) and I've put it off many times, so, I'm putting it out to all of you.
Feb
5th
2016
Alterations to Screwball? · 1:14am Feb 5th, 2016
I recently received a comment on It's a Screwed Up Life and, i honestly want to know...
Would you rather Screwball be the real Screwball and not a human trapped in Screwball's body, or would you rather it stay the way it is?
The commenter also pointed out something i did for a laugh, but now realize it really doesn't fit properly, so changed those parts a bit.
So, my question is, do you feel a human being stuck in Screwball is the best way to keep the story going or would you rather i go back and rewrite it so that it is indeed just Screwball having properly woken up after Discord infused her with Choas Magic?
Ps. I'm in a really good mood today. Finally got our internet protection working again
I Like it as it is
Leave it. One reader not liking it is not the End of the World. Even if everyone hated it, it's still your story. Do what you want.
I like it how you already have it
Could always do both? As in, have the mind Discord put into her have been copied from a human, but she's actually the real pony. Could make for some drama should she ever figure out how to go to Earth only to find herself/himself still there.
Continue as is and use the other path for another story later.
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I agree with you on this but in case you're (Autumn breeze) not up to doing both sides just keep it as is plain and simple
I'm inclined to agree with everyone else in this regard, keep the story as is. I'm sorry to those that don't like it too much as it is, but I think that there are far more people that like it this way.
Leave it as is. Story is great
Keep the story like it is... Or if you are bored just create a second story like a AU with that posibility
Suggestions:
1.
Having Screwball, just be Screwball would improve the story. No doubt about it.
2.
The other thing I didn't like was her hospitalizing DT with extreme diarrhea. Giving someone explosive diarrhea on purpose isn't a prank. Here's a hint, if the person who is being "pranked" ends up in a hospital... it isn't a prank (It's assault). Pranks are supposed to be harmless fun that confuses someone, fools them in someway. Like making them think they saw a ghost, see a pig fly, cartoon physics in real life, etc, etc. Then reveal what really happened so they can get a laugh as well. It's supposed to be a joke that both parties can enjoy.
Allot of prank ideas are really just people being malicious to each other (there is not joke, it's just someone getting enjoyment from the suffering of others). The misuse of the term is a pet peeve of mine.
3.
The only other suggestion is to get rid of her foreknowledge of future events. It completely gets rid of narrative tension and makes her a Mary Sue. (Not only is she near omnipotent, she also knows the future!) Having the character deal with events and ponies causing some things to go better and worse is what makes things interesting.
Hope this helps.
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I rather enjoy the story as it is besides if you changed it I feel like it makes all of your past efforts wasted...
It's fine as it is.
I could have gone either way, myself; the important - well, most important - bit is that Screwball was once Lilac, and building from there.
The foreknowledge doesn't bother me, and it helps the character have some form of goal while still enjoying being a child... I wouldn't have minded if Screwball had been created from Lilac's body and Discord's power, or having used a human from a world were FiM doesn't exist (or the human didn't know much beyond "it's a thing"), however.
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Still doesn't change the fact that putting laxatives into someone's food isn't a prank. It is as much a prank as punching someone. "Look at them! They're in pain! Ha Ha!"
kep it as it is. its just fine as it is
keep it as is
I say just keep it the way it is.
Please leave it as is
Omg...just ignore those people. Just because they want it one way doesnt mean you have to do it thst way...and if they dont like it, then they don't have to read it. So just keep if as it is. It's your story, not theirs.
I've noticed you have this tendency to change, or even re-write stories, just because a few people complain about a few things in the story. I highly recommend you don't do that.
Seeing what people say about your story is great. But its never good to just change things because of a few. if you had lots of downvotes and angry people in comments, that's when you should step back and really see what they are talking about.
As it stands you have 268 likes to 19 dislikes. That tells me almost all of your readers are happy with your story the way it is.
It's like your story 'Living Nightmare' I really liked the original version, I was ok with the first change, and now... its no longer a favorite story of mine and I wish I had saved the old version... the version I initially liked.
Stay human.
Don't be THAT guy.
You should leave it as it is. If you give in to the readers and change things then it is no longer an artistic expression of your imagination. It becomes more of a vessel for other peoples vanity. I know that I personally enjoy the story as it is.
keep it how it is
Keep it as it is. Changing it would take too much time, events taking place because of Screwballs current foreknowledge would have to be changed and it's a bit late for the change overall. If you yourself want to write the story without human interaction, the wisest choice would be to write it as a separate story.
as it is
It depends on moral that you want to show us. Your story have different plot development lines: Screw`s relationships with family, Screw`s life in society. I think human mind is best for her, because it has social experience, knowledge that you need to make her interesting. Also, story lacks proper intrigue and conflict, its good to question lack of this things, rather then character.
Out of everybody to comment on this thread, two said change. Every other person said keep (including me), think we want you to keep it m8.
Shiny and Chrome
Keep as is
Honestly? I really, really like it as-is. I'm mainly in this story due to the fact of it's a human being Screwball. Not to mention, think of all the joke you would have to take out
3733808 I agree this "prank" somehow went a bit to far for my taste, whatever the reason was, and whatever was just because of her mother.
However I don´t think you have to change the story, I say keep it.
It seems that Leave as it is options wins by a landslide.
You should totally leave the story as it is.
You have written it already, the story is set, an changing elements might confuse the reader and even start incoherent stuff (for example, screwball's reaction to the wacky timeline of Equestria not being related to the episodes). So if you want the character to become 100% screwball, make him become it instead (you can make him progessively forget he was human for example) or start another fiction.
Please leave it the way it is. I don't think theirs any reason it needs to be changed.