equestria is fucked up

"Are you even sure their worth all this?"

They're.

"Tosla tavern? what's she talking about?" I thought to myself.

Thoughts should be italicized and in 'these'.

I'm just trying ta' help.

I am very confused? I thought this was a Chrysalis x human love story.

Fuck sleep... MUST READ!!!

I just got here... who needs sleep?

pun for the old man "eye can see you!"

Ok first should I keep reading? It's 1 in the morning and I have to get up for school at 6. Next I thought this was like a chrysilisxhuman thing
And finaly waaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh?

1: fuck sleep I'll read another chapter
2: haven't read that far
3: Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh I don't get it :(

So far so good

Moon Shadow's methods of torture are so fuckin' weak.

Decided to pop back after finishing the story, and all I can say is, what happened to Moon Shadow, and how did he not recognize her?

Now I'm looking forward to the sequel even more.
and now I see you already started the sequel....
(facehoof) Gosh dang it, I'm a moron...

this is a pretty spooky way to start off a good storyi.4cdn.org/d/1435425649943.gif

Well this is a boring piece of stupid right here.

6300107 the smart thing to do would be to not read it then everyone has their opinion

Well, nothing like a warm welcome.

Well, here we go (again?)!

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Thank you kindly for coming back to the neverending story that didn't quite get it's ending, yet. I hope to give the quality you deserve; for the time you've spent, with me.

I'll see you soon, and remember to keep it cool.
xXCondemnedSoulXx.