Public Nudity Cancelled · 8:51pm Jun 16th, 2015
If you haven't read the previous blog, go read it. That has pretty much all the reasons why.
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/499343/i-just-need-to-say-this
Here's a few more details. A quote that constantly stuck out to me while I was writing the sequel was "I hate it when a sequel ruins the orginal story." That was my biggest fear for this. Although I doubt Public Nudity ruined Anatomy, it certainly wasn't good enough to follow up. As a number of people noticed, it simply had a lot of flaws. Instead of just listing them off, I'll actually tell you why it was flawed (Once again, I recommend reading the previous blog since that has most of the reasons).
Other than knowing I wouldn't be able to live up to the prequel, I didn't have much motivation to write the sequel. I started it because of the readers, not me. I knew people wanted one, so I gave them one without much heart in it. If you're a writer, then I imagine you know where this leads. The two chapters that were posted were mediocre and rushed because I wasn't trying very hard. The only motivation was giving something for people to enjoy. When I post a chapter and wonder "I hope it turned out alright" instead of "I can't wait to see what they say," then there's definitely a problem.
Simply put, I don't like Public Nudity. I'm happier now that it's gone.
So Public Nudity is cancelled. Even now, I don't have much motivation to write some sort of sequel, not that I have any idea of what it would be about. As I said, I've done everything I can with the premise already. Now, I'm not going to get your hopes up. I'm not going to say that there will be a sequel eventually. I'm content with leaving Anatomy as the stellar one-off I originally intended. The idea of a mediocre fic being linked to it disgusts me. The only way there would be a sequel is if I get a good idea and the motivation to do it right.
I'm sorry if you liked the sequel or just wanted a sequel in general. Honest. But I can't write for the readers only. I need to be in it too or else I'll never be happy with the end result. This isn't the first time I've thrown out a story that readers liked, and I doubt it'll be the last. I hope it is the last, but I guarantee nothing.
Sorry for putting out a story then taking it back, especially if you were hyped for it. But I feel better this way, and I hope you'll understand.
On another note, I deleted the story entirely. But I never liked the idea of leaving it gone completely. So I'm posting it here, all two chapters.
It's Just a Beach!
“Music? Check.”
“Cheese puffs? Check.”
“Parents?”
She cupped her hand around her ear, smiling with a grin that could only be described as devilish.
“…Not check. Just the way I like it!”
Rainbow launched herself across her bed, landing back first and her head on the pillow. “Ah…” she sighed, slipping her hands under her head. “Weekends are nice…”
If the girl were asked what could be better than chillaxing at home with no parents to nag at her, she’d have no answer. Well, other than the Wonderbolts. Nothing is better than the Wonderbolts.
As she rocked her head to the beat, Rainbow reclined deeper into her pillow, only to jump as her phone decided now would be the perfect time to ring. “Ugh, what?” she said as she pulled it to her face. “…Oh, right. Twilight wants everyone to get together. Sweet.” She rattled off a descriptive “k” before shuffling back into her playlist.
Yeah, we haven’t gotten together as much now that school’s out, huh? No more studying… Rainbow thought, chuckling at the memories of their sessions together. She paused for a moment, drawing a thoughtful expression across her face. She glanced around for a moment, as if expecting someone, before reaching to her the hem of her shirt, fingering it between her thumb and pointer.
The girl let out a blend of a sigh and a giggle. For someone who’d been terrified of exposing herself almost all her life, the fact that she enjoyed the freedom of losing her clothes came to her as a surprise more than anyone else—not that many people knew. Rainbow rolled her eyes at the thought.
Well, what’s the chance that they’d come home early? Rainbow thought, already pulling the shirt collar over her head. Tossing it to the floor, she set off for her pajama bottoms which soon met the same wrinkled fate. The girl glanced down at herself, halfway to buck naked, but she just smirked in a way that could only say, “Yeah, I know I look good.” Reaching behind to grasp for her bra, she—
“Dashie?”
Rainbow’s eyes shot open. “Fu—” she swore, before slapping a hand over her mouth. Seriously?! They did come home early? If she had been timing herself, Rainbow would’ve set a personal best for how fast she could move. Clothes on and adjusted in seconds, she called back the usual “hey!” to her parents. Then she crumpled across the bed, face meeting palm.
“Ugh…” she moaned. “I swear. Every. Single. Time!” She threw her arms out, helpless as one landed on her pillow and the other dangled off the bedside. Whining in her best Rarity impression, she cried, “I can’t help having urges to strip naked!”
“Did you say something dear?” her mother called from across the house.
“Nothing!”
Ugh, how is it that someone else’s house is the only place that’s safe? My own home is out of the question. She grumbled. It’s not like there’s anywhere else I can… can… Her face went blank, staring at an idea, before a creeping smile played its way onto her lip. “I wonder…” she said, snatching up her phone.
