This isn’t new but someone told me to start thinking outside the box.
“Even if it’s over used think outside the box.” TalB
So a human in equestria? Let’s get things serious.
So I wished to be in another land. Big deal. I hope it’s better than back home.
Good more
Looks good.
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I hope it happens irl
I wonder how much of the time timeline will change with matthew there?
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Just wait and see
You said in the description you wished to be in Equestria, but um buddy you technically didn't. Also just a little nitpick, but I can't think of a single place where someone would rip another person's throat out for pizza.
Also immediately I saw a run on sentence among other editing issues.
Lastly how is a 16 year old kid supposed to slow down a bull or know that something is wrong with its hoof? I would be terrified and literally have no clue what to do there. Then promptly get ran over or impaled.
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Meh meh meh meh. Chill out. I’ll go over it later.
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Tear each others throats out is a metaphor
cute opening, great start, i laughed at the fourth wall break. I sense Matthew and Pinkie getting alone great. Also gotta say kinda daring that the first thing Mat does is flirt with AJ just after meeting her for like 20 seconds. I look forward to your next chapter