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Gunna not be lazy and try an actual comment this time.
I was expecting Cherry, or the Cherry lookalike, on the gallows. Nice twist.
I'm assuming the coalition short dropped the condemned on purpose to further demoralize the resistance instead of properly executing them by instantly snapping their necks with a longer rope. Nice touch.
Crimson did nothing for once, he's learning. Neon was a bug, oh boy. That just tickles my senses even more that there's more going on in Coltchester than meets the eye.
Three sips of rum and a wild Tsunami appears. Poor Crimmy can't have any fun. Almost got some Eos snuggles before stupidity bites. Spending time sick over the toilet is not fun, maybe he'll learn another lesson.
Nope. Right back out into the hot zone. At least he's got backup this time.
Impromptu Court is being held in the streets. Treat your Goddesses with respect now little fillies. Didn't take long for trouble to start, or end. You see how much easier it is with a Tac team handy Crimson? That was to easy.
The sounds of explosions and a thick smoke were coming from the Luxury District. This makes me think the Luxury District is under attack. Maybe it should be "The sounds of explosions and a thick smoke were coming from the 'direction of the' Luxury District."? Unless there is fighting in the Luxury Distract that they totally ignored.
Flamers are scary, and now Eos has one. Imagine getting flamed from nowhere after she sneaks up on you while invisible. That could be truly terrifying for her enemies.
I want to kiss Selenes hooves. Lucky colt.Good interactions at the end.
Next chapter when? I need to know what Cherry is up to!
A joy to read as always Kip, keep it up!
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<3 Oh I do love reading your comments.
You would be assuming correctly. The gallows were there to demoralise and break the spirit of dissent. Nothing deters like a nice, slow, painful death.
I hope you don't mind the easy time the team had. I really wanted to show off their prowess and how powerful proper teamwork is.
I'll fix that up right away, it was absolutely my intention to put 'from the direction of' but I must've brain farted.
I know you do.
Glad you liked the ending. I know you had a bit of an idea of that interaction but I hope my addition didn't make it any less emotional.
Cherry chapter is indeed up next! I'll try not to keep it too long!
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Oh, just rereading your comment, the attack on the luxury District... Think back a chapter.
Don't forget I've played around with time before.
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Oh shit. I get it now. Forgot about the attack on the Luxury District a few chapters back. One of the problems reading stuff as it comes out, it's been a good while since I read that chapter. It's only been about two days? Since Cherry was captured...maybe three?
The identity crisis is in a perfect spot. Eos dealing with the crowd, out of her comfort zone, and then having someone make an innocent comment about her name causing her to doubt herself. That's good character development. Works perfectly.
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Actually, its been a good few days since she was captured!
Chapter 17 is day 0 (the capture). Cherry is knocked out for the rest of the day.
Chapter 18 & 19 share the same in-world time - day 1 (Cherry is kept in all day on this day)
Chapter 20, 21 & 22 share the same in-world time - day 2 - its during this time where Crimson almost dies.
Chapter 23 has Eos comment that Crimson has been out for three days due to the Buck Up incident. Ends with Crimson reading the bedtime stories and planning to go outside late at night. - this makes it the end of day 5
Chapter 24 is the beginning of the end of day 5, and when Crimson goes out and has his heart attack.
Chapter 26 is when Eos comments on Crimson being out another two days. Assuming he wakes up on morning of the third, that makes it day 8.
Chapter 25 and 27 are the same day - so 8 days into the capture. Cherry has worked for six of those days and received the seventh day off.
Looking back at this timeline, I'm very tempted to make the executive decision to reduce Crimson's first coma to two days, and have it be that Cherry has "only" been gone for a week at this point. Being knocked out for five days does seem like a lot, though at the same time it was because of being on the brink of dying twice. Let me know what you think?
Anywhoo, yeah. Even if the coma does get revised to be four days total, that's still a week of being captured!
Kippershy
You forgot this awesome pic including your art collection:
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Yeah, there's actually a fair bit of art I never got around to uploading to the Imgur because Imgur just sucks as of late, sadly. Acts all weird.
I'll have to update the art dump location or add all the pics to Imgur. Just gotta figure out which would be better; adding to Imgur or just uploading everything to Derpibooru.
Here's another piece by the same artist. images-wixmp-ed30a86b8c4ca887773594c2.wixmp.com/intermediary/f/a31c616d-b260-443a-b291-7cfdd4539161/dcfvjps-a9f66632-be25-4897-b59b-973ce60f5415.png/v1/fill/w_916,h_872,q_70,strp/commission___eos_by_brisineo_dcfvjps-pre.jpg
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Well, I gotta say, thank you for prompting me to upload all of the stuff I have to Derpi! I'll edit the story description to lead to Derpi instead.
I think that's everything that I'm within my right to post.
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And yet again, Brisineo has me absolutely, utterly love drunk