In a few minutes, her smile had evolved into a mad grin and her idea had blossomed into a plan. Pulling up Twilight in her contacts list, her fingers blurred as she shot off a text.
“I wonder if Twilight likes beaches…”
“And there she is…” she said, watching the car pull into the space beside her. “Hey, Twilight!”
The driver-side window rolled down, revealing one beaming egghead at the wheel. “Hello, Rainbow! Wow, it’s been awhile.”
“I know! Good seeing you again. I know we haven’t seen each as much ever since school got out,” Rainbow said. “Hey, cool of you to come out by the way. I didn’t know if you’d be okay with—”
“Hel-lo sunrays!” a voice chirped just in time for the rear door to kick open. Out strode a purple-haired girl dressed in a cover-up that just so barely kept her decent. “I do love the beach!” Rarity sing-songed. “The sound of the waves are so relaxing. Oh, nothing’s better than reading a book while catching a tan. I daresay I could use some time in the sun.”
“Tan?” a second, country-tinged voice said before stepping out. Applejack rolled her eyes. “Rares, you’re as pale as a marshmallow.”
“Pale?” She scoffed, turning her head away with a flick of her hair. “I’m not pale, I’m fair-skinned. Pale implies I don’t go out in the sun.”
Applejack shrugged. “Whatever you say.”
“Hmph. Now, could you hand me my bag? I need my sunscreen lest I get a nasty burn.”
Twilight giggled at the banter between her friends. “Yup, it’s definitely been too long. Now what were you saying, Rain… bow?”
Rainbow didn’t answer, instead busy staring into her friends’ souls with the intensity only a mortified teenage girl could achieve.
Twilight cocked her head. “You okay? You look like you’ve seen a ghost. And as pale as Rarity is, she’s not a ghost.”
A squeak popped out of the athlete’s mouth.
“Uh, really. You okay? You might want to close your mouth before a fly—”
Rainbow slapped herself. Blinking into a focus, she locked onto her friend. “Twilight! What have you done?!”
“Huh? What are you talking about?”
“Why did you invite Rarity and AJ?!”
“Well, Pinkie was busy with work, and Fluttershy says she doesn’t like beaches.”
“What?!”
“I know! Poor Flutters has always been uncomfortable with them, huh? ‘Too many people that could be staring at you in your swim wear.’ Remember when we had that swimming unit in P.E.?”
Rainbow’s eye twitched.
“…You don’t remember? Well, as soon as we stepped out of that locker room—mmph!” she said before a hand clamped over her mouth. Leaning down to eye level until their faces were only inches apart, Rainbow slowly shook her head, never breaking eye contact. “Twilight. That’s not what I meant.”
“Mmphm?”
“No, it’s not. I wanted to know why the hay you invited them! This was supposed to be just us!”
She pushed Rainbow’s hand away. “What do you mean just us? Weren’t we texting about all of us getting together?”
“I… Oh.”
“Uh-huh. Then you sent some address and said, ‘Let’s hit this beach harder than it’s ever been hit before!’ What was I supposed to think?”
Rainbow sighed. “Ugh, I don’t know. I just… Wait, did you say ‘some address?’”
“Uh, yes?”
“Don’t you know where we are?”
“A beach?”
“Yes, but it’s not just any beach! This is a nud—”
“OH DEAR GODDESSES!”
The two girls froze, eyes darting to the sight of Rarity halfway to the shore, just as frozen as they were. Applejack stood behind her, head darting back and forth as if she was watching a tennis game.
“…Rainbow?”
“Yeah, Twi?”
“What kind of beach is this?”
“A nudist beach.”
Twilight gulped. “Dear goddesses.”
“I know.”
The two glanced at each other. “Now I see why this was supposed to be just the two of us.”
Rainbow’s head hit the side of the car. Oh no, she thought. She couldn’t help but wonder…Would today take the record for the most awkward day of her life?
“RAINBOW! WHERE THE HAY HAVE YOU TAKEN US?” Rarity shrieked as she sprinted back to the car, righteous fury burning in her eyes.
Oh no…
It's Just Being Naked with Friends!
“Rainbow?” Twilight whispered, watching the she-demon known as Rarity set a death march toward them.
“Yeah, Twi?”
“You are so screwed.”
“I know.”
“Rainbow!” Rarity shrieked as she closed in on her prey.
The athlete let out a dry laugh. Holding out her hands in front of her, she said, “Now, Rarity, there’s a perfectly logical explanation for—”
Rarity gripped Rainbow’s shoulders, pushing her backward.
“…this…” She gulped. “Okay, I know you’re upset.”
“What could have possibly given you the idea?”
“Lucky guess?” Rarity narrowed her eyes, prompting Rainbow to shoot a glance to her other two friends. “Hey, a little help here?”
