Spike is finally old enough to realize his dream of attracting Rarity's eye, but with no experience under his belt, he turns to his lifelong friend Twilight to show him the ropes.
You realize how long I have been waiting for something like this to happen, to bucking long! Though I will admit it was worth the wait, keep up the good work you sly pony you, I shall be waiting.
I don't like doing the release date dance, but the next chapter is basically the reason I thought of this fanfic, and I'm excited to write it, so I am going to try to get it out as fast as I can.
Spike you jerk! Why u getting kinky with Rarity when your sister/mom/lover is critically injured?! Spike is a flank hole and Twilight deserves better. I wanted spilight... Pooh
2367857 I hope not since Spike and Rarity would never last in the long run. A relationship based on lust ends quickly. Also Rarity is a manipulative little parasprite.
2367861 woa woa woa look i may not be a genuus r anything but im sensing a LITTLE BIT OF ANIMOSITY vs a cartoon character perhaps u shuld reconsider ur opinun becuz OBVUOUSLY u r RONG about Rarara.
2367881 I just think she doesn't represent her element very well. I don't hate her. The only character I hate is Angel. I'd ship Rarity with Braeburn though.
2367890 I'm actually trying to play as much to her element as I can in this. I agree that the portrayal in the show is a bit rough. Here's some things I did to try and remedy that.
She was there for Spike when he needed a friend. She lost sleep for him on the way to Canterlot. She stayed with him and didn't criticize him for being mopey, did her best to understand, and tried to make his day brighter by bringing him someplace special.
These all pale in comparison to quite a major thing at the end, but hey.
We can't all love all the characters. I harbor some animosity for RBD because it's hard for me to identify with her and stuff, but I think she's loyal enough and she's certainly a character worth writing about in the correct context.
I think that's the key. In the realm of FanFiction, a character IS the character from the show at the core, but a writer has liberties to show the faults and upsides of a character in their own way. Super cool stuff!
Which, by the way, is the reason I think not reading stuff cuz a character you "don't like" is in it is a little silly. I've read some great stuff with RBD in it that made me really look at her in a different light (particularly when a writer captures an appropriate soft side). A story is much more important based on general quality than favorite characters IMO.
I honestly hope Twilight does what is best for herself and Spike. Either letting go and finding new love since Spike started with Rarity, and finding a new love (possibly Celestia). or Letting spike choose who he wishes for. Let the story Guide you.
Oh, Spike, I feel so bad for you. If I ever found the guy who was responsible for getting continuously interrupted JUST when things were getting started, I'd clock him.
So, on behalf of Spike...
MrNumbers clocks 2367536with a devestating uppercut.
To the moon with you, you magnificent bastard! Godspeed, and until we meet again!
WOW.... I must say I absolutely loved this chapter. With all the emotion (and my crappy imagination) just made this incredible to read . I wonder how spike is going to deal with his current situation (if ya know what I mean) But all honesty keep it up I am really liking this story and I do miss reading updates but take your time.
So, now the question still remains, who's going to get runt first, Twilight or Rarity? Cause one way or another Spike is going to have to do something about his built-up argue's before he loss his mind.
There seem to be a lot less war of the shipping in the comments this time. Also so good to see you continue to write to please yourself, it still pleases me.
Uh oh. Looks like there's a chance this might be Spilight after all. And to think I thought the beginning of this chapter told us that Rarity won the love triangle.
2369555 Welp, I have the story I want to write in my mind. I can hardly think of anything that would make me change it now.
2369140 Oh yes... expect some serious self arguing in the next chapter... heh. Nice call.
2369109 Ah yes... I was practically imagining some over the top scene from some romance novel when I wrote that scene. Channeling my inner chick flick, haha.
2370725 Weeelll.. it is tagged as clop! Actually, I've net lost favorites since I released this. I wonder if it's because people think it's full on Sparity, and so the Spilight fans have left, or if because this is the first bit that's excessively cloppy.
I would be lying if I were to say I did not skip over the whole sex deal with Spike and Rarity but COME ON....it's Spike and Rarity, that's just plain awful in my eyes....personal option. Gods.....I would be so pissed if I was Spike, damn....and now for the amazing aftermath GO GET TWILIGHT SPIKE, SHE REALLY LOVES YOU And now we wait
2370738 I have nothing agianst clop. It was actually one of the factors in my reading of this. And I sm usually a die had sparity fan, but your story made me feel for twilight.
