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Commander30


I write fanfic about lots of things. Including ponies now, apparently.

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This story is a sequel to Bid Time Return


It's nearly Hearth's Warming, and Foggy Freeze is ready to relax, ready to retire, ready to enjoy the holiday with his wife and children.

He is not ready for Discord to pop up at his desk unannounced.

And truth be told, Discord is not ready for this either, but Fluttershy did ask him to apologize to her father, and what better way to celebrate the holidays with an attempt at a much better second impression?

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I like this.

11766829
Thank you! ๐Ÿ™‚

11766883
I hope it gets more votes.

Youโ€™re welcome.

This made me warm all over. Your characterization is so spot-on. I love it. That was I think the nest Discord apology I've ever read, the perfect mix of sincerity and lightheartedness (to keep him from being too mushy-hearted, of course).

But the last scene was my favorite. You even threw in a lil' shippy moment in there and that made it even better (for me, at least). And I REALLY like the part where Discord says he doesn't like making sense if it undervalues her. A little detail, I know, but I've written Discord say something similar to that, but the way you worded it is, in my opinion, the perfect way to describe it while still highlighting that he can still like things that make sense... with some important exceptions.

I really hope you write more of these two one day. It makes me want to, as well!

11768929
Thank you so much! I still feel like I struggle with writing Discord sometimes, so it's good to know that readers are finding him in-character. And of course it's shippy; I couldn't write about Discord and Fluttershy together and not have it be at least a little shippy ๐Ÿ˜…

I do hope to write more soon, maybe starting after the New Year when I've got a little more free time lol. And I'd love to see more of your writing as well! :pinkiehappy:

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