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J3sterking


Eccentric story teller and Orthodox Christian. RWBY giga-fan, writes lots of EQG focused content.

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Rainbow Dash was no stranger to tough situations, but every once in a while, one seriously ticked her off. Right before her Wonderbolts show starts, Twilight got them both stuck in a magical prism.

And now they have to get out, however possible.


Written for Bean's Writing Group, using the prompt 'trying to escape from somewhere'. I decided to go for the bonus, using color to convey emotions, as well. Check the Author's notes at the end for the color code I used.

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Comments ( 4 )

Very cool! A little confusing, but cool nonetheless. It takes a second reading to really get the emotional landmarking.

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Glad you enjoyed it! It was written in about thirty minutes, with minimal editing done, so it is not top-notch work. The 'emotional landmarking', as you put it, was meant to be a little ambiguous. Or, at least, as 'meant to be' as anything is in a fic I spat out that fast was

This was an okay story. The premise was interesting, but the execution was a bit bland. The pacing felt a bit rushed, making the characterization feel off. The gimmick of the story was used well, although I still felt it was a bit obvious what was going on.

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Thanks! The criticism was taken to heart! I am always looking to improve!

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