2367904 This is quite a well thought out idea. You certainly have done rather well with your portrayal of Rarity, giving her more of her element than the show usually does. I will admit that I tend not to like her portrayal in the show, but that is mostly due to her almost blatant disregard for her own element. She's often quite self-centered and self-absorbed, often not thinking of others at all, much less before herself. I've known enough people IRL that that sort of personality can grate upon me extremely easily.
Great chapter here, I loved the dancing scene, and you could really feel the pent up frustration and passion in the train scene from start to finish.
The little moment with Celestia was very heartwarming, and shows just how much Celestia cares for her people, and that her affection for Twilight is just that much greater.
I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter, and I'm really really rooting for SpikeLight
Rarity, you little minx
And poor Spike. Cockblocked again!
2367531
Minx?
FINALLY!!!!!!
You realize how long I have been waiting for something like this to happen, to bucking long! Though I will admit it was worth the wait, keep up the good work you sly pony you, I shall be waiting.
2367548
Yeah seriously, whoever the writer of this is needs to get off his ass and write more actual horse sex. Romance is 4 dweebs!!!
2367552
Still good though, and a healthy bit of romance is nice, but after the first failed attempt, and now this, I will admit I find myself....wanting....
2367559
I'm already a good way through the next chapter.
And on EQAD's clop rating of 1-5, I would give it a 4 for copious amounts of shameless passionate clop.
Don't worry Twilight, I'm on my way to 'relocate' Rarity...........Spike is all yours!!!
2367566
Buck that I give it a five and five mustaches
Just because I was left wanting dose not mean I was not satisfied in other ways.
When can we expect the next part?
I hope not that long
Wow, it updated, good chapter.
2367603
2367566
I don't like doing the release date dance, but the next chapter is basically the reason I thought of this fanfic, and I'm excited to write it, so I am going to try to get it out as fast as I can.
Nice chapter, although I bet the next one is going to be even crazier. I don't think it will be as bad as Twi and Spike thought it would be.
Also: I found a minor error:
He looked down, realizing that the three minute walk to the train station had not done his visible arousal any good.
Pretty sure that should be "from the train station" or "to the library".
I hope the next chapter comes out soon.
2367621
Yep! I'm really excited for it! Thanks for catching that error.
Cock-blocked by a train. That's gotta hurt.
No man likes to be Cock blocked. No woman likes to be Twat swatted.
OH THE PAIN! TT^TT
Spike you jerk! Why u getting kinky with Rarity when your sister/mom/lover is critically injured?! Spike is a flank hole and Twilight deserves better.
I wanted spilight... Pooh
2367846
The ride isn't over.
Also Twilight isn't critically injured, I used a plot device to retcon that to a short amount of time because I am impatient.
2367857
I hope not since Spike and Rarity would never last in the long run. A relationship based on lust ends quickly. Also Rarity is a manipulative little parasprite.
2367861
woa
woa
woa
look i may not be a genuus r anything but im sensing a LITTLE BIT OF ANIMOSITY vs a cartoon character perhaps u shuld reconsider ur opinun becuz OBVUOUSLY u r RONG about Rarara.
#YOLO
2367881
I just think she doesn't represent her element very well. I don't hate her. The only character I hate is Angel. I'd ship Rarity with Braeburn though.
2367890
I'm actually trying to play as much to her element as I can in this. I agree that the portrayal in the show is a bit rough. Here's some things I did to try and remedy that.
She was there for Spike when he needed a friend. She lost sleep for him on the way to Canterlot. She stayed with him and didn't criticize him for being mopey, did her best to understand, and tried to make his day brighter by bringing him someplace special.
These all pale in comparison to quite a major thing at the end, but hey.
We can't all love all the characters. I harbor some animosity for RBD because it's hard for me to identify with her and stuff, but I think she's loyal enough and she's certainly a character worth writing about in the correct context.
I think that's the key. In the realm of FanFiction, a character IS the character from the show at the core, but a writer has liberties to show the faults and upsides of a character in their own way. Super cool stuff!
Which, by the way, is the reason I think not reading stuff cuz a character you "don't like" is in it is a little silly. I've read some great stuff with RBD in it that made me really look at her in a different light (particularly when a writer captures an appropriate soft side). A story is much more important based on general quality than favorite characters IMO.
2367861 She's not really bad, she's just far too often written that way.
I honestly hope Twilight does what is best for herself and Spike. Either letting go and finding new love since Spike started with Rarity, and finding a new love (possibly Celestia). or Letting spike choose who he wishes for. Let the story Guide you.
