For a breakdown of the format, don't forget to check the first entry.
Title: Of Angels
Author: PaulAsaran
Short summary: Angel Bunny learns to write from Twilight, for a reason that quickly becomes obvious. Told through letters/written conversations.
For today’s critique, I thought I would try something different. Rather than reading a new story, I took a story I had previously “reviewed” (by leaving a comment on it), and then rework that comment into a proper critique.
The description and title are some of the most important parts of a story. They provide readers with their first impression, convince them to read it, and characterize your story even after it is finished.
Unfortunately, not every critique can fill up a thousand word blog post. Here is a selection of reviews/critiques, in two sentences each.
It Must Be Tuesday by Foals Errand (based off chapter 1 only):
I’ve ranted in the past about how FiM breeds wish fulfillment, and how crossovers fundamentally violate the Law of Conservation of Detail. I mentioned in the latter that Human in Equestria has similar problems. Oddly, despite having similar problems, HiE also has other problems that are all its own (despite crossovers often involving humans anyway).
While my big "flagship" story fan fiction thingymadoo hasn't even begun to come close to the point at which I can hype it with blogs, I still feel like my first one should be relevant to it. Specifically, the reason why I don't make much progress on it.
Oh no, an author with basically zero fame and/or credibility has a problem! How tragic!
At the time of this review, the story is on the final chapter, but not complete.
Title: Dash Academy (also hosted on the user’s deviantart page)
Unfortunately, not every critique can fill up a thousand word blog post. Here is a selection of reviews/critiques, in two sentences each.
"Applejack, Are We Poor?" by InsertAuthorHere:
I now take review requests. Check this blog for current status of requests, and guidelines to make your own!
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