It's been over 2 years and he still hasn't found a Cutie Mark. He's fed up with not being able to find one. Drastic measures must be taken: he's going to steal a Cutie Mark.
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The story is ok, but it needs a bit of work on the pacing and dialogue. The pacing goes by extremely fast. I would like to see more backstory on Nobody. A couple of small paragraphs don't really cut it. Also, the dialogue is really awkward and cheesy. Try to put more personality into the dialogue of your characters.
2406773 Yea, that's what I was thinking, but I didn't really want to stretch it out by explaining every little detail.
As for the dialogue... *shrug* there's really nothing I have to say. I gave it my best, though :)
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It's good that you gave it your best. Most first fanfictions aren't really the best around anyway. Just keep practicing and you will eventually get better at writing. I still need practice as well.
2408037 Thank you!
Practice makes perfect :P