Twilight and Applejack took one look at Rarity, then each other, and finally back to Rainbow.
“I think you’ve got this under control,” Twilight said, nodding her head.
“Couldn’t agree more,” Applejack added.
“Oh wow! Great friends you are! I’m being assaulted and you two just stand and watch!”
Rarity rolled her eyes before backing away, releasing the helpless girl from her grip. “Fine. Perhaps I’m being a bit unladylike. But I demand to know what kind of game you’re playing, Rainbow Dash! Why are there… there… Oh, I can’t ever bear to say it,” she said, throwing her arm across her forehead as she swooned.
Rainbow frowned. She glanced at Twilight, only to see her friend appearing no better. “So yeah…”
“Well?” Rarity said, crossing her arms.
“Explaining time?”
“Yes. Applejack and I would very much appreciate it.”
“Whoa, hey!” the farm girl said. “Don’t drag me into this! …But I wouldn’t mind an explanation for why we’re at a nudist beach.”
Rainbow nodded. Okay, I can do this… I hope. After taking a deep breath, she started. “So… I suppose you’re all wondering why I’ve gathered you here today.”
Silence.
“…Well… you see… I… uh…” The girl cringed as she looked away, trying to hide the blush on her cheeks. Dangit, Rainbow! Now’s not the time to get embarrassed… em-bare-assed—No! No bad puns now! Focus! Shooting off a glance, Rainbow noted each of her friends’ reactions. Anxiety gripped at Twilight’s face, Applejack appeared like she wanted to be anywhere but here, and Rarity had to be outright indignant about the whole ordeal. Oh goddesses, I can’t tell them I’m practically a nudist! And I definitely can’t pin this on Twilight and spill that her whole family’s full of them. Think, Rainbow, think!
Then, inspiration struck. From the depths of Rainbow’s mind, different scenarios played out. What if I…
“Surprise!” Rainbow shouted, throwing her arms into the air. “I totally got you guys, huh?”
Rarity stared deadpan at her. “Rainbow,” she began, her voice dripping with faux calmness, “Are you implying that this is all just a…”
“A prank? You bet! And I totally got you guys! Haha… ha?”
No one shared on her laughter. In particular, Rarity stamped her foot. With a flip of the bird, she trudged right back to the bus stop.
“…I’ll be honest with you, RD,” Applejack said. “You’ve done way better pranks than this. Besides, Twilight wanted us all to get together and have a good time, not this.” Shrugging, she set off after Rarity, settling down next to her.
The athlete whipped around to Twilight, but she had nothing to say. “I guess that’s that? I really don’t know else we can do.” Finally, the last of her friends left her, leaving Rainbow to stand alone.”
Rainbow gasped in silence as she finished picturing scene. No, no! I don’t want it to be all down and mopey. There’s no fun in that, and It’ll take forever for us to live it down. Come on, there has to be a better way to get out of this. Just think!
Now, what if I…
Rainbow contorted her face into the best look of confusion she had. “Wait, wait, wait. Applejack, did you say nudist beach?”
“Uh, that I did.”
“Oh, is that the problem? I didn’t know this was one of those beaches.”
It is said that the sound of Twilight’s facepalm could be heard for miles.
Rarity threw out her arms in a “seriously?” fashion. “You didn’t know this was a nude beach?”
“Nope. Totally didn’t.”
“How could you not know? You were the one who found this beach when you sent the address to Twilight, didn’t you?”
“Uh… Eheh, would you believe me if I thought it was a place to sell clothes?”
The look on Rarity’s face answered no.
“Actually, that’s why I choose it! I knew you would love it here. Yeah!”
“…What?”
“You work at a boutique, and that sells clothes all the time!”
“You thought I’d love a beach dedicated to prancing around without clothes?”
“Well…” Rainbow said, nodding with the smile of a genius. “I don’t know how often you prance around without clothes, but I bet it’s a lot more than you tell us.”
“…”
“…”
“Rainbow?”
“Yeah?”
“You’re an idiot.”
“I know.”
That’s even worse! she cried. The girl didn’t even bother stealing a glance at her friends. She knew her silence was about to become too long. She needed an answer, and fast. Think, you idiot, think like you’re social life depends on it! Because it does!
What if I…
“You see…” Rainbow said as a sly smirk ran across her lips. “This was step one in my master plan.”
No one responded, instead interested in just what her “master plan” was.
Rainbow walked around to Twilight and threw her arm around her shoulder. “Why, the plan for us to have a mind blowing foursome of course!”
“Excuse me?!”
“What in tarnation?!”
“I beg your pardon?!”
Rainbow nodded, trying not expose her shamelessness. “T-that’s right! Heck, even Twilight’s in on it. Right?”
“What? No—”
“Always the kidder, huh Twi?”
