Noah has lived his entire life alone. He has never had anypony to socialize with in the barren wasteland that was once known as Equestria. Noah has been doing the same things ever since his mother died, that is until one day he finds the one thing he thought he would never see...
not bad but the writing its bunched up a bit try spacing it up other than that its got potential
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Thanks! I have a problem with jumping to the point without describing it well enough so I guess I better work on that more.
2927716 and put some space between sentences ok so readers aren't overwhelmed with a wall of words ok and remember to KISS Keep It Simple Stupid and this will turn out great
yours sincerely Dark One
I loved this Second Chapter, I hope to work with you on chapters for times to come
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Yes, want to take a journey with me?
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Pfft I burn easy so I'll need plenty of sunscreen.
You need to have a new paragraph EVERY time you change speakers...
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It's my writing style, sorry if it bothers you. I need a good editor to help me with my habits, because I tend to forget.
Why didn't you ask me to help you Edit? :c
3798506 I sorry, you weren't online...
I love this story please finish it