Elements of What Now
“The Elements of What now?” Daxter asks as he rides on Jaks back as they follow Princess Celsetia out of the dungeons.
“Harmony, Daxter. Harmony. They are going to help you get acclimated to life here in Equestria.”
Jak looks at Celestia quizzically, “Uh, how are Elements going to help me.”
Celestia smile down at her newest subject. “The are ponies that embody the Elements, Jak. These ponies will be the ones to help you.”
“Oh, I see.” He does not really see.
“No, you don't.”
“No, I don't”
“Well neither do I, lady,” Daxter exclaimed belligerently. “My best friend has been turned into a pony and no long has pants. I really do not want to look at that thing all day.”
“Ah, c'mon, Dax, it can't be that bad. In fact, it's quite breezy” Jak looks back and smiles at his companion.
“It sure as hell can be. I mean, it's right there.”
“Celestia smiles again. “Do not worry, little one. You will get used to it. Ponies only wear clothes on special occasions. Except for the Apple family. Each one of them is always wear some piece of clothing.”
The trio is silent for the rest of the trek through the dungeons. As they climb higher and higher, the air starts to move around them, signaling that they are near the end of their journey. As they come out into the open air Jak realizes something.
“Whoa, this world is colorful as hell.”
Celestia looks over at him questioningly, “It's not colorful in your world?”
“Not nearly as bright as this.”
“Hmmm,” Celestia looks thoughtful. “That's interesting.”
She is interrupted from asking more by a unicorn galloping up to her. His coat is almost as pure white as the Princess's. His mane and tail are two-toned blue. He skids to a halt before her and makes a sweeping bow. “My Princess, are you sure it is safe to have these two walking about?”
Celestia smiles down at her guard. “I am fairly certain, Shining Armor. You may go about your duties per usual.”
“Yes, Your Highness.” The stallion named Shining Armor gallops off.
Celestia turns back to her two charges, “Please, follow me.” The trio makes its way through the crowded court yard to a chariot that has two pegasi attached to the front. Celestia opens the door and ushers Jak and Daxter inside. She follows them in with the words “to Ponyville” directed at the two pegasi.
Jak starts as the chariot takes flight. “Holy crap, Dax. We are flying. In a chariot. Being pulled by pegasi. How cool is that?”
“Yea,” Daxter says, his face green, “cool.” He runs over to the side and hurls.
“Sorry about that,” Jak apologizes to the Princess. “He's usually really good at flying.”
“It's not a problem.” Celestia says kindly.
Near the end of the trip Celestia looks to Jak. “I'm about to show you something that few ponies get to watch me do.”
Jak looks at her warily. “What are you going to do?”
“You'll see.” She smiles at him before scrunching up her face. Her horn glows a light yellow as the sun starts to move downward. Jak's mouth opens in a perfect, comical “O” while Daxter's chin hits the floor. Soon the world is shroud in darkness before the moon starts to rise to take the sun's place. Celestia looks over to the duo and smiles. Looking at the moon she says, “My sister's charge. Princess Luna. You haven't met her yet, but you will, in time. Now we are almost there.”
She wasn't lying. No sooner had the words come out of her mouth, then the soft bump of the carriage touching down was felt. Celestia opened the carriage door and Daxter fell out, kissing the ground. “Oh, sweet, sweet ground, how I have missed you so.” He gives it one more kiss for good measure.
Jak rolls his eyes and steps out of the carriage, the Princess following behind.
“Welcome to Ponyville,” she says, holding up a hoof. The home of the Ele-”
“Princess Celestia!”
“Kiera?” Jak turns around looking for his girlfriend.
Instead, galloping toward them, is a purple unicorn, delight plain upon her face.
Celestia speaks to Jak, “My faithful student, Twilight Sparkle. Also the Element of Magic.”
Twilight skids to a halt in front of the Princess. The action oddly familiar to Jak. “She looks at him. “Who's this.”
“Twilight, this is Jak and his friend Daxter. They are new and they need to be taught our culture. I thought that none would be better suited for this task than you and the girls.”
Twilight smiles, “Of course, Princess. Everypony is at my house right now. We were going to have a sleep over.”
“Great. I will leave you to it, then.” With that she walks back to the carriage and is gone.
“Well, follow me,” Twilight says kindly. I know everpony will be happy to meet you.”
“What makes you say that? You barely even know me.”
“Well, the Princess seemed to like you well enough. I don't see why we won't.”
Something in her movements jogged Jak's memory. “I think I've met one of you relatives.”
“Oh, really. Who?” she asks enthusiastically.
“I think his name was Shining Armor.”
“Oh, you met my big brother. How is he? Did he mention me at all?”
“No I didn't get much time to talk to him as he was throwing me into the dungeon.”
Twilight stops in her track. Becoming very serious, she asks, “What did you do?”
“Well you probably won't believe me, but I came through an interdimensional portal and it so happened to dump me at the Princess's feet while she was in the middle of hold court. So, naturally, he thought I was a threat. I hold no grudge against him.” He added the last at Twilight's questioning look.
Twilight resumes walking. “That's good. I was afraid you had done something terrible. Wait.” Her eyes widen. “Did you say you came from another dimension?” She gets right in his face.
“Um, yes.”
“Oh, this is so great. I've been telling ponies for years that other dimensions exist and this proves it. Oh, I can't wait to tell them.”
“Uh, maybe we keep it between your friends the Princess, and me. We don't know how all the other ponies would react to another dimensional being being here.”
Twilight's ears droop in sadness. “Yeah, you're right.” Her ears perk up. “But, hey, we're here.”
