Sunny Starscout has found herself being roomates with Izzy Moonbow! After the Lighthouse was destroid by Sprout's big robot. However she quickly finds out she has a crush on Izzy! She's scared to tell as to not ruin there ever blosming friendship. What ever will she do let us found out.
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Cute
A little rough, and you defiantly need an editor or pre-reader. Also not really enough to go on with how short it is. I would also say try and refrain from using Pinkie like dialog for Izzy. It just comes off as annoying. Now while I like this Sunny/Izzy ship I will say you really kinda rushed into it. Sleeping in the same bed right off the start is way to fast.
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Thank you!
I will pre read my stories more. And hold back a bit and not rush ahead on the romantic stuff. I can't really have anybody pre read my stories. But anyway thanks for the advice!
I see a lot of misspelling errors
Great story man! There are speling errors but other than that its a great story! Keep it up!
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Thanks again means alot! Im working on not making as much spelling mistakes as I do now!
Sunny was definetly smooth with that sneaky cheek kiss and Izzy being scared seince she never had a crush is so cute!
Hope to see where the story prograsses dude keep it up!
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Thanks man glad you like the story!
The redaction is pretty decent for a first fanfic, but the grammar error are too much and too many to really enjoy the story! I suggest you use grammarly or any grammar tool to correct these error. I'm aware English isn't your first language, but you need to make an effort to write on it.
...When did that happen?!
This both really funny and cute!
Izzy just realising she's gay, and Sunny having to help her figure it out is cute! Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Thank you so much for your support it means lot! And I have big plans for chapter 7 it's part of the reason why it's taking so long!
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During the events of the G5 movie that came before MYM and TYT.
I love this so much eeeee!
Dude that kiss is awesome! Even if it's only on the cheek
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Thank you so much! I'm really happy you enjoyed the story!
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Sorry for the late reply yeah im intending Roomies to be prequel to mym and tyt. Hope that answers your question
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Sorry for the late reply!
And thank you for the criticism! Im working on polishing all the chapters of Roomies, and hopefully getting rid of any grammatical and spelling errors, so hopefully the story will be better!
Again thank you for the criticism it helps me improve as a writer!