Chapter 2: Will You Accept My Friendship?
When The Moon Is Full
Chapter 2: Will You Accept My Friendship?
'I will finally be with my mother. Just a few more measly minutes,' Twilight thought to herself with a sly grin on her muzzle.
Princess Celestia felt something she hadn't felt in a long time and stopped mid sentence in her speech. She backed up a few steps and off the terrace next to the mayor.
"Princess Celestia? What's wrong?" Mayor Mare asked, genuinely concerned for her princess.
"I... I'm not sure," Princess Celestia said and went back to her speech, but not completely on the terrace. She had felt something coming and still had the feeling that something bad was about to happen.
Princess Celestia carried on with her speech. But, at the same time she was giving her speech she thought with a grimace, 'I feel... no it's not possible. But what I feel coming is Dark Magic! But there is some in the room. But, how? Who would have dark magic living within them?'
As soon as Princess Celestia finished her speech and was about to raise the sun, a black lightning bolt burst into the room out of nowhere. It was strange because a lightning bolt would have completely destroyed the terrace, but it didn't leave a mark.
As fast as the lightning bolt hit, a cloud of smoke emerged along with a dangerous being that was ready for night time eternal, Nightmare Moon. With her appearance, a grin was placed upon her face and stared down at her daughter, but not direct. For she would be revealed if it were direct.'With my daughter at my side, we will be unstoppable and rule together!' she thought while still maintaining her terrifying appearance.
"Oh my precious subjects, it has been so long since I have seen your precious, sun-loving faces." at Nightmare Moon's voice, every pony was cowering or cuddling each other for comfort. It was cruel sounding and terrifying to all who heard it. Well it was terrifying to almost all.
The only one not cowering was Twilight. This particular action was causing confused looks to form on some ponies. The other ponies were too busy cowering to pay attention to the one pony that was being as calm as ever. All the ponies who did notice seemed to think the same thing, 'Why is she not afraid?'
"What are you doing here?" Princess Celestia asked.
"I think you can answer that." Nightmare Moon said sarcastically. The next thing she said, she said with a very wide grin that showed her teeth. "Plus now that I have somepony new at my side..."
This infuriated the princess, "Who?"
"Why, she was at your side all the time and you never even knew it. Did you not recall her living for a thousand years? Not a single unicorn can live for that long." Nightmare Moon grinned, and stole a quick glance at her daughter.
"You're not saying..." Celestia looked down at her faithful student. She had an equally evil grin upon her face. "No, that's impossible. She is a unicorn that was good to me and others her entire life."
"And how do you know she wasn't acting? I had come to her in her dreams, reminded her of every little thing. I also warned her to wait until I arrived to show or tell her true self. For we all know what you would of done. Now, Shimmer Eclipse, show everyone in Ponyville your true self." Nightmare Moon grinned.
Her horn magic was usually a pink aura, in which to hide its true color. This time, she didn't hide it. It glowed a dark blue aura. In a flash of light her true appearances were revealed. Her coat color was now a slightly off gray, almost a mix between teal and grey, while her mane and tail went from purple, pink and lavender to a dark navy blue, dark red and indigo. To everpony else, even her cutie mark changed slightly; now instead of a white star behind a pink star, it was a full moon infront of a setting sun.
Every pony stared while Princess Celestia's jaw dropped, she soon fixed that to where it was normal. Twilight flew up onto the terrace next to her mother. "My name was never Twilight Sparkle, my true is, and always shall be, Shimmer Eclipse. And Nightmare Moon is my mother!" Shimmer Eclipse said with a evil, toothy grin. Everypony in the room gasped with terror at what they had just heard.
"Why would you hide such a thing? I would never have killed you." Princess Celestia said, while trying her best to hide the fact that she was completely terrified of what would happen now.
"Ha! Speak for yourself, you know you would of. I have a scarce amount of dark magic inside me. Enough so, that it would terrify you and lead you to one horrible conclusion. To. Kill. Me." Shimmer Eclipse snapped back and gave a wicked grin.
"I can see you know who you truly are.You're not going to let me to banish your mother again. I can also see that you are never going to let me banish you." Princess Celestia said, while looking down solemnly.
"No pony wants to be banished. Nor does any pony want to be killed. So warning my daughter of your actions of the past saved her." Nightmare Moon snapped.
"I know that... and I am sorry I banished you. If you give up your dreams of everlasting night, I am sure we can work this out. I promise that I will never harm you or Twi... Shimmer Eclipse." Princess Celestia corrected. "I am sure we can work together and get out of this predicament. Just give up your hatred, give up your dreams of everlasting night. I know there are ponies who use the night as a way to give them hope. Please, accept my friendship."
Nightmare Moon and Shimmer Eclipse looked at each other both thinking the same thing. They opened their mouths to respond, but when they were just about to say their answer, a dark blue wisp of dark magic escaped from Shimmer Eclipse and even Nightmare Moon's horns, making both them faint.
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Good story, can't wait the next update! :) please hurry! :)
>>Twiluna19
I'll do everything I can to update the story as fast as possible, but I can't promise anything because of H.S. coming to an end and getting ready for final exams.
-BMAGIC678
much as I like the story and concept, I have a bit of trouble with the dialogue. it seems a bit too descriptive, a bit too flat. it doesn't have that proper natural flow that speech tends to have. it sounds a bit like the characters are speaking directly to the audience to make sure they understand the situation, like, if it was an actual episode, you might catch their eyes flicking towards the camera, like they were trying to gauge the reaction of those watching. a good way to remedy this kind of thing is to think in your mind if you yourself would ever speak that way. also, this wasn't a problem so much in your story, but I've seen fantastic authors who've lost the attention of their fans by forgetting to properly punctuate their stories, so remember to not slip up on that. lastly, make sure your pacing remains the proper speed.
god, I must seem patronizing in this comment.
>>Gigamunch Not at all, that was actually very helpful. It gives me more to think about when I start on the third chapter of the story (Which is currently in progress). The reason the dialogue was like that (and I'm not saying this to hurt the original author's feeling's) is because this story is a continuation of the one by bricann. She gave full permission to copy/paste the chapters she already had, and make changes to them. I will do my best in future chapters to make sure the dialogue is better written.
Thanks again for the advice,
-BMAGIC678
So, A lot of time has passed since I was here- unfortunately.
I really hope, you're passed your exam with a good result.
Now, can you give me more information about the update status?
Update Please
NEED MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Is there gonna be an update anytime soon? Please! I can't wait for this story to continue!
I need more NOW
I love these stories so far, and I can't wait for more.
I have a question who's Shimmer Eclipse's father?
... I kinda curious here.
What does Shimmer Eclipse look like?
What Does "On Hiatus" mean?
I have no idea what it means.
I hate this; "Not Knowing what somethings mean." 
I hate this.....
2548416 Will, you continue this story?
Great story hope for more chaps as soon as you are able.
Is there any reason why Twilight's alicorn form has two different descriptions between the two chapters? The first chapter said she had a dark lavender coat with her normal mane color and her mark was "a faint moon with bright stars surrounding it", but in this chapter her coat is a teal-grey, her mane is a darker shade than normal, and her mark is a solar eclipse
Knew it conspiracies there are conspiracies everywhere
Nice chapter. That dark magic that escaped, is it the embodiment of Nightmare Moon? Meaning Nightmare Moon and Princess Luna separate and Shimmer Eclipse and Twilight Sparkle who has gained a life of her own (still an immortal alicorn however) separate, into separate beings. Then you could have the new forms try to retake control before being defeated.