How much have you lost? How much joy have you had in your life? When you have all of time to live you have to learn how to hold on to good moments and let go of the bad. Celestia and Luna meet an immortal who has lost a lot and needs a brake, a princesses work is never done however and even with a new guest hanging around the castle the Sun and the Moon have to keep up with their very different duties.
My first fan fic but by no means my last, enjoy.... please?
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Needs some editing especially at the on set. sentence flow is a little convoluted
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Yeah that's what I mean, issues. I'll admit I wanted a little bit of confusion in the opening scene, I mean I would think that would be kinda expected in a fight against changelings, but that's kinda ridiculous. Suggestions are appreciated good sir.
Well I actually just meant the first few paragraphs / introduction. Try reading it out loud and in different accents? I do that with my stories.