Jak was so immersed in the conversation he hadn't even noticed where he was going. He looked up and saw a huge tree. It had windows in it with light streaming out of them. They stood before the door. Twilight opened it. “Girls, I've got somepony for you guys to meet.
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1874053 once someone gets it you'll know. I will probably start on the next chapter after church tmrw
Again, a simply wonderful chapter! I truely can't believe how well you have incorporated Jak and Daxter into the Equestria
I only saw a small amount of errors, but nonetheless it was a good chapter!
DJ-Pon-3 approved
1874156 if you want you can point them out and i will try to fix them. Thanks for reading
1874065 do they have the same voice actors? that's the only guess i can come up with
1874065 i looked up twilight's voice (tara strong) and she did keira in jak 3 and x (and a lot of other stuff I know), i congratulate you for knowing/finding that out. here have a pic encrypted-tbn3.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcRL9LF7Nb1nJgAunOlWG3SdfDrQLenltThkJf4uw4maAOMfen7asw
1874264>>1874286 huzzah both of you have a
1874389 i shall were
proudly 
Sorry i had no idea ill be sure to check it out though>>1874495
If i was a women i would have youre children for this.
You are the first to do this. (As far as i know) and things are spelled and capitalized right!
1874591 actually creed miles beat me to the punch my 21 days. His is mlp eco is magic. And i try to take pride in pretty good grammar seeing as i have no editor
Tara Strong voiced keira in the lost frontier.
1874638 huszzah here is your
1874624 i checked his out. I like you'res more.
1874668 thank you
I'm guessing Keira's voice actor is the same as Twilight's. Awesome chapter, freakin' awesome!
Get an editor.
1874894 thank you have a
1875072 i usually like to my own stuff but i may change my mind
1874053 Twilight is also Seem's voice from Jak 3
1877518 thank you. i'll get on that after i'm done with the chapter i'm working on now
(“The are ponies that embody the Elements, Jak. These ponies will be the ones to help you.”) Replace "The" with "They".
(“No, I don't”) Add a period at the end.
(“Well neither do I, lady,”) It's a finished sentence and therefor should end with "!" since he "exclaimed" it.
(“Ah, c'mon, Dax, it can't be that bad.) Take out the second comma and replace it with a period or exclamation mar; it is not needed and sounds more fitting to remove it.
(In fact, it's quite breezy”) Add a period to the end.
(“Celestia smiles again.) You added a quotation mark where it should not be.
( Ponies only wear clothes on special occasions. Except for the Apple family. Each one of them is always wear some piece of clothing.”) Take out the period after "occasions" and lowercase "Except"; you can add the sentences together to make it flow better.
(Each one of them is always wear some piece of clothing.”) Make "wear" become "wearing".
(As they come out into the open air Jak realizes something.) Add a comma in between "air" and "Jak".
( Celestia looks thoughtful. “That's interesting.”) Make "That's" into "That is" because Royalty does not usually combine words like that; they like to state whole words like "That is" and "Is it not".
(The trio makes its way through the crowded court yard to a chariot that has two pegasi attached to the front.) Make the "its way" into "their way" because it shows that "they" are moving, not an "it".
(Jak looks at her warily. “What are you going to do?”) Replace the period after warily with a comma to indicate that he is fixing to speak/create diologue.
(“She looks at him. “Who's this.”) Take out the " before "She" and add a "?" after "this".
( Twilight says kindly. I know everpony will be happy to meet you.”) Remove the period after "kindly" and replace it with a comma. Then add a open-quotation mark after the new comma.
(“Oh, really. Who?” she asks enthusiastically.) Take out the period after "really" and replace it with a "?". It is in question form.
(“No I didn't get much time to talk to him as he was throwing me into the dungeon.”) Add a comma after "No".
( “That's good. I was afraid you had done something terrible. Wait.” Her eyes widen.) Replace the period after "Wait" with a comma; she is going to speak again and it is an interrupted sentence.
(“Oh, this is so great. I've been telling ponies for years that other dimensions exist and this proves it. Oh, I can't wait to tell them.”) I interpreted this as Twilight being very happy to find out about this news, so I believe that (in my opinion) that the periods should be replaced with "!"s.
(“Uh, maybe we keep it between your friends the Princess, and me.) Put a comma after "friends" and replace "me" with "myself".
( “Girls, I've got somepony for you guys to meet.) Add a quotation mark after the period.
There were more mistakes in this chapter, but they were only small things. Hope I helped out
Don't let it discourage you that there were more this time; writing is harder than editing and I would have made more mistakes than you if I were to have written this. You are doing really good, just look at the small stuff! It's perfectly fine, really. Still a great chapter, I got to re-read it and it was a pleasure!
DJ-Pon-3 approved
1877657 thank you
No prob what-so-ever!...I just hope I don't look like an English freak or you think I'm poining out things too harsh
I'm just trying to help
DJ-Pon-3 approved
1877725 constructive criticism is always welcome
Of course I get it! Tara Strong voiced both Keira and Twilight! I caught it easily!
after that part.
I just to
I lol'd so hard at that!
2183794 Wait, what?!?!?!? MY LIFE IS COMPLETE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Awesome!! Keira and Twilight are voiced by the same lady!!! Another reason to like MLP
PAY. ATTENTTION. TO. YOUR. GRAMMER.
sowwy, just the incorrwct grammer ruins the immersion into the story
2950583 r u serious
6127641 *wants grammar fixed, spells 'incorrect' wrong*
2183794 for real?
Good chapter 😊