How much space would you guess will between chapters, for the most part?

2071132
At this point, I have only a vague clue, but I would guess at least a month.

2071162 cool

I liked it overall, good amount of skepticism/apologetic-ness from Twilight as well as fear and lying ability from Peili.
Spike! Get your mind out of the gutter! Do you really think that your older sister/mom/thing would be mating
(BTW, the way you are using 'touching horns' in that matter implies that Cadence and Shining Armor had sex to blast Chrysalis out of Canterlot, just saying) with a stranger just after meeting for the first time less than 5 minutes ago?

Seriously though, that is very weird to put that in there. I understand you did it to get them away from Spike and for 'comedy', but it really just adds cliched sexual humor instead.

Great chapter. Can't wait for more

Most of the shelves housing the tombs were built into the wall, and there were few vacant areas.

I beleive you meant "tomes". It would be rather creepy to have tombs on your shelves.

2071207
I intended for Spike to find their general position the awkward thing, not the horns. Twilight's standing over him, both have their eyes closed, etc...
2071228
Whoops! Thanks for that!

Yay, another chapter to this beautiful fanfic! I hope that we will see Princess Celestia again at some point to back him up.

2071271
Celestia will play an integral role in the story as time progresses, but not, I'm sure, as many of you would think.

This was nice

This was a good chapter. It covered everyone's reactions very well and showed good character depth and emotion. And Spike is convinced that Twilight has a colt from Canterlot over for...other reasons than stated, and will probably confide in Rarity regarding the situation before she can think to tell him not to.
Rarity, while she is a fiend for gossip, would only tell the other Mane 6, as she would feel this is something they should look into and address...and somepony's gonna take things too far and act stupid.

well that is a grand bit of world building that can be accepted in my head for head-cannon

I wonder when you are gonna talk about feeding habits for changelings and what your take will be

2071232
Okay then, it was just that Twilight seemed focused on why their horns were touching...

Not exactly the reaction I expected from Twilight. Seeing as she blasted at least 20 Changelings on her own in the Series 2 finale, I find it odd that she would be utterly terrified at the sight of one Changeling, and one that is trying to appear nonthreatening.
Also, the plural of "pupa" is "pupae."

2071552
In the finale, she was with her friends, her adrenaline was pumping, and the fate of Canterlot and Celestia rested on her shoulders. At least, that was the justification I used for this chapter.

Ah, good, good… I was hoping for this to be updated, considering this is one of my favorite “First-Person” Narrated stories.

… Ah, a brief problem I noticed in the text: One of Peili’ thoughts has a word that is meant to be emphasized, but since the entire statement is a thought, the italics canceled each other out. Here is the phrase:

Just because I don’t look exactly like her, it doesn’t give her the right to be afraid. It’s not like she’s the most drop-dead gorgeous pony who ever lived.

The word is 'exactly'.
Also, “somepony new usual entailed” – I think you meant to say ‘usually’.

So, comments, comments… Hmm… Well, I didn’t care much for the attitude of Peili in this chapter. It seemed a bit more “angry” than normal, though I mean more with regards to his ‘narrative-expressed emotions”. I mean, in the first chapter, he seemed sincere, almost humble at times.

Here, he seems to “hold back” negative emotions quite a lot. Maybe it’s because Twilight was just a ‘pony’ compared to Princess Celestia, but the amount of times he did that made me struggle to comprehend how this Changeling even went about his daily life.

… Then I reached the line about “killing a guard” and that kinda made me go “Oh yeah, Changeling. Vicious. Right. ” before continuing.

I liked how Twilight was portrayed in this, especially. Being cautious about the intentions of Peili, as well as whether he was really there for redemption or if it was a trap, was easy to believe, and all the more easy to get immersed into a good story with.

That said, you seemed to be abusing the “suspension of disbelief” with regards to Changeling Abilities. I mean, “Turning into Princess Celestia”? Okay, I’ll buy that, it’s just changing, after all. “Changeling Radar”? Meh, it works for the plot, so it’s fine. “Twilight's suspicion of a Changeling having the ability to, while disguised as Princess Celestia, write a letter and send it in the same manner as Princess Celestia with regards to not only sending the letter magically, but her writing style, to which Peili does not object to”?

