The battle of the Hoof ended 9 years ago. For some ponies, the scars are still fresh in the mind. As Threnody, a young heartmender working with the Followers of the Apocalypse will find, sometimes the hardest step is getting a Patient to speak.
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AYYYYYY Chapter 11 has appeared!
More lesbian ponies...I approve....lol :P great chapter like always!! I'm still hoping for my ship to become canon
"spores down there that was screwing with my"
"spores down there that were screwing with my"?
"She tore p a strangled scream"
"She tore a strangled scream"?
"let out an ear-splitting as blood erupted"
An ear-splitting what?
"bed to the feeling somepony’s hoof"
"bed to the feeling of somepony’s hoof"?
"then gently grippedmy right ear"
"then gently gripped my right ear"?
"about when I’d of stopped"
"about when I’d have stopped"?
...Yeah, that's kind of a mixed thing to be told.
"So, the good news is, you're not hallucinating! The bad news is that what you saw is not only real but a malevolent spirt embodying the decay of the world and the darkness in pony nature, and it appears to have taken an interest in you."
"she told the Earth Pony mare"
"she told the earth pony mare"?
"they’re off at the a meeting or something"
"they’re off at a meeting or something"?
"in manners that made spatial processing part"
"in manners that made the spatial processing part"?
"that somepony had taught introduced Peculiar to a colour wheel"
"that somepony had introduced Peculiar to a colour wheel"?
"hanging from the ceiling; pyramids and cubes and even"
"hanging from the ceiling, pyramids and cubes and even"?
"wander up and down in a slightly off tune notes"
"wander up and down in slightly off tune notes"?
"horror I felt glaring from her were poisoning me"
"horror I felt glaring from her was poisoning me"?
YES! I GOT MOAR. Now to actually read this fine stuff.
Awww... sad feels... wasteland's a horrible place...
I smell vengeance on the horizon!
Good show.
Probably unintentional, but I still see what you did there.
Really lovely work with Sweetness, there. She got off better than she should have.
So, shit just hit the fan.
Buzzsaw... oh noes![:fluttercry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/fluttercry.png)
Welp, one thing is for certain - things are about to get messy. Blackjack, quick, drink some whiskey and grab a sword!
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Fixed! Save a few things. I think that the semi-colon was actually supposed to be a colon, and the "about when I’d of stopped" is a colloquialism, since it's in her speech, it's ok for Blackjack to not speak goodly with the English.
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AAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!! Bronode edited in a pun! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
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"I think that the semi-colon was actually supposed to be a colon"
A colon would also work there, aye.
"and the "about when I’d of stopped" is a colloquialism, since it's in her speech, it's ok for Blackjack to not speak goodly with the English"
Hm. "I'dve", then? Or... is she actually saying "I'd of", and it's not just the transcription?
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Worse. I wrote that. :3
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XD
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I think you're right. Fixing.
Yay, another great chapter^^
Wow, didn't even think that Heartmenders could use their abilities like that, that's cool^^ Made me rethink again if perhaps I should include one such pony in my own story (I consider Project Horizon as as much canon to my own story as the original FoE, so seeing how Speak is its sequel, I should probably consider it as canon as well... already came close to making it impossible, my MC is from Stable 8 you see
I'm curious what made you pick number 9, btw, was it random or does it have some meening?), assuming you'd be okay with it of course
Poor Buzzsaw. Guess it's time for Plan Worst Case Scenario?
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I just... sorta didn't see 9 being used? I guess? XD I really didn't have a system to it, other than trying to avoid stepping on the toes of other writers. Though now I need to come up with the numbers for the 3 Seaddle Stables. @.@
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Ah, a valid reason for picking up numbers for Stables^^ Well, hopefully none of the 3 Seaddle ones will be 8 or 11 (had my MC explore the latter in latest chapter), wink wink nudge nudge
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Noted! I know that 2, 1, 99, 98, and 96 were used. I figured that some of them just were randomly numbered because of Scootaloo's crazy. Or... hmm... Maybe I should make them Barns. Cause I could see Solaris systems trying to rip off Stabletec. XD
Peculiar reminds me too much of Scarecrow, dunno if that was intentional but I thought it was neat.
