Sunset Shimmer was doing nothing particularly important on her Spring break, lazing around at her apartment.
Twilight Sparkle was at school, only trying to get textbooks from her locker before going home and resting. She stumbles upon two unfamiliar, yet somehow familiar faces.
The girls need to figure out what’s happening and how to get them back home.
this story uses images (drawn by me), not exactly necessary but i felt like adding them if they don’t work then erm i’ll try to fix them but oh well
THIS IS A SCISET STORY.
hi this is my first story so bare with me<3
i originally made this as a comic (you can find some of it on my tiktok @rayisanactualrat ) but….writing is much more easier :3
ALSO THIS TAKES PLACE A LITTLE BIT BEFORE LEGEND OF EVERFREE
what in the fanfiction indeed
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ERM I DIDNT MEAN IT LIKE THAT
this one got me in the comics and got me here too pfffffffft hilarious
oke oke, so, i real like the premise, i'd say a lil bit of editing for gramatical corrections and better phrasing would do wonders for this chap, it's quite a fun read but i'd say it needs a bit more time to work out the situations. What i mean is: don't shy out on exploring the characters' actions and feelings while reading, i'd even tell ya to explore it a bit more, otherwise the writing feels a bit rushed, if ya get me!
hell i'm awful at constructive criticism lol hope i got the message across without making you feel bad or whatever, i suck at words oh my frog
youre so real for that, anyway, really enjoyed it, waiting for the next chapters!
There may be some grammatical errors but this sure is interesting! I'm guessing Prince Solaris is the alternative version of Princess Celestia.
I'm looking forward for this series^^