She shook her head, but Rainbow would have none of that. With a wink, she slipped her hand behind Twilight’s head and pushed away the gap between them, locking their lips together.
“Mmph?!” Twilight said, eyes bulging from shock. “Mmhm! Mmhmph!”
Rainbow, however, pushed deeper into the kiss. She pitted her tongue against Twilight’s as she tried to tune out the sound of her friend’s muffled screaming.
Rainbow blinked. “Whoa… Where did that come from?”
“What was that?”
“Nothing.”
Rarity huffed. “Rainbow, are you going to explain yourself or not?”
Realizing her time had run out, the athlete turned toward her friends again, wearing defeat on her face. “Yeah. I am. Here goes…” Drawing in a breath, she said, “This is all a misunderstanding. You weren’t supposed to come here.”
Their faces softened a bit at the words but still held confusion. “So what happened?” Applejack asked, speaking the question on everyone’s mind.
Rainbow glanced at Twilight and received a nod in return. Alright then, Twi. R.I.P in peace my dignity. “I… knew this what kind of beach this was when I sent the address, but you two weren’t supposed to come. It was supposed to be just Twi and me.”
“…Say what?”
Trying to fight back the rosy blush on threatening to spill across her cheeks, Rainbow replied. “Um, something happened between us back when school was in session.”
Rarity cocked her head as she her face became unreadable. “Oh? And what would that happen to be?”
“We… uh. You see, we’re…”
With a smirk tinging her lips, Rarity decided it would be a great idea to help her friend out and finish for her. “Would the word be… dating?”
And that was what slapped Rainbow into focus.
“What?!” she cried. “Dating?! No, no, no! We are not dating!”
“Then why are you blushing, dear?”
Because my mind decided to fantasize about making out with my best friend. “Because you think we’re dating when we totally aren’t! Geez, you sound like Twilight’s brother…” She sighed. “Okay, I’ll admit I made it sound like I was trying to say that, but that’s not what’s going on. Honest.”
“Well, okay then,” Rarity responded with a hint of disappointment. “Then what is going on between you two?”
“We’re nudists.”
For the second time within a few minutes, silence reigned supreme.
Applejack shook her head. “Care to repeat? I don’t think I heard you right.”
“We’re nudists.”
“Huh. Looks like I did hear you right after all.”
“Hold the show!” Rarity interjected, waving her pointer finger between Rainbow and Twilight. “You two are…? What? How did this ever happen?”
“Long story short, I arrived at Twilight’s house to study, found out her family were nudists, and after the most awkward moments of my life, decided to join them.”
Rarity’s mouth blubbered between shut and agape a few seconds before she shook her head. “You’ve got to be joking. Twilight? Her family? Oh, I know. This is a joke, isn’t it? One of your immature pranks.”
“What? No, I’m telling the…”
“It’s not a prank,” Twilight said, setting her hand down on Rarity’s shoulder. “She’s telling the truth. We really are nudists. It just happened.”
The fashionista went silent, eyes darting between Twilight and Rainbow in search of some kind if indication this really was a prank. An elaborate, shocking prank. A prank that… that…
“Oh, what the hay?!” Rarity shrieked. “You two are serious, aren’t you? I-I’m appalled. ‘It just happened.’ How can something like this just happen?”
Twilight shrugged, helpless to provide any viable answer. “I was just… brought up that way.”
Rarity frowned. “This is just absurd. No, it’s indecent. To think that you two consider exposing yourselves in such a casual manner.”
Oh boy… Rainbow thought. She shot a look to Twilight and guessed that she was thinking the same thing. That is if her biting her lip said anything.
“Ugh, I believe we crossed the ‘too much information’ line some time ago,” Rarity muttered. After taking a moment to readjust herself, she toward the street. “If you don’t mind, I’m ready to put this nonsense behind us. Sorry our little gathering didn’t work out, Twilight. Perhaps another time.” With a shrug, she set off toward the street.
“Uh, Rares? Where do you think you’re headin’?”
“To the bus, of course. I’m not planning on—” She froze, eyes expanding to saucers as she faced the sight of the empty street in front of her. “Oh, right,” she muttered. “It left.”
She pivoted on her heels, taking a second to stare into each of her friends’ eyes. “We’re stuck here,” she said.
“Eeyup,” Applejack said.
Rarity turned her staring to the farmer, never once blinking. “We’re stuck at a nude beach.”
“I know.”
“…”
“Rares? You—”
She shrieked. “OF ALL THE WORST, POSSIBLE THINGS…”
“This is the worst, possible thing that could happen?” Rainbow suggested.
“Indeed,” she sighed. “Twilight, when’s the next bus?”
“Considering that this route isn’t used very often for some reason… half an hour?”
