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Stay the night

This is a short one-shot that pairs up rule 63 Vinyl Scratch (Record Scrape) with Octavia. Just a bunch of cute fluff. Thanks to my brother for inspiring me to do this. Hopefully you guys like it.

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koenigseggfan14

koenigseggfan14 #1 · Mar 5th, 2013 · · ·

quite short. but id more poeple read this im expecting a clopfic on my desk by sunday,

MageTrollpatrol

MageTrollpatrol #2 · Mar 5th, 2013 · · ·

Well, I am very angry right now. You could be making this into so much more than it is! Make MOAR! NAO!

Blueninetails

Blueninetails #3 · Mar 13th, 2013 · · ·

Well, lets see. Like the other comment stated, this does have so much more potential. So much more. It's not bad, but it could be enhanced a little bit more. Example of what I think could improve it a little, would be to hear just a little bit on their thoughts as the event(s) happen, what's going through their heads essentially. I can see some potential for that on the taxi ride actually. Plus, I can't really make out what was Vin...er...Record's stance on their relationship, I mean does he like her in a way? Or is he just a comforting friend in this?

Yeah, so there's my thoughts. As I said it's not bad, I've probably had worse writing when I started about....3-4 years ago, it just needs a little detailing really. Otherwise though, very nice story, I very much like the concept.

bluerose6969

bluerose6969 #4 · Mar 31st, 2013 · · ·

WHYD U STOP!?! IT WAS GETTING SO GOOD! :( could u possibly continue it??

Pinkamena_Rocks_57

Pinkamena_Rocks_57 #5 · Apr 20th, 2013 · · ·

Okay, to everyone who wanted me to continue I really suck at continuing from this point. I am not that good to write more parts to this I still need more practice and right now I'm still in a stage where I can only really write a one shot. Granted this story can be extended, but then I run the risk of ruining the entire thing and I don't want to. I'll think about it, but I'm unsure.