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>6th of January, 2013

2245355 That was when I first started writing it. I had been busy lately. Plus writers block. More to come soon. As in, a chapter a day between now and the 15th.

And THAT is how you wright a damn good story.
Bravo.

wow Star Wars? really?

Whelp, I read this tentatively since I was in a cloppy mood. I thought for a bit that it was Luna on the throne, but then when the Star Wars references started and Twilight appeared I began to think that it was a dream. Then when it was confirmed a dream I was calm again since for a while I was concerned that this was just really poorly written, but nice job =) Consider this story liked and favorited and I am eager to see future chapters.

I'm glad to see that people understand that those parts were written to be intentionally cheesy. I assure you, from here on out it gets really good.

I think I'm loving this voyer luna.

Before I start for real, Star Wars?

by a certain, white furred, fashionista.

Oh yes.

Lawl Star Wars. That was hilarious. Color me intrigued.

2247534 go Vinyl! and go this story!

Brilliant writing that was terribly written.

Amusing like nothing else, great concept, frankly skipped over the sex scene... Did notice you pulled an homage to "Sharing the Night" hmm?

Regardless, the fastest way for you to improve immeasurably right now would simply be... Find a proof-reader?

Paragraph 1 I was like

"dude your carriage returns are f'd up" and then

Paragraph 3 I was like

"oh"

Also: Twilight Sparkle voiced by James Earl Jones gets you an immediate thumbs up. And a moustache.

At first, I was concerned by how much this resembled a starwars crossover. Then I saw what was going on and laughed. Not bad.

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You don't actually have to tell anyone that. So long as you're not mentioning details about it, I'm sure few people will look at your character and go "OMG! He must have clopped to this!" I read it because it was part of the story and I might have missed some important plot point of piece of foreshadowing that's just part of the story. It actually kinda bugs me when people go out of their way to say they didn't read it for the clop. It's actually a little counter productive because any time people see someone do that, they think "Riiiiight, what ever you say buddy." or quite bluntly "lol, he clopped." I apologize if this does come across as me being a dick but sometimes someone has to speak up when someone else might not realize they are having an unintended effect. If you already knew this, don't believe me, or just don't care at this point, then I guess none of it matters and you can pretty much ignore me.

An interesting take on romance between these two.... I'll,have to keep reading to see what happens next :)

My Little Star Wars... already done by the actual show so why not take it to 11?
Aside from that.... well.... ME GUSTA.

So many references, so little time. I especially like the pretzel one.

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WTF is this shit? GOLD member?!?

It's disguise was perfect
the moon's gaze as it's light

Both of these should say "its"

2252979 What is the color of being intrigued?

I am confuzzled.

Also? The first couple quotes had me going from "aaa I see what you did" to "Huh", after the fifth quote my entire reaction was summed up with this emote:

It's not quoting, it's not referencing, it's just lazy. When I see that, I don't see a clever reference or a joke or anything like that, I see giant neon signs screaming ""I DIDN'T KNOW HOW TO WRITE DIALOGUE FOR THE CONFRONTATION!", and it turns me off of the story.

2383306 *Did not finish the chapter before commenting.

For a writer named Shakespearicles, I'm kinda surprised at the misspellings and misused words. Still, it's an interesting premise, and the writing itself isn't bad (just suffers from a lack of proof-reading). I'll continue this come morning.

Ah, obscure borderlands references ahoy. great story btw.

"ITS A TRAP!" oh Star Wars where would we be without you

I see Twilight heard about the Doctor's perception filter. Clever.

She had given it a psychic enchantment for it to be 'hard to notice'. Not invisible, but just something that the mind of anypony else besides herself would actively avoid to notice.

I approve.

Damn that Star Wars dialogue almost killed it for me. Episode 2&3 sucked in the plot department.

"Gah, these pretzels suck!"

THANK YOU SO MUCH.

So much Star Wars... I almost had to stop reading because I instantly imagined Obi-Wan and Darth Vader...

Gah!

Never expected a clopfic to be a comedy fic.

You can't win, Twilight. If you strike me down, I shall become more powerful than you can possibly imagine!

seriusly Star Wars reference?

"Well Princess Luna can't help everypony's dreams at once. I'm sure she was off saving some other little foal from their nightmares." Twilight tried to reason.

Nope.

"Gird thine loins, young Twilight. Thy Princess of the Night, shall arrive!"

I can't believe you made her say that...

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If you're not opposed to clop, I gotta say raunchy comedy is always the best. I guess it has to do with physical and emotional vulnerability, IMO anyway.

3379254 I dont approve of your pic that is terrifying

Me after reading that first reference part: *snickering.....for a bit* God damn it.

Judging from tonight's dialogue, it seemed that Twilight had just watched Mare Wars again for the hundredth time before going to bed.

Good mare.

"throes of passion", not "throws". Unless she's combining martial and marital arts!

8747704 fixed

All that the moon's light fell upon was within her power to observe

Everything the light touches is our kingdom, simba.

*Reads the dialogue between celestia and twilight*
"Wait a minute, this is familiar"
*reads more*
"Is this?"

Judging from tonight's dialogue, it seemed that Twilight had just watched Mare Wars again for the hundredth time before going to bed. The lavender unicorn was so adorkable sometimes. Luna did not place any stock into Twilight striking down Celestia with her 'dark side' magic. It was integral to tonight's show. On any other night, it could have gone completely differently, but always ending with Twilight and Luna together intimately. Tonight involved bondage, which was rare for the unicorn's dreams, but always a pleasant surprise for the Princess.

"Yep it is"

I think this is the first time I’ve laughed and been slightly...ahem...turned on at the time by a fic....

Judging from tonight's dialogue, it seemed that Twilight had just watched Mare Wars again for the hundredth time before going to bed. The lavender unicorn was so adorkable sometimes. Luna did not place any stock into Twilight striking down Celestia with her 'dark side' magic. It was integral to tonight's show. On any other night, it could have gone completely differently, but always ending with Twilight and Luna together intimately. Tonight involved bondage, which was rare for the unicorn's dreams, but always a pleasant surprise for the Princess.

Hatty hatty hatty ho. That is an interesting take on Star Wars my friend

I came for clop, but was ambushed by Star Wars jokes. You know what? I think it was a trap!

Twilight said as she conjured a magic rope that wrapped itself to her wings, binding her.

Twilight uses bind. It's very effective.

It was a little trick she had learned from a friend from 'out of town'.

Was he a doctor, per chance?

It's hard to believe Shake used to be a Star Wars fan, and a Whoovian.

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"used to be"

Ze Grammar Nazi Group has spotted a mistake!

"Well Princess Luna can't help everypony's dreams at once. I'm sure she was off saving some other little foal from their nightmares." Twilight tried to reason. "Just try to get back to sleep. If it's still bad, I can try a making [a] sleeping potion tomorrow to try to help with the dreams. Alright?"

Twilight grinned as she twisted the bottom of it, bringing the device to life. I[It] hummed very quietly in her hoof as she brought it to her eager pussy. She continued her self-play with her magic.

HAIL GRAMMAR!

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Fixed.

Her accouterments scattered on the floor unceremoniously.

I think it’s accoutrements.