2337610 You can't stand on it, silly. It's a story. If it was a stool or a chair or a crate or a platform, you could probably stand on it. But it's not any of those things. It's a story. Unless you carved the words into a block and stood on that, I dunno how you would stand on it. Unless you have superpowers. Stan Lee must have smashed his poor old face into a keyboard and gave you the power to stand on top of words.
Don't beat yourself up too much. And a colt fapping isn't exactly my idea of a good time, but Rumble's so adorably naive that you sold me on awkward-coming-of-agey-ness.
Overall, not as bad as you think it is, and not a bad chapter 2, IMO.
2339588 *British Voice* Here we see the Badger Pony, flipping a table due to his mistake... I have been told this happens... Oh, shit! He's seen us! Drive, Charles!
Am I the only one who thinks that, while Thunderlane is indeed a douche, he doesn't deserve all the hate he gets from his brother? Maybe him not being their parents is an important factor here...
I figured this would end after the first chapter, which would be disappointing, so i'm really glad you continued it. I actually like this chapter better than the first one. Probably because the first chapter left so many questions that i assumed wouldn't be answered, but now they are, and everything is more or less coming together.
You do realize that a mare in heat, no matter how young, can become pregnant if a colt capable of producing viable sperm ejaculates inside of her right? Ergo, Scoots will most likely be with foal after the events of the first chapter... Unless I am missing something that happens or is mentioned during the events of a later chapter of course, as I have only read chapters 1 and 2 as of the time of posting this comment.
3144669 wow... I know this is old as fuck but im going to judge you anyway
I dont think Rumble is old enough to make "mature sperm" he is what 10? 11? i dont think humans make "mature sperm" at that age Oh and think it take more then a day for pregnancy to show.. next time think before you try to be smart, having a preggi fetish is find and all but keep it in the pants, not all of us needs to know
Now i have not read the hole fic (getting to it)so i dont know if that dose happen, if it dose ill call bullshit but its a fic so who cares
Still not all that sure.
2337561 You're not required to fap to it, mayte. You can be here for the plot.
2337578
The sweet plump foal plot.
All joking aside, I've never been big on rape or anything close to it. With this newest chapter I really don't know how I stand on this story.
2337610 You can't stand on it, silly. It's a story. If it was a stool or a chair or a crate or a platform, you could probably stand on it. But it's not any of those things. It's a story. Unless you carved the words into a block and stood on that, I dunno how you would stand on it. Unless you have superpowers. Stan Lee must have smashed his poor old face into a keyboard and gave you the power to stand on top of words.
I found one thing wrong here...
Nurse Redheart is an Earth Pony, and not a Unicorn.
No other discrepancies found.
Now...as for Thunderlane, I wanna hit him. With a baseball bat. Repeatedly.
This is just damn glorious.
Don't beat yourself up too much. And a colt fapping isn't exactly my idea of a good time, but Rumble's so adorably naive that you sold me on awkward-coming-of-agey-ness.
Overall, not as bad as you think it is, and not a bad chapter 2, IMO.
Woah this actually has some sort of plot other than mindless orgies and flavorless writing. I must say this quite good
2337759 Until he bleeds piss?
2338560 And then some...
Moar Please!
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*flips table of the universe*
2339588 hey, no worries though. I do like how the 2nd chapter showed the story developing. Its getting quite interesting.
Awesome, I really enjoy the whole mental dialog that goes on here.
2339588
*British Voice*
Here we see the Badger Pony, flipping a table due to his mistake... I have been told this happens... Oh, shit! He's seen us! Drive, Charles!
Am I the only one who thinks that, while Thunderlane is indeed a douche, he doesn't deserve all the hate he gets from his brother? Maybe him not being their parents is an important factor here...
I figured this would end after the first chapter, which would be disappointing, so i'm really glad you continued it. I actually like this chapter better than the first one. Probably because the first chapter left so many questions that i assumed wouldn't be answered, but now they are, and everything is more or less coming together.
More please.
2344323 MORE YOU SHALT HAVE
And there goes my hopes on this fic.
Hey, can ya'll reserve me a spot in hell? Cuz I'm gonna need one.
You do realize that a mare in heat, no matter how young, can become pregnant if a colt capable of producing viable sperm ejaculates inside of her right?
Ergo, Scoots will most likely be with foal after the events of the first chapter...
Unless I am missing something that happens or is mentioned during the events of a later chapter of course, as I have only read chapters 1 and 2 as of the time of posting this comment.
2899353 i Second this!
2886380 just call Phil in Colorado and ask for Beliel's bells and then send ten quid to the address they give you
Lol nurse Red Heart just trashed him.
Oh, he could get enough of the Loo.
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And what a plot it is. Dark. Compelling. Authentic.
Hello Stockholm syndrome, meet Rumble
Seriously, that's exactly what is happening
Man, Thunderlane's kind of a dick, but Nurse Redheart is being really damn touchy.
3144669 wow... I know this is old as fuck but im going to judge you anyway
I dont think Rumble is old enough to make "mature sperm" he is what 10? 11? i dont think humans make "mature sperm" at that age
Oh and think it take more then a day for pregnancy to show..
next time think before you try to be smart, having a preggi fetish is find and all but keep it in the pants, not all of us needs to know
Now i have not read the hole fic (getting to it)so i dont know if that dose happen, if it dose ill call bullshit but its a fic so who cares