The battle of the Hoof ended 9 years ago. For some ponies, the scars are still fresh in the mind. As Threnody, a young heartmender working with the Followers of the Apocalypse will find, sometimes the hardest step is getting a Patient to speak.
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The somber really shows
Hohohoho... this is going places! I like it!
Also... Bubblegum... I like it xD
Nicely done heart, nicely done!
"Just reminding me back when"
"me of back"?
"am a little like young mare"
"like a young"?
"some mare’s biologies"
"mares'" or "mares's"?
Also, nice to have that explanation.
Another good chapter!
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DX I'm about to hire you as a prereader, Reese.
Excellent as usual
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Still don't have time, sorry. :)
(Oh, uh, this is Hinds, by the way; I don't actually remember whether the two names were ever connected for you or not. I can confirm by email if you're concerned I'm an imposter.)
8116464 Sneaky! ::Pounces and hugs the Hinds!:: Glad you liked the chapter though.
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Heh.
[hugs back]
And yes, I've been quite enjoying the story.
Ohhhhhh pictures I like pictures, need more pictures. Wish I had the galaxy s8 instead of the s6 it comes with the scratch and sniff app.
I thought we'd be at Star House or similar semi-civilized location for this entire story. We're actually moving towards a traditional Equestrian Wasteland adventure now! Complete with collecting random misfits to add to the party.
Also I'm amused by how Blackjack is letting Therdony lead. Its like starting a new game but you get your overpowered character from the last game as a companion.
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Oh! XD Well, that explains that! I keep expecting to see you as Hinds! :P
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BJ OP, please nerf.
I quite liked this chapter. And the character art. Will we see more like that for every character?
Two great chapters in a short period of time, really enjoying this so far. I was wondering, how long do you plan to continue the story? Thats if you even have an idea currently, or will you follow Somber and plan to write something a few hundred thousand words long and before you know it, you've written something thats almost longer than the entire Harry Potter heptalogy, not that I would mind.
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Notice how Blackjack's companions so far consist of a pegasus mare that uses magical energy weaponry, an alicorn and an earth pony stallion who uses a grenade launcher and is good with explosives. Do you see any correlation with Blackjack's previous adventure?
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*An alicorn that likes grenades! Subtle differences!
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Uh, the original plan was for the story to be 15 chapters. Then I started writing. Now I'm looking at 25. I think. Maybe.
Honestly I keep opening my gdocs folder with Speak in it, vomit out 7-8k words, and then scare the shit out of Bronode and OverKenzie. I am also hoping to get more art of all of the characters. Just need to get the monies for it. I'd love to have Glitter and Threnody done by the artist I used. She does cute stuff!
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Nope, different name on FIMFiction.
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Hm. The story continually getting longer than you expected? Now where have I heard that before? :)
Glad the writing's going well, though.
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Ah, of course, forgot that. Carry on.
Got my hopes up thinking Bubbles might be the son of Steelrain. Then I actually started thinking about it and realized it wouldn't be possible. Sad face....
Good stuff! Damn good stuff. I see Threnody's finally making a move on Fishie. But at the last moment, rejection! I wonder if BJ's worried she'll end up like all her other lovers? They kind of have a way of catching a serious case of death. That would suck for everyone involved.
Whoops, missed one.
Awesome chapter can't wait to read more!!!!!
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Ack! Thank you! I'm always super appreciative when little things like that are caught. Stupid ADHD... It lets me barf out 8k words in a 2 hour sitting, but also means that I miss little things like the difference between an 'm' and an 'n' because my brain autocorrects stuff for me. Makes editing... interesting.
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Nope, Bubbles is the son of a caravaneer and
an extremely mysteriouswasteland mare.I SHIP IT!!!!! BLACKJACK X THRENODY!!.... But that aside....amazing chapter like usual Heartshine...
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Oh boy.
Blackjack is Blackjack. It's not grim and dark like PH. Lots of continuity nods to PH. Blackjack seems to remember her Security training.
It's a "serious" look at what happens to someone after they sacrifice everything but their lives to save the world, written by an author who has some understanding of the topic. This is great and I would love to see more of this.
Just blitzed through this in four hours.
Literally my only concern about this is that it might turn into a million-word long haul like PH did, and your comment here set that concern mostly to rest.
Sigh, so the original crew is represented.
Now we just need to get glitter a mini-gun and we can all break Blackjacks heart again.
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I fail to see why this becoming a million word long haul would be a problem. I enjoy long reads, as long as they can keep my attention the whole way through.
AYYYY, It's back, your not dead, the story isn't dead, this is good. Keep it up, I really enjoy the story so far! I wanna read more!
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Oh no! This story was never dead! It just went on about a month's hiatus because of work. I may be slow to update after Everfree NW, but then I plan on getting back to it!
"OH MY FLIPPING GOODNESS, SO MUCH GOOD WORKS OF LITERATURE! PLEASE, DO NOT CEASE PRODUCTION OF YOUR WRITTEN PROJECTS, OR I WILL BONGO YOUR BRAINHOLE WITH MY SALTY EGGPLANT CANNON!"
sincerely,
Calvin from literature Research.
