. There's four alicorns and Twilight becoming one was a HUGE deal so people should be ACTING like Jay being one is a big deal! It doesn't matter that he changes.

-Walking to Canterlot. Canterlot is a day away by train. It'd take days for him to walk there by himself.

-It's rushed as hell. Scenes that you should be spending a lot of time on you zip through. There's no inner thoughts or description of emotions just wham bam thank ya ma'am scenes.

Things right with this:

-Roseluck.

[EuphorianPony3]

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Thank you for sharing your thoughts as i felt the exact same way.

Now why don't you p*** off and read fics which interest you hmmm?

That more worth your time?
(I don't mean to ever be so rude but i am not in the "Happy moods")

[Commissar Rarity]

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Whatever. Just trying to help a struggling writer.

[EuphorianPony3]

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Well as I've said before i need help just not from someone who is not at demand and close (If you get the gist of what i'm trying to say)

If you actually gave my other fic Fallout Equestria: Moon's Malestrom a chance you'll find out i am not quite a 'struggling writer'

Thank you for your suggestions and i hope you have a good day

[Commissar Rarity]

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But that fic has a 2/19 upvote/downvote ratio. How is that not struggling?

[EuphorianPony3]

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You don't honestly know when most of that "19" came from

Probably against Vinyl Scratch romance fics

Mostly trolls (There are actually come people in this community who are a**holes in this place.

And whatever i'm gonna finish that FoE one and then stop writing! I've had enough of this f**king community!

Congratulations you won!

[Internal Auditor]

You've picked a very... questionable premise for this story; You've done a BiE and, unless executed correctly by a seasoned writer, these can become lazy self-inserts.

Like Commissar-Rarity said, this is just some angsty allicorn brony popped into Equestria with no viable explanation. There's a problem with this premise, as it's something not many people can pull off without making the story rushed and tedious to read.

Look, if you want to get better, accept criticism. You can't just blame the "trolls" for all your dislikes and scream how the world hates you, and you're just innocent. Telling people to "p*** off" if they don't like your story is tripe; you've put this thing up for public viewing on the internet. People can say what they like about it. Wether you choose to stick your fingers in your ears and yell "lalalalalala you're all idiots! I'm being totally reasonable" or you choose to think "hey... these people don't like my story. Oh well. Maybe I'll continue, but --whatever they say-- I'll keep trying so I can get better" is up to you. Blaming the community for being "mean on the internet" is a weak, defensive stance when someone hurts you because they didn't like your work.

If you have questions about the story, maybe get some help from someone you know. I'd be happy to help if you need it.

Otherwise, keep writing and have fun doing it.

[EuphorianPony3]

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The Fic is cancelled as you can probably see.

I'm working on another fic anyway known as "White Sparkle"

I appreciate your concern... And your generous offer i'm afraid i have to pass on that offer. For that i was tired, and felt gloomy when i wrote this.

I respect everyone's view on this fic like or dislike... This fic was a mistake ok?

I am not getting angry at anyone's comments As i have said that at the end of the 2nd chapter Like if you're generous and think this fic deserves a second chance, Dislike if you are dissapointed.

I have said enough, I was not interested in writing this anymore.

If you would like me to put it on "On Hiatus" I will

But i will probably never work on this... Again

(Do not bother looking for "White Sparkle as i am still working on the intro)