Rarity might have well died right there. “If anyone needs me,” she said, pointing out her hand, “I’ll be sitting on that bench for the next half hour. With a little luck, I’ll catch a tan anyway.” And off she went.
The three remaining friends shared a glance. “So what now?” Rainbow asked, rubbing the back of her head.
“Well,” Twilight started, turning to Applejack, “If you want to wait with Rarity, I’d understand.”
“Uh-huh. But what about you and Rainbow?”
“What do you mean?” she asked, cocking her head.
“Well, would you two wait with us or go… out there? I-I mean, not that it matters to me. You do whatever you want.”
Rainbow raised an eyebrow. “Applejack, is there something you’d like to say?”
“What?” she replied, voice jumping a note too high. “Something to say? Why, that’s just right silly! What would I have to say… about…?” She trailed off, noticing the stares heading her way.
[i[I wonder… Rainbow wrapped her arm around Applejack’s shoulder, drawing her close.
“Uh, Rainbow? What are you—”
“Hush now, AJ,” she said, her voice merely a soothing whisper. “I know what you’re going through.”
“Now what are you going on about?”
“Don’t worry. I’ve been there before. There’s a lot of confusing thoughts in your head, and you’re just looking for some guidance.”
“I have no idea what you’re talking about.”
“Want to join us on the beach?”
Applejack gasped. “Did you just ask me to…?”
Rainbow released her friend with a small laugh. “Ask you to join us on the nude beach? Yes, I did. But really, you can keep your clothes on if it makes you more comfortable. Same goes for us.” Taking a glance at themselves, Rainbow noted that, unlike Rarity’s skimpy cover up, they all wore similar clothing. Shirts and shorts of different lengths, with Applejack being the most covered of all of them.
Applejack stood as silent as she was flabbergasted. The closest she got to forming a word was promptly opening and shutting her mouth.
“Twilight, I think I broke her,” Rainbow said.
“I hope you brought the duct tape.”
“Now hold up!” Applejack said. “What makes you think I wanna go out there? Rainbow?”
“Just a hunch,” she said, giving a shrug. “I had a feeling you were thinking the same stuff I was. If I’m wrong, feel free to call me a dunderhead.”
“Dunderhead!”
“So I was wrong?”
Applejack furrowed her brow, ready to set her friend right, but hesitated. Crossing her arms, she said, “Alright. I’ll admit I’m curious. But only curious! Don’t expect me to start runnin’ around buck naked or anythin’!”
“So is that a yes?”
The farmer sighed. “Oh to hay with it. What’s that think Pinkie always says? You only live once? Well I’ve got a sayin’ too, and it’s ‘you gotta try everythin’ at least once.’”
“That’s awfully wise of you,” Twilight added.
“Yeah, well…” Applejack chuckled. “My ma would use it when I wouldn’t eat my veggies. I think it works well with just about anythin’. Hopefully this here beach too.”
“That’s the spirit! Why don’t we get this show on the road?”
Twilight shook her head. “Wait, what about Rarity?”
“Right. Erm… I’ll talk to her in a second.” She flashed a confident smirk. “Just leave it to the Dash! She’ll be right beside us in no time!”
Applejack couldn’t help but chuckle. “Oh geez, you have no idea what you’re up against.”
“We’ll see about that! Now, why don’t you two go on ahead? I’ll see about Rarity.”
“Alright.”
“Sounds fine to me.”
With a mock salute, Rainbow jogged off to her friend. She cast a glance over her shoulder, seeing that Applejack and Twilight were picking up their beach bags and setting off for the shore line. Judging from the way their mouths moved, Rainbow assumed they were talking. This could be really really good or really really bad, she thought. There's no in between.
“Hey, Rarity!” she called.
The fashionista looked up from novel before pushing her glasses back. Sitting up sitting up straight, she said, “Yes, Rainbow?”
“Oh, nothing. Just wanted to hang with my best friend.”
She narrowed her eyes. “You’re up to something.”
“What?! Don’t tell me it’s a crime to be with the people you care about!”
“Sure. Where’s Applejack and Twilight? They aren’t with you.”
“Oh, them?” Rainbow said, waving off her hand. “They just decided to go on ahead to the beach.”
Surprise flashed across Rarity’s face. “Applejack went with her? But she’s not into nudity.”
“She’s curious. But personally, I doubt she’ll lose the clothes. Maybe next time though.”
“Next time?!”
“Yeah, I’m getting ahead of myself. But you know what she said? You should try everything at least once. Wise words, don’t you think?”
“Oh, I see what you’re planning! You want me to join you and Twilight in your… fetish. Not. Happening.”
Rainbow rolled her eyes. “It’s not a… Wait, do you hear that?”
“…I do.” Rarity gasped. “Could it be the bus already? Sounds like something big is coming down the road.”
