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Life can be harsh when it comes to the lessons everypony has to learn. When those lessons involve the heart, it often breaks during the 'hard way' processes. Crystal Star was just such a case. In hopes of saving some from the pains she endured, she's willing to tell you what she has learned about love in one of her greatest secrets.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 7 )

Overall, not too bad so far. But may I point out that you may want to break up your sentence structure a bit, use some commas to give us a break as we read, and give us that shorter sentence to break the flow of the longer ones.

so many feels, i loved it :fluttercry::derpyderp2::rainbowlaugh::heart:

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Thanks for the input! Glad you enjoyed :yay:

I enjoyed this rather a lot, actually. I'll talk to you elsewhere about what you might could improve, but this has the makings of an excellent longer story, too.

2018327 Right on :pinkiehappy: thanks for the input:ajsmug:

It is an interesting premise, a different take on the Changeling Queen. It was a nice short story.

2019862 Glad you enjoyed :pinkiehappy: Thanks for the comment

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