I haven't even begun reading this yet but looking at the grammar mistakes in just the summary fills me with dread.

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Update, its actually got good grammar. Somehow it's only that summary that's poopenfarten.

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that funny ill have to read this then

11644537ya so jest was the editor and cleaned up the story, i just typed up a quick summery for it.

This was a surprisingly good story, the plot was a lot deeper then I expected and I like the slow burn ensnaring of each of the cakes. Great job, keep it up.

Amazing story especially for a first-time writer, although I'd leave a disclaimer that there is incest scenes in the 10th and 12th chapters. Not my cup of tea, but the story was amazing otherwise. Would really love to see Futa Zecora with the adult CMC next!

Esta historia está bien y esperemos que nos muestres la historia de Zecora

Gods this chapter is so hot and raw! Adding it to my favorites.
So they lost a father and gained a Daddy! 😍
What an ending! Personally I'd be curious as to a continuance years later but this ending is fantastic.
I hope someone draws this final chapters family scene one day in all their glorious debauchery. 💋🤞👨‍👩‍👧‍👦💖🙏😉
Awesome erotic story!

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Glad you like it was a lot of fun making this

The male in question didn't seem to give Carrot a second thought either, and was focused utterly on Cup. With one hand on Pound’s rear, and the other gliding through Cup’s long mane, the zebra was supremely confident. Wearing a wide smile, he quickly showed himself to be the superior kisser, and overall better lover.

You said hand ?

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I’m sorry I thought you were making a reference to another story when you went with Zacura and the other ponies in her home mentioning how she was also doing sketchy stuff

Good story I wish they had more stories with this character Shaka