Twilight Sparkle, keyblade wielder and apprentice to the Princess, is sent to Ponyville to discover the magic of friendship, but a long forgotten nightmare rises from the shadows, eager to cover the land once more in darkness.
Will her newfound friendship be enough to light her path, or will Twilight be lost forevermore in the dark?
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Not bad. Don't see any really problems with your grammar, and you have an interesting idea. Good work.
looking forward to more it is quite well written
Yay, update!
Again, no real problems, but it kinda feels like the ending was cut off. Personally, I think you could tack on Twilight meeting Fluttershy in this chapter as well.
I approve~!
I am actually finding myself enjoying this so far
Good job!
Allow me to be the first to comment this chapter:
A very interesting take/re-telling of the story. So Twilight gets to know the girls early, makes more sense to be on better terms then sooner then wave to wait and kinda coerce her into accepting their friendship on pain-of-death (figure of speech; none of the villains seem like they'ed kill, that's just over-active imagination)
What doesn't quite make sense (since I've played Kingdom Hearts): Sora getting the keyblade was due to purity of heart and (here's speculation) that he had friends/his innate ability to become friends with almost any sentient being. While Twilight may be pure of heart, she didn't previously have the friends to back up the point (unless you're counting family.)
It's also important to note that, as Sora said: "My friends are my power!" the wielder of the keyblade grows more powerful proportionally to the number of friends they have/make.
if (tl;dr)
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"I like this so far, keep up the good work"
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Do you have this whole story written out already? These are pretty quick updates.
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I might decide to combine chapter 2 and 3 later, not sure. At the time, I just felt that rescuing Fluttershy and Pinkie's party merited their own chapter. And thanks!
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Actually, there seems to be several methods with which you can gain and/or power a keyblade, such as the Inheritance Ceremony from Birth by Sleep, Sora gaining a keyblade because Riku jumped the gun and he had a stronger heart at the time, Riku later evolving the Soul Eater sword into a keyblade, etc. Friendship does not seem to be a requirement for keyblade use, though in Sora's case it certainly seems to help, but being strong of heart is.
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Well, not all of it, but a fair amount of the story is pre-written.
I love this fiction, I'm can't wait the next update.
I wonder , What does Nightmare plan with Twilight? Capture or influence?- (I would like, if you to go in this way (Twilight Her servant), even if only for a short period of time for the story) What do you think? It is a bad Idea?
Let' see. :)
So Twilight's got some darkness issues, eh?
But the power of darkness is no match compared to the power of friendship!
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...okay, that was cheesy.
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Not as cheesy as either Sora or Twilight would say already.
Very Good Chapter again. Quick Updates. What else to say...? Can't wait the next. :)
PS.: Ooh dear. Looks like I wrote a little late .. or soon? :) Unbelievable speeeeeeed :)
That was fast.
Both updating and in terms of the story.
Then again, it's hard to really add much to the journey through the Everfree.
And the "he" Nightmare Moon mentioned, I'm thinking either Discord or Xehanort.
Well, can't say I saw this event coming. Very well done.
Kinda thought it was going a different direction, not right into the game
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I was wondering if anyone would catch the reference.
And as for "he"... you'll have to wait and see, won't you?
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Hm, I do hope that's not a bad thing? And just as an fyi... don't expect this to be following the rails of canon.
Is she going to have her own set of clothes right away, or will she need someone to get some for her?
Just a thought, does the spell include clothes?
yeah, is she gonna be clothed? OH! how about include a picture in the story of what she looks like! i'm sure you could find one online.
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Unfortunately, none of the human!Twilight pics I've found online have the same, or a close enough, design as the one I've come up with for this story, plus I think having a pic in the middle of a fic is kinda tacky. Anyways, I'd change my design for Twilight's clothes, but, well... nah.
And wow, so many people worried about Twilight transforming naked. Just remember...
Naked People Are Funny!
wow, i couldn't help but imagine twilight without clothes. i must say, even though rainbows still my fav., twilight doesn't look half bad. still, applejacks boobs would be bigger and we all know it.
I almost commented on the last chapter that 'lo-and-behold, she forgot clothes' cause I figured that she certainly wouldn't have thought about it at the time nor really care; pretty much what happened anyway.
Next chapter please!
Huh, so first one's Rainbow Dash, eh?
So you just going with KH 1 worlds or are you going to add in a few worlds from other games? Either way, you're doing a great job.
Keep it up.
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There will be other worlds besides KH1 ones, but as for which ones... wait and see!
Got a bit of an error here: He’s is off visiting his father during these prelims.
So Twi's going to be going against Cerberus, eh? You gonna have anything like the KHII action command?
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Fixed the error.
And as for Reaction Commands, I always felt that they were just the Keyblade alerting it's wielder to openings and opportunities to take advantage of his or her foe's weaknesses.
Before I start reading this there's something I need to know: is it just Twilight that goes on this Keyblade adventure, or do the rest of the mane six come with her? I see the mane six tag, but for all I know the rest might just be there to see her off in the beginning. I've been dying for a good KH crossover, but I'm going to be extremely disappointed if it's all Twilight. Some crossovers work with just one mane six member, but KH is one where only giving a single mane six member time in the spotlight would just be a travesty.
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Without really giving anything away, Twilight starts her journey with her friends, but is seperated from them. She will eventually have the rest of the mane cast join her over the course of the story.
Twilight is the protagonist and viewpoint character of the fic, but not the only important one.
