While out enjoying the “natural scenery,” Featherbangs is pummeled by a fruity rain, leaving him critically injured. Big Macintosh is riddled with guilt and sadness over his crimes. Can his regret engender a greater fate for the both them?
Hello I am Gerhaus. I am the gay man in Düsseldorf.
While out enjoying the “natural scenery,” Featherbangs is pummeled by a fruity rain, leaving him critically injured. Big Macintosh is riddled with guilt and sadness over his crimes. Can his regret engender a greater fate for the both them?
This was a cute story. I liked the way Big Mac felt duty-bound to help Featherbangs, and the relationship grew from that initial feeling. You've got an extensive vocabulary, but I think you can pull back a bit on it. Phrases like "succulent neck" and "florid fields" make the story feel overwrought at times, and a simpler description would do. It would also give you more time to focus on how Big Mac's emotions are evolving, which could use more breathing room. That said, there's a poetry to this story that I really appreciated, and it's clear that you care a lot about these ponies. Fun story overall.
really love the voice here. it’s a shitposting style i use often so it’s always great to see in prose
love the purpleness of the prose, and the description of Big Mac’s neck as “succulent”
the poetry! the alliteration! honestly i am really into it
augh what wonderful melodrama
if this is not a riff on the classic trope i am forcing such an interpretation on it because this is great
that you know all the elements of a good Big Mac x Featherbangs story yet choose not to write a straightforward one is both a respectable power move and a testament to the strength of the ship
perfect
gottem
so true bestie
chapter title drop!
love it
augh love this simile. especially fun because he is also literally a horse
so true bestie
and augh, what a heartwarming ending. thank you so much for it!