That ending... You sonuvabitch! I love this story and will never not love it. Keep writing you amazing being you!
~Sincerely,
A very content Yogi
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^_^ I'm glad that you're enjoying it! And I am planning on getting chapter 8 out sometime this week.
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Could just call me a bitch cause I'm a girl, but ya know. No girls on the internet or anything like that!But I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far!*rocks back and forth in withdraw*
Chapter...8...I neeeeeeeeeeeeds it! Gives me mooooah!
*spams the refresh button in hopes of fix*
Curse you real world problems, let heartshine create her magnum opus so that my suffering me end!
Well she was collecting her own therapy group of the angsties ponies she could find soooo
Do we mean this?:
upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/c/cd/M1_Garand_rifgren-shooting_line.jpg
What you usually mean when you say grenade rifle
or this?:
upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/3/36/M79_afmil.jpg
A single-shot grenade launcher.
i.ytimg.com/vi/sUaTJCgi6_o/maxresdefault.jpg
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They've even got Gun Jr.
Sweet Celestia, that was some sweet nosebleedin' yuri there at the end
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No, that's a rifle grenade.
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grenade rifle is fallout weapon
it had model of m79, indeed. But M79 is smoothbore. Suppoosedly, in Fallout world research that continued work of of Project Niblick produced a more accurate multishot launcher. In reality only prototype was T148 that couldnot work due to technological problems.
In our time analog of that automatic grenade launcher Bubble got in saddle does exist, it is a mounted weapon, e.g. for humvee or IFV turret
I think Threnedy is a bit spacey. Why think Bubbles is a spy when she called Fish Blackjack in front of him? Must be the turpentine fumes I guess.
So... an alicorn, a grenade rifle using earth pony, and a pegasus mare BJ has compared to Morning Glory.
This is looking familiar thus far, huh Blackjack?
Oh shit, Thernody's the new love interest.
As impossible as it is, Bubbles really strikes me as Steel Rain's son. With the amount of time that's passed, it does seem plausible that they could wind up meeting some offspring from former antagonists, though.
So... the party is now three teenagers and a marechild in an ageless teenage body? That's going to end well...
It's interesting to see Blackjack deliberately forcing leadership on another pony. There's probably a lot of facets to that, but I wonder how much of it is her projecting Glory onto Threnody and recalling how Glory always wanted to be the one out front and protecting others. She might be trying to vicariously fulfill Glory's wishes with this? Or maybe not. She might just see it as helping, have lost confidence in herself, or be afraid of dragging her friends along with her tendency to go on long, rampaging, single-minded quests. Or it could be having lost her cutie mark, though given what was discussed in the final chapter of PH, I wonder how she really feels about that. In fact, I could see this story ending with her earning another one.
There's a good chance she doesn't think this is a lie.
I guess Threnody's never read the Wasteland Survival Guide. Or maybe it's been updated since and lost that part. :P
Glitter Bomb: real hero of the story. :V
I'm certain she'd be happy to share if you are.
hehehehehehehehe
Except for the one(s?) where thinking about them makes you sad.
Should meet up with Steel from the Enclave. They'd have something to bond over.
Nah, you just fucked it up earlier, besides the times you started and stopped yourself, remember?
Or at least, that's a sufficient explanation. He could still be a spy. But he doesn't have to be.
Isn't at least hiding things about the people you work with, even (in some cases) when it could be important for others around them or you, like, a pretty fundamental part of your job?
Kind of. For this particular thing. Probably. I mean, it's not like Slate or the others had been physically hurt. Point is I could tell myself what I needed to to do it.
Okay, I am actually interested in BJ's move there.
Had to take a break from this during the chapter where Triage was extolling Blackjack's overpowered godhood abilities, because she wasn't necessarily wrong and it's... well how to be invested in such a character... not sure. Then again it's tagged 'slice of life'... then again such a tag in this setting is very relative... then again... aw, screw it, forward we go. The upside, and the compliment to the writing, is that often 'taking a break' from a fic is, for me, the kiss of death. This pulled me back in just based on the relatively little I'd read... once I got over OP Blackjack.
Moving on to the last couple chapters I've read here...
I mean... I guess I can't be surprised that we have a
therapistHeartmender that needs counseling at least as much as her patient. It is the Wasteland, and all. Still, it might have been refreshing to get a non-horrifying backstory. Just, you know, change of pace. Ah well... she's probably with the right mare to do something about it, so that's certainly fun to speculate on. Except that she doesn't really know what she wants to do... hmm.I'd ask if this explains the scars, but it doesn't feel like the same thing (plus I do not seek spoilers). Either way, I don't get it. 'It must have seemed like a good idea to send a filly...' ...BUCKING WAT? Sure, next we'll have a bartender hold an AA meeting, in the bar. While drinking delicious booze. After that we're having a gambling addict meeting in Las Pegasus, at the Baccarat table. Don't worry, sex addicts, there will also be hookers. And Blackjack.
...
Wait... Bubblegum... I've seen that picture, and that name, in a particular Discord chat. And why is he so young? Like, was he a caravan escort at age ten or something? Because... that could be a thing, I s'pose. Bucking Wasteland.