Huzzah! Moar readz! All of my foe stories updated and now I must wait a month or so for moar :.(
Good stuff dudette, keep it up.
Personally I find it annoying that more then half the couples on this site are gay. Especially in settings like this. Takes me out of the story. I know it's an unpopular opinion but it's mine
Did you mean "at me moving it."?
Great chapter, excited for whats coming next.
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...?
Basalt is gay, but Bubblegum and Glitter are straight. Blackjack is
are you horny? Let's bang!bisexual, and Threnody is ??? I know that a lot of FoE stories have LGB protagonists (haven't seen any T, yet), but ok.Threnody does spend a lot of time staring at the party's stallion's ass. Cause Bubbles.
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It was less a comment on this particular story more a comment on the site as a whole. That said what you've done here is ctually pretty good since it gives the idea that the main character has no idea how to react to sexual feelings, she comes off as confused and naive rather then outright gay or straight which is a welcome subversion. Though to be fair I did just get finished reading the latest chapter of homelands which while being overall excellent it falls into the trope of action girl is gay because of coarce she is, which colored my perception of this one when it probably wasn't warranted.... sorry.
Sorry it took me so long to finally read it, keep it up shiney! Love the story! (Don't kill yourself with work and the pnp's and a story, seriously!) And remember- wasteland delivery services are best paid after delivery and delivered only by trusted delivery mares or stallions!
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Oh no! It's ok! I was just confused cause I've been actively trying to portray heterosexuality as the norm. I mean, even Buzzsaw was straight, hence Basalt's rather biting reply to Threnody toward the end of the chapter. But I do get it. A lot of the MC's of a lot of the stories on here have been lesbians, which is something that... while I find it refreshing to see a bit of the LGBT community represented here, a bit frustrating as well because we don't see the full variation of the community.
I mean, the original FoE had 1 straight couple, 1 lesbian couple, and a gay guy. PH I found to be a refreshing diversion because it had a bisexual male - something that is very underrepresented in both modern culture and works of literature. I have a feeling it's because bisexuality is almost being... not repressed really, but subverted by both gay and heterosexual communities due to the fact that they don't know what to do with it. I remember being at a conference for LGBT youth, and a comment made by a gay therapist at the time was 'I don't get bi people. Just be 100% gay already. You can stop faking it!' Again, because of this, I find stories like Fallout Equestria: Transient so refreshing is because it has not 1 but 2 bisexual male MC's, as well as a straight female. I've toyed around with the idea of writing a transgendered character, but the only idea I have would have to be at the seriousness level of Fallout Equestria: Duck and Cover with an MtF MC desperately searching the wasteland pharmacies for estrogen pills and testosterone blockers.
All that said, I completely understand your frustration, and it's fine. I get that it wasn't directed at me, but the site in general.![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
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As hilarious as that premise is it gets into the territory of "transphobia". Which is honestly all the more reason I would. I do appreciate the dialogue though, glad we could clear up the confusion, most people would call me a shitty person and leave it at that.
I like this detail. The ubiquity of literacy in developed countries is definitely something I take as granted.
Threnody’s empathic attack was very exciting.
I also really like that this is being discussed in-universe!
Actually… it almost sounds like …us…![:fluttershysad:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/fluttershysad.png)
‘What do the characters have to do to make us stop wanting to keep reading about them’. I guess they'd have to either get a happily ever after so perfect that slice-of-life couldn't work, or get killed off for real and have no afterlife or resurrection stuff.
I really appreciate how Threnody doesn’t lose herself in the face of the illusions and pain.![:rainbowdetermined2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowdetermined2.png)
Excellent pacing
Awesome chapter!!!!
Just as things were getting tense...
Loving it, eager for more, want Basalt to get her revenge.
Why do I get the feeling that Basalt is going to end up joining the party? Just remember to shoot Blackjack. You know, for good luck.
