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The 24th Pegasus


Author of the Commander Hurricane series (A Song of Storms), co-founder of the Price of Loyalty universe, and overall world building fanatic. Patreon!


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Two years ago, Rainbow Dash stole Lightning Dust's dream from her. While the Element Bearer went on to become a Wonderbolt, Lightning Dust faded into obscurity. She worked what jobs she could find, but, bitter and broken, she spent more of her evenings inside the bar than outside of it. For two years, her dreams of becoming a Wonderbolt were just that: dreams, shattered and empty.

Then one night, Rainbow Dash reentered Lightning's life. The conversation that followed would lead Lightning on a second chance to achieve her dreams. But she never could have imagined what else she'd find along the way.


Editing and Prereading provided by Hap and SolidFire
Cover art by 8BitAmy
Entered for Jake the Army Guy's Horseword Extravaganza

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 24 )

Ah that was nice. They make a good ship

This was a good story, no holds barred. I admit, I've always wanted to see what become of Lightning, if she grew up and moved on or is still nursing a grudge. I doubt we'll ever find out, but it's nice to ponder over at times.

The name of this fic alone is brilliant and inspired, safe to say I'll be reading it soon.

AAIQU

I've always had a soft spot for Lightning Dust, and stories popping up promising a redemption (and romance!) always catch my eye.

I'm happy I clicked on this one in particular, though. It was sweet, playful with the romance and interactions between Rainbow and Lightning, and, most importantly, fun. Part of me kind of wants the fight in the first chapter to have been longer, but at the same time I quite liked how, despite everything, Lightning still held Rainbow in high regard as her equal. That respect didn't really disappear, and it played out nicely over the story.

A shorter story, but wonderfully told. Rainbow and Lightning were delightful to read. I specifically liked some of the little details, like Rainbow being small enough that she had to lean up to kiss Lightning towards the end. I'm also a fan of this pair together the way you portrayed them, and want to see more in the future.

A very nice read before turning in for bed near the end of the week. Thank you for writing it. :twilightsmile:

I would have upvoted this merely for that amazingly awful pun of a title. Good thing the fic was a nice read too. :rainbowlaugh:

T6
T6 #6 · 3 weeks ago · · · Spring ·

Always awesome to see more Lightning Dust / best pony

And holy shit man this is beautiful, nice damn work

Popping down before even opening the first page to praise the title. It's punny, yet poignant.

What a way to start my week off, a really good ship fic. (well at lest it seems good so far)

Set
Set #9 · 3 weeks ago · · 1 · Winter ·

“Maybe if we crack open the hard stuff we can get Twilight drunk and then she’ll start complaining about her love life!” Then, giggle-snorting, she spun around and bounced back into the castle.

Or her lack of one. I really loved that story! :rainbowlaugh:

Dashes to Dashes, Dust to Dust
If these two were anthro, they'd both have big butts.

It was only a quick, military, five minute shower,

A whole five minutes? Someone's going to spend a shift in the boiler room.

RB_

Dashes to Dashes, Dust to Dusty
We know Lightning Dust is rusty
Strung out in Manehatten's high,
Hitting an all time low

It’ll be a party inside of a party!

BWOOOOOM

Got to say, I always liked Lightning Dust even if the episode did a poor job of the mare. Rainbow Dash 2.0 really needs more love. I will read this and get back to you in 45 minutes as that will be how long it takes to read it.

And now that I read it, it was just as great as it looked. Dash parings and pegasi parings in general are a soft spot of mine. Most of my favorites are pegasi after all and I am very fond of Dash ships, gay or otherwise. This was cute, sweet and wonderful. I just wish it was a little longer but I guess this works too! This was a great story :twilightsmile::heart:

So far, this is very well written. You have, so far, created two original characters that have very unique personalities, and I can easily imagine them based on how you have described them and written their dialogue. I also really enjoyed how you took a mature route with this story in terms of curse words and blatant alcoholism because I feel it adds a different depth than what the show could ever provide.

I think that there could have been a little more playing hard to get by Lightning Dust, but I am also a fan of really good turnouts and fluffy shipping. :pinkiesmile: Of course, there is no telling what the next few chapters have in store, so maybe I should speak so soon.

Loving the banter between these two. It feels very natural, and it makes me hope for a Lightning Dust episode in the future. They cannot leave her character in the state that it's in. 'Tis a travesty! :raritydespair:

I enjoyed this quite a lot. The shipping was nice, and the Lightning Dust rehabilitation by Dash finding her and helping her pick herself back up was great.

Great story! I was pleasantly surprised by it. I like how you handled Lightning Dust, and it flows really well. I featured it on episode 186 of my podcast, Pony 411!

That. Title.

I can sort of see that you just HAD to use it once the thought entered your mind, but come on that's awful! Nice story though, even though the end felt a little sudden.

8265372 Your comment and avatar go amazingly well together =D

This was a nice read! The romance didn't feel forced or too sudden. Their relationship felt in character, as in not too sappy, but still loving. Nicely done, thank you for writing it!

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Indeed. I've noticed a lot more sympathetic Lightning Dust fics appearing in recent months. Hasbro: LD is gaining popularity. Time for her to get the Gilda Treatment. Where's that Equestrian Second Chance Effect

Though, technically, in canon we only see lose her leadpony badge. I don't recall her being explicitly kicked out? Surely that second chance can be a thing...

Rainbow Dash does have a tendency to leave debtis in her wake. Good to see her take the time help a chunk out when she comes back across it.

This was solid feel-good storytelling with excellently organic and emergent romance. Great work overall. Thank you for it, and best of luck in the judging.

How nice. I'm happy to see the change that LD has undergone. She is finally realizing that there are good things in life that just require a little patience, good will, hard work, and some loyalty. :rainbowdetermined2:

I just have been feeling iffy about the time skips. I know what you are trying to accomplish, but I guess i just really don't like it as much. The whole scene with Rainbow commenting on Lightning's add felt awkward as he'll, and not because of the subject matter per se. It's the fact that you can't really see it coming, and it lessens the significance of the conversation because that is the first step towards their coupling. This is the first kind of romantic and flirtatious chapter, so as I said, it lacks lead up. It only makes sense because we have come into this story already knowing it was a shipping story

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