Very well done :) keep up the good work :)

2364705 thanks, its my first try with ponies so it's a bit different from what I'm used to.

Well for ur first time with ponies u did an amazing job :)

I feel bad for Moe when Berry Punch Comes D:

Great little story. Shame about the tonne of spelling / grammatical errors. Excellent character interaction and the dialogue felt natural. Congrats.

This is kinda riddled with grammatical errors. You even switch into first person a couple times, there (wut?).

If you comb through and fix them, this will be a quality story.

Anime ponies, eh?

Oh well. Good read even though I felt like more character development could've been done