At that point, I was kind’ve skirting the ‘rail of plausibility’, but let it slide. Thankfully it didn’t go much farther than that, though the chapter left me incredibly curious about where this could go next, especially with so many ponies around, not to mention Spike being kept in the dark.

I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter, and await the continuation of this story. Thank you.

I had (some) faith that Princess didn’t teach wackjobs.

Abandon faith, all who enter here!

2071634
Thank you for such an in-depth review of the chapter.

As for Peili, I wanted to show his more feral side here, bringing him to life as a Changeling, and showing that a revelation and change of heart does not bury your past or nature. Also, I was wondering about the abilities I would be allowed to introduce to Changelings, so thanks for setting the boundaries of plausibility.

Thanks for the support!

2071673

A month? Damn

Really liked the characterizations. Very good job of keeping Twilight distrustful and Peili angry. Very believable meeting. Keep up the good work!

This is an absolutely excellent story and I encourage you to continue. It's been a long time since a story that was this high in quality has been published (so far it shows more promise than even Romance Reports) and I can't wait to read the next chapter.

2071895
"Romance Reports"
NOPE
I don't see myself as the type to write huge epics like that or "Past Sins". While E. I. will be longer than most things I write, it certainly won't touch those stories in terms of scale or grandeur.

The Changelings are Communists!! He escaped the Iron Curtain!

"Queen Chrysalis, tear down that wall!" -- Princess Celestia

2071920
I was talking about the idea of the story and the way you write rather than length. Romance Reports really was epic even though I'm not into lesbian clop. I decided to read it despite the fact that I wasn't really into it. So far I'm getting the same feeling from your story. I honestly don't care if there's clop or not even though I usually only read clopfics. It's pretty awesome so far and I hope you continue and don't disappoint.

It was a very nice meeting, and I must say I liked the way Peili point out that laws are different for ponies and changelings, it was something I never found in any changeling stories.

Looking forward to next chapter.

So the changeling's already using "in Celestia's name"?

Some pretty good chapter you have here
But a month for the next update?! Oh, well... I guess I will survive somehow...
Actually, I won't

I find it hard to imaging what his voice sounds like

I like a dis!
24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mc9gqci3Ix1qivlnqo1_400.gif

2073474
Think Garrus Vakarian, if a bit higher.
deviantart.com/download/157934712/Garrus_Vakarian_04_by_johntesh.jpg
(Garrus is best everything)

2073775
Never played Mass Effect.

2073778
Just as a reference for his voice

2073784
OK i just downloaded that video and increased it's pitch on audacity.

Now i'm laughing at how his voice sounds
And thanks for clearing that up.

2073830
No problem!

2073841
Also.... is this going to be a Changeling X Twilight fic

2073847
I believe so.

2073850
And.... are they going to.....buck... at some point

(sex tag)

2073853
There will be clop, as were my intentions when starting this fic.

2073860

Romance clop. The best kind there is.

2073861
Only good kind!

2073872
Truer words have never been spoken.

2073873
Actually, that's the only clop I DO read

I know I am going to love this story.

Wow this fimfic is only 9 days old and the like rating is already passed 500 amazing

Continues to be an EXCELLENT story. LEPShot knows how to write.

2071162
Oh dear god you must be kidding me.
You're joking. You're joking, right?

2073872 agreed, anything else lacks substance in the story protion which i'm not big on. I tip my hat to your well done story

My digs

The way I see it, there are three kinds of clopfics:

Romance clopfic:
A clopfic where the romance has already been established; whether it is a spin-off to another fic (e.g. Son of Peace) or just simply the romance has already been there (e.g. A Tryst at Midnight)
Romancing clopfic:
A romance clopfic that creates a romance before the clop; as in, the romance is built from the ground-up, rather than just being there already (like this story or e.g. Ingress: Vacation)
Consensual clopfic:
A simple clopfic, created just for clop, and nothing more (e.g. Menage a Trois)

Question, are you going to make 2 versions of the chapters with clop, one with and one without?

2090508
I was originally planning on it, though the "without" version would be more "Teen-rated" than "non-existent", if you see what I'm saying.