A Pair Of Assholes

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Exuno

Exuno #1 · Aug 16th, 2023 · · ·

Hot. Hot good hot.

Zephyr's such a disgusting scumbag and he's so hot for it. I really applaud the balance you strike between letting the story fully enjoy his acts while (because?) it never tries to downplay they're bad. The gag with Rainbow also being a horny self-indulgent rapist 10/10 bonus

I don't think you overdid the sweat stuff — partly in that it was a core point of why you're writing, so it's not possible to, but even beyond that it's not like I was getting tired of it. It's definitely something I enjoy a lot, though, which makes me biased, but also the specific kind of person you're writing for...?

The sex scene might have been a bit boring, yeah, but for me that's a consequence of Somno and only really having one actor take initiative in the scene, and a natural, required shortcoming of the kink you just have to accept? Having RD be a moany slut was a pretty nice compromise — maybe you could have paced paragraph breaks and action a bit better to take advantage of that?

Still. Hot objectifying huge gross smelly lovely fuckable soft butts; always a fan of your work and excited about the implications of more small self-indulgent ideas getting pumped out—

Thanks for sharing!

Birdybirdbird

Birdybirdbird #2 · Aug 17th, 2023 · · ·

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Thanks!
Yeah, something inside stopped me from pointing out that he was a rapist for doing this. I think it’s because it would’ve absolutely taken away the unrealistic aspect of smut that’s the whole reason people come to smut like this.

But what’s that about paced paragraphs you said?

NessaPony