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knighty

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knighty #1 · Sep 16th, 2011 · · · Thunderstruck (Rainbow Dash x Twilight Sparkle) ·

A few spelling mistakes here and there, but not bad.

Lagrangian

Lagrangian #2 · Sep 16th, 2011 · · · Thunderstruck (Rainbow Dash x Twilight Sparkle) ·

I didn't note any spelling errors (but I didn't read it that closely).
There may have been some grammar/style errors but I wasn't paying too much attention.

Jealousypants McCloppington

Jealousypants McCloppington #3 · Sep 17th, 2011 · · · Thunderstruck (Rainbow Dash x Twilight Sparkle) ·

Not the hottest sex scene I've ever read, but I definitely approve.

BlueEricsson

BlueEricsson #4 · Sep 19th, 2011 · · · Thunderstruck (Rainbow Dash x Twilight Sparkle) ·

so this is a clopfic.

i aprove

Woor

Woor #5 · Oct 1st, 2011 · · · Thunderstruck (Rainbow Dash x Twilight Sparkle) ·

<- imagine that is the face rainbow had when she...

<-imagine that is the face twilight had

good story

#6 · Dec 2nd, 2011 · · · Summer Rain (Applejack x Braeburn) ·

This is the best thing. AJ/Braeburn has proved nigh on impossible to find except for this story and what a story it is.
Brb while I read it over and over again.
Man, I know it's probably rude to ask and impractical to do but I would really like to see the fallout and/or continuation in a sequel.
Can't get over this, dang. <3

#7 · Dec 29th, 2011 · · · Summer Rain (Applejack x Braeburn) ·

^ I agree; a sequel would be appreciated, but certainly not necessary. You've already given closure ("We've got to keep this to ourselves"). Given that and the fact that the two of them remain as close as family can be, notwithstanding the geographic distance (reference the mutual ease of address in the Appleoosa episode), I can't think of any reason for a sequel. Unless, of course, you have an idea for drama - then by all means go ahead.

I loved how acted (sorry for the meme, but it fits!) like a boss at the end.

dat_flank

dat_flank #8 · May 7th, 2012 · · 1 · Summer Rain (Applejack x Braeburn) ·

Okay, so I'm a pretty big clop critic so here I go. The opening was a bit long, for I didn't sense any sort of romance/connection until about 3/5 of the way through. Detail is good, but some was unnecessary. There weren't too many errors which was good. The whole running thing seemed unmotivated and on the fly. There was no build up to the sex. I would ahve liked to see some in the first seen between AJ and Brae. Liked the ending. Now for the clop. I liked the scene. It was set perfectly in the rain and mud and it really got steamy; however, it was fairly short scene for a clop fic and the two only doing it one way made it seem rushed. I liked the story overall, and thumbs up, but I would like to see some improvement.

Klondike Pony