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I'm willing to bet that it is going to happen, Blackjack needs a new Boo. Also Heartshine's new profile picture is in the top 10 cutest pictures I've seen.
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I exist to cause mild diabetes.
Nice new profile pic.
IT'S SO CUTE!!!!
Misfits toyed with the idea of an alicorn that used to be a dude, does that count as trans?
Also -pulls out tape-
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Dying of laughter, but living in fear of your profile's name.
Well time for Blackjack to do her thing now that everything has gone to shit. Or maybe theirs a different way to fix this. Maybe, not very likely.
Melty face powers activate... form of a pissed of Pegasus's hoof
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omg your pic is sooooo cute
So... Thernody has a bit of a Rampage inside her, when the wrong button is pushed.
I'm pretty sure the former was Echo, the latter is the spirit.
So... apparently Threnody can channel Deus in a pinch. I always wanted to see what would happen if she tried to forcibly harm someone with emotions, like Blackjack's Psalm memories but as an attack rather than a poison. Good to know she has a last resort power that's terrifying, useful and something she's adamantly morally opposed to using and only works when she snaps. That's an interesting thing to work into a character.
...Also, she's a serial shipper. I'm pretty sure her preference is anything cute, whether it involves her or not.
The stable wanting lumber and the prison being inside an oven both seem like potential plot setups and leads. I'm inclined to agree with Blackjack, wondering what a stable wants lumber for. Whether the oven will be relevant... I dunno, trapped in a cell that's baking you alive seems like a very Project Horizons-ish way to go. Maybe you wouldn't do that, but... seems too ominous to ignore. However, I'm having a hard time putting a finger on who would bite the dust if they were used. Anyone with parallels to Blackjack's original team probably has plot immunity until she gets the entire set of roles back together and whatever drama that will come of that comes, which means Basalt is safe. The biggest redshirt (Buzzsaw) just got offed, so she can't get cooked. And if all of the Stable 9 ponies die, they won't be able to serve as plot chaperones if the stable is the next arc after Fold. That's not to say I think all of them will live. If there's going to be a battle, and it's going to be bloody, offing one of them is probably going to happen. But since they're all in the cells, that wouldn't kill just one. Maybe a botched escape as they're heating up that traps one and forces everyone to leave them behind?
...Nah, this isn't Hightower. I'm sure the ovens are just there for worldbuilding.
Poor Buzzsaw, though. Can't say I feel horrible for her, since she never got enough screentime for me to get attached, but I'm sure Threnody will once it gets into her head that it was her magic attack that made the Family make their move in the first place. And that probably could have been planned better. If Buzzsaw was a target that was being moved on that swiftly, and already hated the Family as much as she did, they should have prioritized going to her first or at least putting her under Blackjack's guard rather than snooping around to find something to convince her and possibly raising tensions further if they got caught. Like, you'd think if anyone came for her head and had to be fought off, that would be a bigger motivator for her to fight the Family than any proofs of offers from Stable 9.
Also, hallucinogenic gas trap set by a remarkably creepy villain? Did someone say Scarecrow?
So, Threnody has a special attack... Does it relate to Karma at all?
nice. a new version of that meme.![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
Well fuck time for plan d
Oh my, that is... Radical!
Revenge AMD karma!
OK, setting up empathic feedback on someone else... that's some neat, disturbing shit. Especially negative.
The trap/mental attack scene was nice, and I like how you incorporated the wing from earlier back into it. Just too bad they realized too late. For the trap and I guess the Family taking over in general. Didn't buy those couple extra days after all, huh?
I love how blackjack is playing along she’s just acting as a coach for threnody all the while knowing fully well that she could eliminate the entirety of the family in a matter of days but she’s letting thren have her own adventure
DAMNIT THRENODY, everyone knows when you are under assault by an illusionist you close your eyes and trust your other senses.![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
Well, shit. This just went sideways.
She said it!
Blackjack is truly healing! ![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
My main thought reading is is wondering if that's actually Blackjack she's talking to o.o knowing someone can get in her head definitely changes the game