PinkieDash

by NotActuallyABrony

Let the Pranking Commence!

It Was autumn. Rainbow Dash had decided to prank somepony, But Who and how? Pinkie Pie was Stood next to her, A smile that threatened to split her face in two had appeared. She was excited to prank somepony even more than Rainbow Dash. She couldn't hold it in any longer.

"Oh, Rainbow dash! Who are we going to prank!" She said, eagerly bouncing up and down.

"Patience Pinkie pie." She said, a smirk upon her face. I have an idea in mind, but i'm going to a ball."

Not a moment later, Pinkie Pie pulled out a shiny, pink ball. Seemingly from nowhere.

"What... How did you?" Rainbow dash laughed, her laughter seemed to last forever. "oh, Pinkie Pie, is there anything you can't do?"

Pinkie Pie smiled. "There sure isn't!"

"Okay, Here's how it's going to happen. I'll hide in that pile of leaves over there and then you roll the ball next to me. When some brave colt walks past say 'Oh no! I've dropped my ball! If only there were a strong, brave colt to come and hand it to me, I would be ever so grateful!' And when he goes to retrieve the ball i'll jump out and give him the fright of his life!" Said dash, laughing.

"This is sure going to be fun, Rainbow Dash!" Pinkie whispered. "Quick Dash, I see one coming, Hide!"

Rainbow Dash threw herself into the pile of leaves While Pinkie Pie Rolled her ball towards rainbow dash. By the time they were ready, the colt was a mere 10 meters away. His coat was white and his mane was glossy.

"Oh no! I've dropped my ball! If only there were a strong, brave colt to come and hand it to me, I would be ever so grateful!" She said, just as dash had told her to.

"Don't worry young filly! I will get your ball for you." He said, Courageously.

He walked towards the ball and the pile of leaves which housed the impatient blue filly. Just as he was going to pickup the ball, he was attacked by an explosion of orange and brown crispy leaves, as well as Rainbow Dash. He jumped back in fear and sprinted away. From his perspective, it was as if a rainbow had exploded out of the ground.

"Rainbow monster!" he Screamed, galloping away as fast as he could.

The two fillies Burst out into a fit of giggles, Tears pouring down their faces while they were rolling around on the floor.

"That was SO totally awesome!" Said Rainbow Dash, wiping a tear from her eye with her hoof."Best.Prank.Ever!"

"It... Sure was... Wasn't it?" Pinkie Pie said, Laughing inbetween words.

"I'm Bored." Rainbow dash muttered.

"Me too." Said Pinkie Pie, there was a hint of mischief sparkling in her big blue eyes. "Let's prank some more ponieS!" Pinkie yelled, Bouncing up and down in joy.

"Yeah, We could do that. Rainbow Dash said, her eyes were narrowing. "Or we could prank a dragon!" She let out out an evil laugh and rubbed her hooves together.

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Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash arrived at the library. It was the place where they were sure to find the little purple and green dragon. They peeked through one of the windows and they both saw Spike sorting the books.

Pinkie Pie Laughed.

"Oh, isn't spike just the cutest dragon ever! I don't know if i could prank him." Pinkie pie said.

"Pinkie Pie, We've pranked him before. And last time it was your idea!" Rainbow Dash Giggled. "Besides it will be fun."

"Okie dokie lokie!" Pinkie Pie said, yet again bouncing up and down. "How are we going to prank him this time?" She asked.

"Okay. You hide in the libraby sign while I knock on the door and get spike to come out. While i have him distracted, you sneak in and put the books in a different order." Rainbow dash explained.

"Sure thing, Rainbow Dash!" She squealed.

Pinkie Pie dived behind the sign while Rainbow dash approached the front door. She knocked on the door and waited for a moment. She saw the door handle turn and watched the door open.

"Hey Spike." Said Rainbow dash, a beaming smile on her face.

"Oh hey Rainbow Dash!" He said. "Twilight isn't here sh-"

"Nah, that's okay spike." She said, chuckling. "I wanted to show YOU something."

"Well what is it? I'm kinda busy." He said, Frowning.

"It's nothing, just a Sonic Rainboom." She explained.

"A... a Sonic Rainboom!" His eyes lit up in excitement.

"Yes that's right a Sonic Rainboom!" She chuckled. "But i'll need you to come here."

Spike ran towards Rainbow Dash and she flew up into the air, Meanwhile, Pinkie Pie had slipped in and had already started to mess around with the books and she had threw most of them onto the floor. When she had finished she Snook out and hid behind the library sign again.

"Spike sure is going to be cross with old Pinkie." she thought to herself.

Rainbow Dash had seen her sneak out, she landed next to spike and smiled.

"Aren't you going to do a Sonic Rainboom?. Spike asked, a puzzling look on his scaly face.

"No but..." She laughed. "There is a bigger surprise than that!"

At this time Pinkie had jumped out and started laughing. Spike was truly puzzled.

"I don't get it." he said turning around. He then saw that most of the libary's books were on the floor, as well as most of them Jumbled up. "Oh you guys! Twilight is going to be really mad at me." He shouted.

But the two ponies didn't care, they were rolling on the floor laughing fiercely. Spike moaned and slammed the door shut.

"You know Pinkie Pie, I really like Hanging around with you. You're such a laugh."

"I enjoy Being with you too." She said, blushing.

What Rainbow Dash didn't know was that, Pinkie really did like being With her, Pinkie Had much deeper feelings than that though. And Dash didn't Know that Pinkie Pie Was about to change her world forever.

Comments

[The Writer of Fate]

I...

I honestly don't know where to begin.