Holding her hand above her brow, Rainbow’s eyes scanned the road until settling on a pickup truck cruising toward them. “Looks like it’s just a truck,” she said, causing Rarity to groan in disappointment. “Wait a minute… Huh, that’s odd.”
“Unless it’s a taxi cab in disguise, I don’t care.”
“No. It’s full of teenage boys. I see a lot from our school.”
Rarity cocked her head. “Really? Why would they be coming to a…”
The two girls locked into each other’s faces, as a mix of shock and mortification flew between them. “Those perverts!” Rarity shrieked. “They came her just to creep on girls!”
“Wow…” Rainbow shook her head. “Hey, how long do you think it’ll take for me to drive them off the beach? I bet I can teach ‘em a—”
“A lesson? Heavens no! You mustn’t let them see you!” Rarity said, tugging Rainbow away by the sleeve of her shirt. “Come on, we need to get out of sight.”
“Huh? Why?”
With an exasperated sigh, she said, “Because we’re at a nude beach, darling. Can you imagine what would happen to out reputations should they find us here?”
“I… I guess that makes sense.”
“Exactly. Now come along.”
Once behind the safety of a tree trunk, the two girls, peeked around, each on a different side. “What are we going to do?” Rainbow asked.
“Give me a moment to think, please… Huh, is that a girl with them? She just got out of the driver’s seat.”
“A girl?”
“Indeed. Looks like she’s in charge judging by the look of… Oh my goddesses, that’s Lyra!”
“What?”
Rarity stamped her foot. “Oh, I knew she was a lesbian! Wait until the girls at the spa hear about this.”
“Rarity,” Rainbow said, “Le’s be honest. Is that really important right now. We have a group of teenage boys and Lyra hunting people like us down. What are we going to do?”
“Erm… Wait here for the bus to arrive. Then we’ll sneak on without them noticing… Say, how did you get here anyway?”
“Magic.”
Rarity rolled her eyes. “Next you’ll be saying unicorns are real. So we’ll just wait here and... Oh no…”
“What now?”
“Twilight and Applejack. I have no doubt those miscreants will find them if we do nothing.”
Rainbow nodded. “I’m guessing leaving them behind is out of the question.”
“Of course.” Taking a moment to readjust her cover up once again, Rarity pointed toward the beach. “You need to find them. Hopefully before they do.”
“Me? You’re coming too!”
“But-but… Oh, why do I have to be such a good friend? Ugh, let’s go.”
“Right behind you.”
DAMMIT! I WAS ACTUALLY ENJOYING IT MORE THAN THE ANATOMY STORY!
I understand.
3154838 same bruh
Oh. Well, that's your decision. Sorry this turned out as you feared.
What a shame, but I commend you for taking a wise decision
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I was enjoying it just as much.
But... I never got to read it.
3154941 It's posted here in the blog if you want to look at it.
Well, I'd be lying if I said I wasn't disappointed, but I getcha. I know it can get hard to put a lot of effort into something that other people want more than you do.
I was kinda looking forward to the next chapters of this, just because I liked the other one so much. I mean, the sequel may not have been on PAR or better than the first one, but I really like these kinds of stories, because they show that after the main conflict, life still continues, and the characters have to learn how to deal with their lives now after having dealt with that conflict. I've always loved how stories like this have made an expansion on the world we already knew and given us more of an understanding of the characters in these kinds of situations. Whether or not the sequel would've been better or the same quality as the first one really wasn't crucial for me to like it. I was just excited to see how this story would expand from the first one.
Anyway, although I'm disappointed to see it go so soon, I understand why you did it, and I still look forward to more stories from you
Keep hangin in there :)
If you want to take another shot at a sequel, you could try what someone pointed out in the comments - bridge from where the first story left off to where Rainbow would be comfortable enough with her own nudity to invite Twilight out to a nude beach. The fact that there was so much missing in between there is partly what made it not work so well.
Shame. I was looking forward to this sequel but I understand. With the first two chapters I was more invested in where it was going rather than the chapters themselves and if I was leading up to something that you believed you'd struggle writing then maybe it's for the best.
... Could have at least left it on the site as an actual story and just used the Cancelled tag...
Sometimes we have to make hard decisions, both for ourselves, and for our works. This was just one of those times. If an artist feels like their work is going to suffer, they sometimes have to make hard decisions to avoid that. If you were worried that Nudity might damage Anatomy, then it was your call to make, regardless of how some of the fans might feel.
I can certainly understand where you're coming from. I'm having similar troubles myself.
3155112 I never liked how that looks. It's just ugly looking to me, and I'd rather have it out of the way.
I've lost all faith in this site. Everyone's cancelling perfectly good stories that the readers enjoy just because "It's got too much to live up to".
Honestly, the sequels are usually better. It gives the author a chance to learn. But, if you wanna throw that all away, fine. Just know that you've wasted your time now.
