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Umm.... With a title like that, I was expecting a stronger relationship and a longer story. I'm no the best author myself, but I still know when a story is rushed. You didn't really describe anything; you said it ALL! You've probably heard this before, but a story shown be shown and not told.
And to help you with the southern accent, just say the dialogue aloud in a southern accent or picture Applejack actually saying it.
It's a good premise, but for future reference, instead of just saying that the party was yesterday, explain the party in detail.
Good luck on any future writing!
That was... Good. Rushed, even. I still loved it.
Here's a few tips from a totally unexperienced author
1) The first paragraph was weird POV. It should inform the reader from thoughts or speech. Try expanding it into the story Like dat_flank said.
2) Southern accent: It'll take forever to learn. Try looking at other popular fics to see how they do it.
3) Take it smoother. Don't rush it. If it takes you a long time, and you really want to write a good story, take as much as time as you need. There's is no need to rush.
4) Please for the love of Celesta, spell Eeyup right! (I'm kidding, of course)
-Cheers
Needs more chapters!
Anyway I love ApplePie!