My name is LuckyBlitz. I live in the year 2050, where technology is super advanced. I live a life full of loneliness and sadness. Yet my whole life changes when I decided to invent a time machine. Having a wacky adventure and meeting a certain pink pony—or should I say human—cheers me up. What would my life be like if she hadn’t stumbled in it?
this is my first attempt in writing/typing a story constructive critisim welcomed
P.S. this is semi based on a short story writing I did for class.
also writing isn't my strong point.
also looking for cover art. please pm me cover art
comment on my page on what i'm looking for. (i'm using a temporary pic I found)
I like to thank
NYQUTIE for proof reading, giving tips and being the best online friend there is.
Haven't read or disliked, but I just want to say that naming the character after your username is a major turnoff for most guys on this site.
2241110 a lot of people do the same, plus I planned this ages ago.
So far so good, Lucky.
2241220 took me two attempts.
Just a, um... suggestion. So the story is in third person, yet the description is in first. It kind of confused me at first, but the story itself looks promising. Tracking for further chapters.
2243614 it's going to be great, i had planned most of it in my mind.
Well, so far, this was an entertaining read. As Pico Pie said before me, you might want to consider keeping things in the future either in the first person or the third; having a mixture just starts to get confusing. Other than that, though, it seems like a fairly bang-up job for your first time actually writing a fanfic. Congrats!
2492586 as i said to Pico, it's gonna shift perspective every once in a while. i don't deserve ALL of the credit, my friend NYQUTIE edited it and add to it.
i apprciate the feed back
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No sweat!
2492681 Np
