My Little Apocalypse

After a horrible disease is set on Ponyville when a scientist fails to create immunity, the Mane six are the only ponies left to find the cure and save the world. Being alone in Ponyville can be a crazy thing, anything could happen.

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Lamms

Lamms #1 · Feb 13th, 2012 · · · The Beginning ·

tonic to cure all ailments kind of like resident evil i like were this is going, see were it takes you

Distrance

Distrance #2 · Feb 13th, 2012 · · · The Beginning ·

I really like how this is starting up...

Buuuuut... if you want me to nitpick. Everything up until Six Month's Earlier is beautifully detailed. The rest however, I notice an obvious decrease, what happened?

it's probably me being a Sci-Fi nerd, but the whole Prof. Maple's works and explanation for the virus just seems so... basic. Maybe some insight into exactly how Maple created such a potion/his past works (potions) that gave him his reputation, who this 'mute' pegasus is and why she/he wanted to participate, and even some insight on the infection itself.

Lamms

Lamms #3 · Feb 13th, 2012 · · · The Beginning ·

215997 i noticed this as well, maybe just a little to hasty to put your idea out there. i would defiantly go into more detail on maple and and his visions/ideas/creations

FlutteryPie

FlutteryPie #4 · Feb 13th, 2012 · · · The Beginning ·

215997 Now that you mention it, I really see what you mean.
Although more information about Prof. Maple and the mute pony was restricted for a reason. Eventually it will become more clear... but I do see where I could have been more descriptive.

Thank you for your criticism. It will help me later on in my writing.