From one writer to another, I know the feeling of people clamoring for a sequel to an already finished fic. You can't really force those things out. I tried one, got a few chapters in, it blew up in my face. I _could_ have gone on to write it, but it just felt wrong. Don't give into that pressure. Write what you feel good writing and enjoy it. It's a hobby, not work that you do for others.
About the premise itself in your sequel. It had promise, but it went too far too fast. You might have had something new to add to the picture, but mostly it would have, as you said, been a repeat of Anatomy, except with RD trying to convince AJ and Rarity into it. I think RD and Twily would have been enough for the visit to the nudist beach in and of themselves, having fun, talking about stuff, RD realizing how relaxed she was getting with no clothes. Maybe having conflicted feelings about seeing different people going nude at the beach etc. Dancing on the edge of sexy vs. natural.
With the friends, it wouldn't probably have worked. Adding the antagonists/drama from the group of boys coming to the beach would have ruined the fic, so I'm happy it didn't end up continuing from there. Unless it all ended up in a gigantic orgy on the beach, which would have been fun. Not a good story, but, you know, good pervy fun.
If you want to write more in this erm... nudeverse, consider dialing it back a bit. There is a seed of romance in RD and Twily's relationship. Or does it stay as a friendship? Do they have different feelings? Stuff like that.
Also would get a laugh out of them falling through the portal and ending up as nude ponies in Equestria, or ponies coming to the EqG universe and wanting to be without clothes etc. Let's face it, Equestria is a nudist country.
OR! Write something totally different. I've read your works from a lot of genres and I know you're not limited to awkward teenager comedy. I'll be waiting for your next story!
3155202 As said in the blogs, it's a lot more than just not being able to live up to the prequel. The story itself would be flawed even if it didn't have something to live up to. Yes, I know I've wasted my time, but I'm also sorry for wasting yours.
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Please, they'd fall through the portal and end up as the only clothed ponies in Equestria.
Thanks for understanding about the whole ordeal. It's funny that after all we've written, we still make silly mistakes like this. Just the way it is.
Darn it, I understand why you chose to do this, and I'm sorry, but I'm still pretty sad cause I was liking where this was going, especially after finishing 'It's Just Anatomy' (I was hooked and wanted more).
Can you please at least tell me how this story was going to end? To hopefully get some kind of closure?
Also, does this mean you've stopped writing at all on this general theme (Nudism)? Cause there already isn't very many out there, at least, none that I could find.
3155272 Everyone ends up naked. Oh, and Big Macintosh somehow gets involved. He's also naked. Never planned how it would go exactly.
I could write more in the future, but I guarantee nothing. I do have an idea for a similar story, but it's not related to this series and more serious. If you need a nudity fic fix, you may want to click here.
Awww
But I totally understand. Sometimes, you just don't feel like a story is right...and there's nothing you can really do except pull the plug.
3155293 I'm already in that group, but thanks anyway
I know how this feels and I am sorry that it happened to you. Chalk it up as a learning experience and move on that's all I can say as a fellow writer.
If you are going to write, it has to be for the correct reasons. I respect your decision.
Aww, I wanted more naked silliness
I think you should try again. The sequel wasn't going quite as well as the original, but I was still enjoying it. And even if you didn't like it at all, that doesn't mean that the topic has been entirely played out.
I agree with a lot of what these two said.
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The biggest mistake was having Rainbow's naked fun time get interrupted before it started. That would have made a great scene to just watch her in her natural state for a while and see how she's adapting to the nudist lifestyle since the previous story. Heck, maybe go with the "show don't tell" style and start with her first opportunity to run around naked since the previous story. Maybe the excitement of being naked makes her horny and it turns M rated... that's another fun direction you could go with it.
For a beach trip, it might have worked better to have just Twilight and Rainbow go so it doesn't take so long to get to the action. They could have some fun, get Rainbow thinking that nudism is the greatest thing ever, and then have something bad happen. Maybe the boys from school show up and tease them, or Rainbow goes wandering on her own and ends up at a non-nudist beach, or just accidentally offends someone... something to break the magic and make her upset, to spur the discussion of the pros and cons of nudism. And all the while, keep kindling the romance between Rainbow and Twilight.
Bringing Applejack and Rarity in pretty much guarantees that there will be some repetition of the previous story's themes, although that's ok too. It's fun to see how different people respond to similar situations. Might have worked better to let Rarity go home and then have more fun with her later in a Green Eggs and Ham kind of way
Possibly resulting in Sweetie Belle joining the naked party, which on one hand could get into messy pedo territory, but on the other could be quite refreshing if it didn't.