So, on behalf of Spike...
MrNumbers clocks 2367536 with a devestating uppercut.
To the moon with you, you magnificent bastard! Godspeed, and until we meet again!
2368127
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WOW.... I must say I absolutely loved this chapter. With all the emotion (and my crappy imagination) just made this incredible to read . I wonder how spike is going to deal with his current situation (if ya know what I mean)
But all honesty keep it up I am really liking this story and I do miss reading updates but take your time.
Luna and the train operator are in on a cockblocking scheme. I'd bet Sweetie Belle is in on it too.
2368127
IT'S NOT VERY EFFECTIVE... I think? (I swear Spike has the worst luck with timing.)
next chapter, Twilight ans Spike will make sweet, sweet 'Im sorry and im happy you are fine' love
If you call a woman a minx it means she's playful, bit of a tease.
"And I don't know how to dance at all. We're sure to look like fools." He winked, and curled a finger. "But it's the impression that counts."
Dat line
Brilliant, hilarious, romantic, and sexy as hell. I feel so bad for Spike; I can only assume Discord was the train conductor.
Sex on a train: A lot easier now that no one ever takes the train.
That ended is messed-up in so many ways.
So, now the question still remains, who's going to get runt first, Twilight or Rarity? Cause one way or another Spike is going to have to do something about his built-up argue's before he loss his mind.
There seem to be a lot less war of the shipping in the comments this time.
Also so good to see you continue to write to please yourself, it still pleases me.
Uh oh. Looks like there's a chance this might be Spilight after all. And to think I thought the beginning of this chapter told us that Rarity won the love triangle.
OMG YES i.......i.....@_@ there are no words I FUCKING LOVE YOUR WRiTING i need a hug
2370267
Aw, thanks! It makes me really happy to see people so enthusiastic about my writing. I really appreciate it.
2369613
Oh, it's never that easy.
2369555
Welp, I have the story I want to write in my mind. I can hardly think of anything that would make me change it now.
2369140
Oh yes... expect some serious self arguing in the next chapter... heh.
Nice call.
2369109
Ah yes... I was practically imagining some over the top scene from some romance novel when I wrote that scene. Channeling my inner chick flick, haha.
2368790
i.imgur.com/PCfHsFr.png
What a great idea!!!
O noes we have a cliff hanger.
2370710
We always have a cliffhanger.
Though this one should be resolved in a couple days. Don't crucify me if I'm wrong though.
Lol showed this to a friend who I'm not to sure is into clop. Wonder how she will react to this chapter.
2370725
Weeelll.. it is tagged as clop!
Actually, I've net lost favorites since I released this. I wonder if it's because people think it's full on Sparity, and so the Spilight fans have left, or if because this is the first bit that's excessively cloppy.
2370723 cant crucify you its your own story. If I don't like it I can go read another or if none have what I want I can write my own.
I would be lying if I were to say I did not skip over the whole sex deal with Spike and Rarity but COME ON....it's Spike and Rarity, that's just plain awful in my eyes....personal option. Gods.....I would be so pissed if I was Spike, damn....and now for the amazing aftermath GO GET TWILIGHT SPIKE, SHE REALLY LOVES YOU And now we wait
2367861 Gods I love you so much right now
2370963 i prefer sparity Hater
2370738 bro you are the BiGGEST CLOP TEASE EVER spike would kill you
ill take any ship i can get
2370738 I have nothing agianst clop. It was actually one of the factors in my reading of this. And I sm usually a die had sparity fan, but your story made me feel for twilight.
2367904
This is quite a well thought out idea. You certainly have done rather well with your portrayal of Rarity, giving her more of her element than the show usually does. I will admit that I tend not to like her portrayal in the show, but that is mostly due to her almost blatant disregard for her own element. She's often quite self-centered and self-absorbed, often not thinking of others at all, much less before herself. I've known enough people IRL that that sort of personality can grate upon me extremely easily.
Great chapter here, I loved the dancing scene, and you could really feel the pent up frustration and passion in the train scene from start to finish.
The little moment with Celestia was very heartwarming, and shows just how much Celestia cares for her people, and that her affection for Twilight is just that much greater.
I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter, and I'm really really rooting for SpikeLight
2371033 To each their own. Honestly not my problem you have a different option fellow fan.
DAYAM!!! And where is this gonna leave poor Twilight?