When King Sombra was destroyed, his horn remained intact after the explosion. What would happen if someone found that horn and used it to bring back King Sombra?
NOTE:
Blue_Moon is the author of the prologue and first three chapters, he handed it over to me a little bit ago.
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Celestia is going to kill a child?!
You maniac!
2445287 Don't worry he'll either be saved or have a quick and painless death. MWAHAHAHHAHAHA
I'm curious to see what you do with the story.
This is almost painful to read. It's so clunky. The story doesn't flow at all.
Again this story lacks any detail. You have a great plot but your butchering it. Develop the story more, read how other writers do it if you need to.
It'salltoorushed! Youneverdevelopanyoftheplotyoujustjumpfromonebittothenext. For the love of Celestia STOP with the stupid explanations in brackets! IT DOES NOT WORK!!! Please please please keep writing. I love the plot but it's just not enough. You need to actually write this as a story not as a rough plotline like is appears now.
Yeah I take back what I said... Your plot ideas suck. This was soo stupid and OOC. Please change it.
Well this chapter is certainly better than all the others combined. It could still do with a LOT of work though. Still way to rushed and OOC.
Good Job. This is very good, much better than my chapters.
I only wanted a sandwich :,(
2463080 I'm sorry that my story doesn't meet the approval of The Great an Powerful Nightshade600, seriously though 1.) it is my first story I'm not going to have a My Little Dashie or Cupcakes on my first try 2.) Where are your stories? I went on your page and for being someone who knows so much about writing stories you seem to lack them.
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Here have this.
This actually good I intend to follow and more soon.
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I mean no disrespect. I haven't posted any stories because the two I have in the works are not developed enough to submit. Im mearly trying to give you constructive criticism because I actually really like alot of the plot.
2466502 Well normally things like " Your plot ideas suck. This was soo stupid..." isn't constructive, so excuse me if I took that wrong. I understand when you say things like: " Develop the story more, read how other writers do it if you need to." that I feel is constructive criticism. You just seem to write your comments very harshly is all.
2470654 Yeah... Sorry about that.
2471413 Its okay this is my first fanfic so it is bound to be clunky and out of character sometimes. So are we okay then? /)
2472776 ^_^ Yup
2462917 I hate to say it but your right... it needs some work. Would you mind giving me some critisizim on my fics? no one seems to want to tell me what im doing wrong.
That's solid, embarrassing gold.
In rl, I scream like a filly when I have my hair washed.