In general, interesting to get out of the initial setting even if it's not too surprising. As was clear immediately, Threnody has some issues. So... of course Blackjack is going to go try and solve them (particularly given their apparent source, which again... ugh). Help others to help yourself... and hey maybe she'll actually feel a little better about herself unless a whole bunch of people get killed for some reason. So... they probably will.
But speaking of 'Blackjack'... they all fail spy 101 here.
Before Blackjack can even say she's from nowhere particular they've talking about her being from a stable, and even mentioned 99... and that's not even counting the name drop. Bubblegum didn't have to be brilliant, just awake.
It was neat to see Pip and Tia, even if their circumstances are far from ideal (still the Wasteland, yes I know). Spike is... depressing, just because I remember the PH epilogue. Ah well.
Glad I got back to this... should be caught up before too much longer.
After reading Chapter 6 I can’t help but feel that it only exists because the author wanted to give Spike, Celestia and Littlepip a small cameo appearance. Mind you, that’s not a bad thing. Especially since the reasons why Blackjack wanted to see her made perfectly sense.
It’s easy to forget, but the Season 1 and parts of Season 2 still happened in this AU about ponies living in a post-apocalyptic wasteland full of raiders wanting to rape and/or murder you.
Dawwww….
Ok question for everyone who has read the original fic: From what I’ve heard, Littlepip was suffering from a lethal diseases and had to stay inside some sort of life-support-unit similar to Mr. House from New Vegas. So how is it, that she’s able to walk around and talk to ponies face to face? Is this something I got wrong or has her condition improved during the events of Project:Horizons?
Why I’m not surprised that Blackjack was more worried about being able to shoot things than not starving? On the bright side, they probably have enough ammunition to kill a whole raider clan and take their supplies for themselves.
No, not you to Glitter Bomb. You are so pure and innocent. Does really everyone in the Wasteland has to go through at least one traumatic experience before reaching adulthood?
This chapter really does a good job at portraying Blackjack as a veteran of the Wasteland, who has already survived many deadly encounters despite not being that much older than Threnody. It’s like she a complete different pony than the drunken, depressive mare we saw in the first chapters.
She also sort acts like a mentor to Threnody. Giving her advices but letting her make the decisions and following her lead. Only stepping in when necessary. Like in this case, making sure there aren’t a bunch of armed ponies hiding in the kitchen ready to ambush them.
I really like his design. There are so few bright-colored ponies in Fallout Equestria. Littlepip is grey, Velvet is light black, Calamity is brown and even Threnody’s colors are a dull brown. I got that having a bright green or pink coat isn’t good for surviving the wasteland, but I wish we had more characters that resemble the colorful equines from the show.
On top of that he’s a stallion. Even in FiM most stallions are either white, grey, brown or blue.
I also like that he’s not afraid to kill when necessary, but prefers to use non-lethal methods first. And using his special talent to weaponized chewing gum by creating glue grenades is simply amazing.
It's my headcanon that ponies have a period instead of getting into heat, too. Maybe it’s because I’ve seen far to many fanfictions – not even talking about clopfics or parodies – were mares in heat acting like they were no longer in control and force themselves on any stallion they came across.
He knows that she’s Blackjack! It’s obvious! She looks like Blackjack, she admitted that she was friends with Morning Glory and they talked about her being from a stable. It’s not that hard to put 1 and 1 together. Would also explain why agree to join their group, despite the risk of not getting paid. What better way to repay Glory’s act of kindness than helping her marefriend?
Sounds like a Batman dilemma: There’s a horrible person who has hurt people and will continue to hurt people. The only way to stop that person is to kill her. Are you willing to lose your innocent and kill that person or are you keeping her alive which could hurt even more people?
That’s a not an easy choice and there’s no answer that feels right. Maybe Threnody will find a better option? Maybe she will accept that sometimes bad people have to die to protect others? While I still don’t agree with Blackjack putting all that pressure on her, she’s right about on thing: It’s a choice only Threnody can make.
Imagine if Threnody had done that three or four chapters ago. The thought of not kissing her wouldn’t even have crossed Blackjack’s mind. She would’ve just done it, followed by an offer to have sex. Guess that’s a sign how strong her friendship with Threnody has become, already.
Overall chapter 6 and 7 were a lot more lighthearted than the previous ones. Which isn’t a bad thing. You need some happy moments in a story. Let’s see how long they last.
Once I found out Heartshine studied psychology, I paid attention to Blackjack more and can see her diagnosises. Some of. Shes still a pony that has gone through more than a pony ever should.
Threnody just became the player in fallout. Blackjack became an NPC. An NPC with the game on peaceful mode. NPC gets op. Now it's impossible to get hurt thanks to the game on peaceful mode.
Ah yes, the thrice killed groomer living up to her name, a band vulnerable party members with the oldest being 15, and constantly making moves on them even though she's twice their age. she's my favorite OC though I don't know about this part of the story. Feels weird to be honest. Some of the dialog feels off as well, like it's trying to capture the edge of horizon, but it's hard to do without coming off as edgey for edge sake.