Or heck, maybe Twilight is the only one who gets peeked at on the beach while Rainbow is off wandering, the peeker tells the whole school and everyone makes a big deal about it (possibly including their own friends), and then it's up to Rainbow to comfort her
Tons of scenarios left to do
3155247 Live and learn, right? You'll do great on your next story, so until then!
I must say, ... drat. But, it is wholly your choice, and to that I completely understand.
In regard to the story, it is an interesting subject for certain, and I think you captured the characterizations well. Heck, I actually expected AJ to cop to skinny dipping back on the farm or such.
As to Rarity, ... yeah, total freak out, and I can safely say that I think I can see where you saw the precipice of disaster.
Sometimes I find writing a story is like playing a chess match, there's that one move you make and you know you've just sold it all down the river.
Your writing style has intrigued me, and to that end I look forward to whatever projects may be in your future.
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But it was so much better!!
I firmly understand and respect your decision. Unfortunately, I also hate you for it because now it's stuck in my library as an unread chapter which makes it unclearable.
I was liking Public Nudity, but I see your point. I think it would've worked better as a one shot maybe.
Huh, I hadn't read it until now. The first two chapters seemed fine to me
It could very easily go bad, but I wouldn't say it was bad at the point I had just read in the blog.
Anywho, no big loss I suppose. If your heart isn't into it, then no use trying to squeeze juice out of a raisin. Good luck with any other stories you got planned though, or whatever you're doing at the moment.
Too bad. I felt that it had potential. It wouldn't matter of it lived up to Studying, just as long as it was the best you could make it and had fun doing it. Which you said wasn't the case anymore since it was no longer fun, so there you go.
Also, I just took a glance through your pasting of the chapters and noticed that you have the old ending to chapter one here. The one where Twilight drove to the beach. Don't know if you want to fix that or not.
3155989 Eh, I'll fix it later. That's what happens when I copy/paste without looking.
What if someone else lcould continue it for you?
Okay, so I didn't read it when it was a posted story, but I read it now. And the second chapter is all kinds of "what?" to me starting about halfway through. Once Rainbow starts imagining scenarios, the "???" only gets bigger. I can see why you weren't enthused, even if the scenes were amusing.
This is why pandering is unhealthy.
That said, playing to your audience can be fun, so feel free to try again!
I respect you decision, eLLen.
But you still get our loves!
I find it a shame to see it go, but I fully understand your reasoning - if you don't like your own work, it's better to just end it and do something you enjoy.
You might make something like this later, you might never think of it again. What matters is that you do what you like.
So don't fret too much, just do what you enjoy next
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Suck a dick, dude. You were rude as fuck with that, and you should feel bad for being a bad person.
3155240 these kinds of things happen. Personally, while I am a bit disappointed to see the sequel go, it also shows that you care about your stories. Its definitly better than forcing yourself to write and risking that writing alltogether becomes just a chore. I really like your style and I am happy that you take steps to ensure your fun wich in turn means more good stories for us ^^.
I admit I'm sad that you cancelled it, but I understand why. I thought the two chapters you did write were fantastic. There are far too few nudist fiction stories, MLP or otherwise, that don't deteriorate into clop. Anatomy was incredible and I always want you to be able to feel you put your heart into your work. I could certainly feel it there.
I can relate. If it's not fun to write, it's not fun to read. Oh well, I can always imagine the story.
It may not have been as good as It's Just Anatomy, but I still would have loved to read it. You could have written it and posted it someplace else, maybe even on a different website, and just not associated it with its predecessor. Star Wars episodes IV, V, and VI were amazing, but just because there some prequels that were far worse than the originals, didn't ruin said originals.
Aww that's a shame. I'll echo what several people have commented and say that I enjoyed the two chapters you posted. Of course, you shouldn't be pushed into writing something you're not interested in writing as that will just produce a poor story.
As for the fear that this story would end up just a copy of the previous, you could have examined a different angle. Rarity's personality may lend itself very well to a message of "I don't like it; I don't agree with it; I think it's weird... But you're my friends so I'll accept you as you are... Now let us never speak of this ever again."
The angle of the guys and Lyra invading the beach would also lead to fun shenanigans as well as another message of not judging a book by its cover with most of them being legitimately curious as well.
I would suggest and request that after a break you take another look at this story (or completely different story in the series). But again (and I can't stress this enough) don't feel like you have to write any story to appease fans. You should want to write the story and enjoy writing it as well.
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I apologize sincerely for my rude comment. I'm rereading it now, thinking "how did I write that and post it without punching myself in the face?" It is completely your decision, as it's your story and only yours.
3156365 Sorry
Also, I'm not a dude.
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Everyone is a dude, even the females, dude. But you apologized, so that's a good thing.
3158086 It's quite alright. We all have our moments.
Damn! Please count me among those who were enjoying this and wish for it to continue.
I don't suppose you could do a blog post explaining what would have happened?
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3160872 thank you.