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DrTechno


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I know the picture is wrong, I will fix it a ASAP

The broken English! It burns!

awesome work I love:heart::pinkiehappy: Pinkie like this :pinkiehappy:

Is anyone interested in a sequel? Well too bad, I'm already writing it so prepare your bodies. I have a proofreader now so you hopefully won't have anything to complain about now 1949729

This is Kalash93 from Authors Helping Authors. I am about to read this story and I will post a review when I am finished.

This is Kalash93 of Authors Helping Authors writing a review for your story.

Story: The Tunes of Romance

Grammar: 3

Pros
1. The story was fun.
2. It is rare to see clop told from the female point of view.
3, You were realistic enough with the sex.

Cons
1. Premature insertion is not okay.
2. The clop was over too quickly.
2. I want a followup piece.

Notes
Congratulations on writing a story what was genuinely fun to read. It wasn't funny, but it was entertaining without ever feeling heavy or serious. I also have to give you props for daring to write a sex scene from the perspective of a female. That's actually a good idea but it is seldom utilized; do more like that. The sex was realistic to a degree. The anatomy and such was all done well enough A few acceptable breaks from reality were granted, although one was definitely too painful to ignore. Inserting into a girl when she isn't ready is painful for both of you.Charging ahead like Pinkie Pie did would almost certainly get that person physically kicked out of bed, if they weren't profusely apologizing and clutching their dick in pain. The sex was over somewhat too quickly, although I can let that slide due to this being an experimental piece. Lastly, you are promising more to come. I want to read what happens next.

You win 3/5 flutteryays.
:yay::yay::yay:

Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story, Welcome to the Brothel: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/88520/welcome-to-the-brothel The description of what sex feels like for a male is realistic.

2300557 whoa, whoa wait a minute. What is this sudden urge ro review all I got? Don't gwt me wrong, I appreciate that you're taking an interest, but I got a lot of stuff going on right now and doing multiple reply reviews is a bit too much right now.

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That's the fastest response I've ever gotten to a review! :pinkiecrazy:

You write a lot of clop and I wanted to see more of your writing as well as offer you advice on how to improve. You have at least a bit of writing talent, so I think that I should try to help you develop it.

OMG Kalash I see on almost every thing anthro wat up wit dat

Comment posted by Lunar 457 deleted Apr 14th, 2013

What happened to the strap-on part... Why did you set it up to make us think that she was gonna use the strap-on then not make them use it.

2431406 maybe Vinyl got caught up in the other ones and forgot, or maybe she'll use it in the next one *hint, hint*

2431491 ah, I see now. She's saving it for a rainy day. Also, love the Techno dildo. I wonder if they even make those at all.:twilightblush:

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Never read your client's fanfics. Never again. :twilightsheepish:

2454262 well this is one of the weird ones where I let my mad ideas come to life. A better one would be Wings of Love, but stay away from When a Bloom Withers, that's a reLly bad one.

URGH, WHY DO YOU INSIST ON PUTTING THE MOST AMAZING SOUNDING SEX TOY IN THE WORLD INTO THIS FIC?

2489940 I don't know, but this is sort of my 'crazy idea for sex toys' story where I let the sexual playtime go overtime. Haven't really planned the final part, but I'm thinking of brining Pinkie and the forgotten starpon in it.

DrTechno. you can write my friend. I have read all of your stories and I enjoy each one. I would realy like if you added a third part to this one :moustache:

4149234 I'm planning to, in fact, I'm pretty much done the lead-up part. Problem is I have too many stories which I've just put on hold, like this one. I will finish them, as soon as possible so look forward to it, one day I might unload chapters left and right.

4151433 that is good to know. I do follow you. and I would like it if you messaged me when this story is off of hold and the 3rd part is ready :moustache:

You wrote where alot instead of were. Fix please.

4998635 your comment has been noted and I will get on it as soon as possible

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