Please get an editor of some sort before you continue this. It's an absolute nightmare

[dartmaul15]

where to begin.

oh, i know: actually publish something that isn't given away in the description

[Spell Bound]

This is worth watching. But like the above guy said, there are some errors. May i suggest you type it in Microsoft word first, then transcribe it into FimFiction

[person who reads]

Yeah bro, you kinda left out a few words and need to fix some punctuation. Other than that, you've got a good thing going here. There aren't many PieDash fics. I shall be watching.

[NotActuallyABrony]

1499374 Thanks for the positive comment :)

[NotActuallyABrony]

1499557 Thanks, I appreciate it!

[Spell Bound]

1499605 No point in negativity, when there is the possibility for improvement

[Thorlol]

Such a riveting title...

Going to need to go exploring... Pardon me while I throw on my reviewing theme...

Anyhow let me see.

First sentence we have capitalization errors.

It Was autumn

Correct should be.

It was Autumn

Then we get more capitalization errors in the second sentence.

Rainbow Dash had decided to prank somepony, But Who and how?

No caps.
Bad pony.
Moving on to the next section...

Pinkie Pie was Stood Stood doesn't need to be capped da fuq. Me thinks you did some editing and forgot to delete was next to her, A no cap smile that threatened to split her face in two had appeared Tense change. She was excited to prank somepony even more than Rainbow Dash. She couldn't hold it in any longer.
"Oh, Rainbowdash Cap! Who are we going to prank! Breaks the order of punctuation. If it's a question then it gets a question mark even if it's shouted. Use a 'speech' word like shouted instead of an exclamation mark" She said, eagerly bouncing up and down.
"Patience Pinkie pie Cap." She said, a smirk upon her face. I Quotation marks before the I have an idea in mind, but i'm the I in I'm needs to be capped. It's shortened for I am, so it still retains the cap. going to a ball I do believe you meant 'going to need a ball.' because the thought of Rainbow Dash at a ball dancing a waltz is giggle worthy. ."

Alright. So just a few missed words and wrong caps... nothing much so far, no OOC characters... both are just pranking like they usually do.
*Starts theme up again*

Not a moment later, Pinkie Pie pulled out a shiny, pink ball. Seemingly from nowhere.
"What... How did you?" Rainbow dash Cap laughed, her laughter seemed to last forever 'laughed for what seemed like forever' is a much better choice. Not as congested.. "oh Cap, Pinkie Pie, is there anything you can't do?"
Pinkie Pie smiled. "There sure isn't!"
"Okay, Here's No cap how it's going to happen. I'll hide in that pile of leaves over there and then you roll the ball next to me. When some brave colt walks past say 'Oh no! I've dropped my ball! If only there were a strong, brave colt to come and hand it to me, I would be ever so grateful!' And when he goes to retrieve the ball i'll Cap the I jump out and give him the fright of his life!" Said dash Cap, laughing.

Your tense is bouncing a bit. Keep it all in either past or present tense.

Starting to get a bit OOC for Pinkie. She usually refers to Dash as 'Dashie'. Something you seemed to have neglected.

mane was glossy.

Glossy what? Glossy refers to how something looks, as in a glossy finish. What colour was it?

Courageously

Why courageously? He's just helping someone pick up a ball. Nothing to be all hero about.

Screamed, galloping away as fast as he could.

No cap on screamed.

"Best.Prank.Ever!"

Spaces. Between. Sentences.

The two fillies Burst out into a fit of giggles

Burst shouldn't have a cap. And also a question. This is taking place in a present day; when Dash and Pinkie actually started hanging out, so why are you referring to them as fillies? Let me give you a lowdown on the gender/age translations.
Woman=Mare
Man=Stallion

Girl (young)=Filly
Boy=Colt
Kid=Foal

Then things really start to get weird.

Pinkie Pie said, Laughing inbetween words.

No cap on laughing. And in between has a space.
Also you're starting to use the word said too many times.
Here is a shitload of other words you can use. Use. Them. Or. Else. It. Seems. Like. You're. Speaking. In. A. Monotone. Voice.

I'm Bored.

No cap on bored.

"Let's prank some more ponieS!"

Why is the S capitalized. And also it's lets. Not Let's. Let's is shortened. Lets is plural.

Pinkie Pie Laughed.

No cap on laughed.

"Oh, isn't spike just

Spike is a name. Cap the name.

I don't know if i could prank him.

Y U NO CAP I?

Pinkie pie said.

Pie is a name. Cap the name.

You hide in the libraby sign

Library is misspelled. And also how can you hide in a sign? Hide behind a sign.

While i have him distracted, you sneak in and put the books in a different order."

Capitalize your I with your shift key.

Rainbow dash explained.

Cap the Dash.

Pinkie Pie dived behind

Since when is dived a word? It's dove.

"Nah, that's okay spike.

Spike is growing tired of these missed caps on his name.

He said, Frowning.

No cap on frowning.

But i'll

Cap the I on I'll

"Spike sure is going to be cross with old Pinkie."

Thoughts in italic font. No quotations.

she landed next to spike and smiled

Stop abusing Spike's name with not capping.

"I don't get it." he said turning around. He then saw that most of the library's books were on the floor, as well as most of them Jumbled up. "Oh you guys! Twilight is going to be really mad at me." He shouted.

That isn't a prank. That's pure jackassery right there. Sorry. Jumbled doesn't need a cap.

"You know Pinkie Pie, I really like Hanging around with you. You're such a laugh."

No cap on hanging.

I enjoy Being with you too.

No cap on being.

What Rainbow Dash didn't know was that, No comma Pinkie really did like being With her, Pinkie Had much deeper feelings than that though. And Dash didn't Know that Pinkie Pie Was about to change her world forever.

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