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Maerx


Sing a song for the ones who never made it

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Jackson Mills has lived in Equestria for almost two years now. Throughout his life, he hasn't really considered love to be important enough to worry over. He has a good life: a stable job at Sweet Apple Acres and a warm house to call his own. He's surrounded by good friends of all colors (literally).

When a condition from Earth resurfaces that threatens to limit his life, he learns that love can transcend not just different species, but different worlds. Soon, he will meet a mare that shares in his experiences, buried deep inside her past, along with another mare that stands by him.
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A/N: A cute little plot I thought up at 1am. This will be a very long story, above 10 chapters, as I'm going all out on this one. I will be looking for editors and proofreaders once I have a cemented plot.

Chapters (11)
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Comments ( 44 )

i like it. awaiting more goodness:) quick question. will this contain lemons?

4451468 I wouldn't say lemons. It's not a mature story persay.

This one's leaning more towards limes. (Perhaps a bit of both)
But it's marked teen for a reason. (I won't relveal too much, but softcore, cuddling, the basics)

4451722 of course. shoulda seen that. thx:)

:moustache: my word good sir I like how you are starting this I very much would like to see where it goes.

Not bad, continue...

What's the significance of the title though?

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The significance of the title will be revealed later on in the story.
It's also of symbolic value & and the phrase that a soul will not change its tune no matter the weather.
(If that makes sense)

4455611 nice. It also sounds like the name of a blues album doesn't it?

Guys sorry to do this, but I'm on hiatus until finals are over. :| :fluttershysad:

Posting Chapter II by the end of the night

All right guys I'm back!! :pinkiesmile::yay:
Sorry I've been away for a couple weeks, but now it's time to get working on this story.
Chapter III should be up either tomorrow or late tonight.

Cheers:rainbowwild:

Ok, allow me to be the first to say that this is a definite step us from your previous works. For one thing, I love your speed. You're other works were a bit too rushed. I felt like you left out certain details.

In this work, I feel like I'm right there next to Jackson, feeling what he feels. I can see the picture you paint very clearly in my mind, and that's what I love about this FiC.

I await the next chapter :)

-SB

I love it!! :heart::heart:
I can tell that you are taking your time with this one, and if you ever need a proofreader or editor, lemme know :scootangel::twilightblush::derpytongue2:

Then its a bittersweet fic.....? :pinkiesad2:

Hi everyone! R8 here with some news! :twilightsmile:

So ashes has chosen me to be his proofreader for this Fic and the duration of it (which I
can confirm is over 10 chapters).
He let me see what he has in store for the rest of the story, and oh my sweet celestia you guys are in for a ride.

Happy to have this honor, ashes! :D


-r8

Hey all, with the final chapters rolling out, please feel free to leave your thoughts and comments here. Constructive critisism is always welcome :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

5128479 PM me if you have any questions.

Thanks for the story! :pinkiehappy:

~8chill

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No problem! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

this was very nice. much better ending than how you did the previous chapter. we'll be waiting for that sequel.

5145326 Thanks for the feedback! Glad you enjoyed the story :twilightsmile:

I think i understand ( the "pony version of god seen what she needed to determin if he lives or not and she did so when he was in the surgery that determis his fate and she gave him a chance to live) i think

Great story it actualy got me a bit when he thought he wasnt going to make it (it got kind of hard to understand at one point but it was more my falt)

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Thanks for your feedback! Yeah, I understand my writing isn't AAA grade material, I'm still relatively new to this :raritycry:
Anyway, you nailed it right on the head. But, to expand on what you said further, the pony version of "God" wanted to see if Jackson had a clear enough head to make the correct & rational choice. It was more a test of logic then emotional triggers. Outside of that current ''life'', I suppose he was unbound from all ties, therefore completely free to decide. (If that makes sense).

I've started writing the sequel recently here. Go check it out! :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by slendergun deleted Dec 16th, 2014

It was an awsome story wish i could try helping whith the sequel if that was ok

In my 22 years of living, I've never met a girl, or pony, quite like her. Back on Earth, 85% or more of the girls were obsessed with one thing: penis size.

Sounds like someone's projecting.

APS

We sat there for a few seconds while the clouds below us parted, revealing a view of Ponyville, particularly the hospital where I was at.

:facehoof: he was in Canterlot in chapter 8

ps. and you could drop the Sex tag, nothing in the story require it.

Nice chapter, very smooth and relaxed set up. I'll be looking forward to reading more! :twilightsmile:

Good chapter, still building up pretty well :twilightsmile:

Approaching the end and so far have enjoyed every bit of it :twilightsmile:

Overall great story! Minuette is probably one of my favorite side characters and always enjoy reading stories of her. Good job! :twilightsmile:

The only thing that I had to remind myself of Lily was a silver pendant necklace she had given me for my birthday, some years ago. To this day, I always wear it. It reminds me of her and her last words to me. I play one song on my guitar every time my mind wanders to her. It was her favorite song, one of bittersweet melody and dark undertones.

But didn't his grandma give him the necklace

When anything (sentient or not) sleeps near you, willingly, it's a sign of trust

It's lonely in the comment section...

The train sped along the tracks at a ludicrous speed, its whistle thundering through the mountains on the way to Canterlot.

LUDICROUS SPEED AHEAD

6042014
Yep and the author will never fix the mistake

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