When the calm, gentle Vanilla Shake starts her own business, everything runs smooth. Soon, a mysterious Mare arrives to the small shop. The Mare then tells Vanilla that she has 3 days to live. Then, without another word, the Mare leaves. Vanilla isn't sure what to think, is it true? Why would anypony want to kill her? Vanilla then decides that although these may not be her last hours, she must make the most of it.
Too many grammatical and syntactical errors mar this story . You have a good idea for a story but you need to reread and edit. Or get someone else to edit your writing for you. It's a crying shame really because I like Vanilla Shake.