• Member Since 30th Apr, 2013
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Bronydude981


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This school isn't just for learning anymore. Freshman Rainbow Dash learns of a dark rivalry between two gangs in the school that might bring out the mafia in her.

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Good start on the plot so far, but the spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc. mistakes are very distracting. Perhaps proofread this chapter before moving on to chapter two, or find a proofreader to help you out with those few bugs.

Other than that, not bad! :pinkiehappy:

Oh, sorry about the mistakes. I'll get to it right away and get a proofreader to work on the mistakes I don't know.

Not going to "like" it yet because I haven't read it, but I added it to Favorites for later reading. I do admit, by the description, I think it looks like a promising story.

Not bad. Ill keep an eye on this story.

Good start so far, but the grammar and punctuation do need work although I'm sure that will improve. I'll definitely be keeping track of this and can't wait for more!

I totally see this turning into an awesome story can't wait for more.

Guys sorry chapter 2 is running late, it's still be typed and a few mistakes were looked back at along the way so hopefully it should be ready soon.

Ok so it's been a couple of months since I've actually done anything on here and of course it's summer so Im starting back up on my stories, hopefully I can get chapter 2 done before I grow bored of writing the story.

-Brony Out!

Is this going to be continued?

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