• Member Since 5th Aug, 2023
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Cotton Bloom


He/She/Them I write silly stuff, no shame in sight, I think.

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Twilight gets asked by Celestia to investigate Equestrian history, specifically the ways of the old ponies. Sunburst accepts helping her, going to Ponyville each week to document his gatherings, little did he know that while doing so, he would find himself interested in something more than just old scripts, or rather, he would find himself interested in somepony. A Big Mac x Sunburst fic.

Cover art drawn by me.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 10 )

I really like the interaction between the characters in here, it feels pretty organic and fits how they would probably talk in the show, i hope you keep it up ma'am! cause i wanna read more

Im absolutely loving this, can't wait for more!

Cute story so far keep it up.

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Thank you!

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I'm really glad to hear that, thanks!

Aww good start. :heart: I do have a couple things to note though.

Maybe its just me but I feel like Big Macintosh especially in the beginning talks way more than he actually does. Maybe it applies only just to Sunburst since I don't believe he interacts that much with the other characters so far, hopefully its explained more down the line!

Also try to use something other than quotations to distinguish Sunburst's thoughts as it feels too easy to confuse with actual dialogue, at least in my case.

Can't wait to see where this goes however, you're great at art too. :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you a lot for commenting, means a lot to me! :heart:

I actually did have the idea of explaining Big Mac's talking later down the line, because I myself realized I did end up making him quite a talker at the start :twilightsheepish:

Also try to use something other than quotations to distinguish Sunburst's thoughts as it feels too easy to confuse with actual dialogue, at least in my case.

I will take this into consideration next time! I'll edit the chapter at one point to make those parts clearer. Thank you!

Don't ship it, but the cover art drawed me in, so far it's a good story! Also, there's somebody downvoting all the comments sooo... hi downvoter! Fuck off please! If you don't like the story there's no need to be a bitch about it. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you for giving it a read! The downvoting issue has been kind of an annoyance to me unfortunately, I've been trying to not pay too much attention to it tho :heart:

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Yeah, the downvoter doesn't matter when the story is good.

11699998
I feel your pain when it comes to downvotes. It means you're pissing off the people who don't matter.

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