Edit: That said, certain characters may receive more focus than others.
One minor correction: Apple Bloom's name is 2 words. It's not Applebloom; it's Apple Bloom.
I have to say I like the pacing. Too many fics take so long setting everything up that I just want to punch the author in the face, but this one gets to the action quickly and in a cogent manner; not too rushed, nor too detailed.
awesome chapter! awesome story! your an awesome person!
I should have guessed Dashie would be in the world of a movie featuring a Pegasus.
You know what this reminds me of?
Also, I'm gonna make a few guesses about where the others might be:
, or Deep Jungle because of all the wild animals.
Pinkie: Neverland. It makes sense because it's a place where you never get older, and she has the heart of a child.
Fluttershy: Either Halloweentown for the incredible sense of irony that would come with it
Rarity: Agrabah. Something tells me she'd love seeing all the exotic fashions of the locals, not to mention the gems in the Cave of Wonders.
Good guesses, but who says they have to only go to the worlds in KH 1? After all, there's plenty of untouched Disney worlds out there...
Anyways, a new chapter should be up shortly.
Happy Easter, everyone!
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Well, at least my guess about Fluttershy was pretty close, since it's working off the irony of her being in a world of monsters who love to scare people. May not have been the exact world, but it's about as close as you can get.
Good thing Twi didn't use it then.
Now, when exactly have they shown up? Before Boo's arrival, or has she already shown up? Actually, is Boo even gonna be a part of this whole thing? After all Randell's dialogue doesn't give the vibe that he's going to try and test it on her. Could just be me though.
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Hm, well, I'd love to answer your question, but how do to do it without spoiling the plot?
OK, suffice to say, Randall needs more test subjects than he can get just by kidnapping human children, but every little bit counts...
Also, I seem to have missed something. What "it" are you referring to that Twilight didn't use?
I have the idea of what I think would be the ultimate MLP Keyblade. I call it Eternal Harmony:
*The grip is shaped like an apple, and has a pair of yellow wings spreading on the side of it.
*The shaft has swirling red and white patterns like a candy cane
*The teeth are a trio of gems like the ones on Rarity's cutie mark, and they're set on a rainbow arching down from the tip to a small part just a bit below the tip
*The key chain looks just like Twilight's cutie mark.
As you can see, it has aspects of all six of the mane six; seems like an impressive weapon to me.
Also, there's one particular Disney villain who I would absolutely love to see, even if they don't actually visit the world of his movie: The character Skroop from Treasure Planet (AKA: the Spider Psycho).
One last thing I think would be epic (although it might be too late unless they decide to return to Olympus) is a creature I thought of years ago that I call the Composite Titan. Basically, it's where Hades releases all 5 titans and combines them into one, with the torso of the Rock Titan, the legs of the Ice Titan, the loincloth of the Cyclops (hey, can't just pretend he doesn't exist), the arms of the Tornado Titan, and a volcano mounted on its back to represent the Lava Titan.
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to bad you don't have a picture, it sounds awesome! and as for the titan, sounds majorly dangerous.
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Another idea I had for an epic boss battle is having Monstro get turned into both a Heartless and a Nobody (or just a Heartless, if the Nobodies aren't going to be introduced in this fic).
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Ah, the "it" would be the human transformation spell.
And really, I'm more musing aloud than anything.
Thanks for the reply, though. 
I just thought of something: you're saying that Randal has the ability to control the Heartless, but if you recall the events in Halloweentown in KH 1, they showed that the minor Disney villains (as in, the ones who aren't Maleficent) can't actually control them. Oogie Boogie's plan was to steal the artificial heart so he could become able to control the Heartless, which means he wasn't already able to control them. Between KH 1 and 2 (and maybe the later ones; I don't know because I haven't played the more recent ones), they made it seem like Maleficent and Pete were the only ones who could truly control the Heartless; with all the other Disney villains, it seemed as if it was just that their allegiance to Maleficent granted them safety in that the Heartless wouldn't harm them.
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AFAIK, and in this fic, at least, the only things needed to control the beasts are sufficient inner darkness and enough willpower to overpower the Heartless's instinctive desire to seek out and devour hearts. However, if your will should falter they will turn on you...
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You're welcome.
Another chapter should be coming within the next hour or so...
i love this story!
Well...
That accelerated quickly.
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Yeah... I was never too sure about this chapter, and this was after several rewrites. I'm still not satisfied with it, but I'm kinda lost as to how to improve, so... yeah.
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Eh, I say the best thing to do is move on for now, and then come back to it later to give it more detail. While the flow of the fic may seem quick and the action sequences are pretty short, it's currently compensated for by how quickly they come out. Therefore, the flow of the story is justified by the speed of the updates, but once the fic is finished it might seem disappointing for people who are just finding it. After all, the way this fic is going, if I were someone to find it after it's finished, I'd never want to get to the ending because it would leave me sad to see it over. When the fic is over and you have more free time not spent writing new chapters, you'll be able to go back and give the whole thing a tune-up. Even if you're anxious to write the next chapters and whatnot during the initial writing process, which will cause the chapters to seem somewhat rushed, once you're done with all that you'll have spare time to spend improving the existing chapters. That would benefit both the readers who have followed it during the writing process and the readers who show up after it's finished, because it'll give the past readers a reason to want to reread it with more action and excitement.
friggin cliff hangers.
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He's farther along on Spacebattles