Valley Dale (part 1)
Luna’s heart beated nearly uncontrollably in her chest as she approached the outskirts of the village. She had made extra certain that her disguise spell was utterly impeccable. A small mirror in the corner of her caravan had helped with the crafting of the finer details. It took a lot of time to carefully shape the illusion, but once she had finished crafting the spell matrix, the magic would, when activated, always output the exact same visual illusion that she had decided upon.
It was far more time-consuming to set up then the dynamic and fluid illusions used in battle or during magic shows, but it was more consistent and easier to maintain.
As she approached the gate that bisected the wooden palisade wall of the small town, a pair of guards stood vigilantly and awaited her approach. When they looked upon Luna, they would only see an azure-coated, platinum-maned unicorn, wrapped in a starry purple cloak.
"Please state your name and business." Ordered one of the guards when Luna had approached close enough to speak to, in a professional, but not necessarily unkind tone.
The disguised alicorn took a deep breath to steady her nerves before putting on an easy smile, answering in a cheery voice. "Hello, my name is Starry Night, and I'm just here to visit the market. Perhaps purchase a few things before I continue my journey."
Travelling Mages were a rare, but not necessarily a universally loved profession, despite the good that they did. In some select towns, a strong anti-outsider sentiment still lingered, as well as a general aversion to letting others solve their problems for them. Luna didn't know the exact attitude and disposition of this town, but thought that she would probably have an easier time entering the town if she initially presented herself as an ordinary traveller that was just stopping by to do some trading, before leaving soon after.
After all, she could reveal that she was an experienced Mage at any point once she was inside. It would probably leave a better impression than cantering in, like some white knight.
She was probably being overly cautious, but since this is the first town that planned to visit on her journey, she wanted to make a good first impression.
"Are you with the Mistvale Trading Company then?" The guard inquired, looking curiously at Luna's trailer.
"I'm sorry, I'm not…" Luna stammered, her head tilting in confusion, "I don't think…." The carefully rehearsed script that the former Princess had been crafting in her mind over the past hour, fell to pieces. Not expecting the sudden pivot in questioning, the disguised alicorn stumbled in her reply.
"Evidently not then?" The guard remarked at Luna’s genuinely caught-off-guard expression. "Sorry for jumping to conclusions like that, but that is a very nice caravan. Looks heavily enchanted too. I thought that you had to be from one of them bigger trading companies to be pulling such a thing."
Luna turned her head to look at the trailer behind her, following the direction of the guard's gaze and cringed. He was right. The trailer was very nice. Much nicer than a no-name travelling Mage should ever be able to feasibly afford.
'Fuck,' Luna silently cursed to herself. Spending a hundred years constantly surrounded by the boundless opulence of royalty and nobility had evidently skewed her perception about what sort of transportation methods common ponies used in their everyday life.
While Starswirl’s trailer wasn't quite as gaudy and ostentatious as the Royal Carriage that she had used in her duties as Princess or some of the vehicles used by the upper nobility, the masterful level of craftsmanship and sheer financial expenditure that had to have gone into the construction of the trailer was immediately evident.
As one of the Grand Masters of the College, Starswirl had been provided with one of the best travelling caravans that money could afford. The former Princess would have a hard time trying to explain how she had come into ownership of such a vehicle.
Luna’s entire plan of action had just been immediately thrown out of the window. She scrambled to think of an explanation for how she could justify owning a one-of-a-kind caravan, like Starswirl’s.
The alicorn internally seethed at her stupidity. After all of the careful steps that she had taken to reach this point, her entire facade had just potentially become undone over something that should have been blindingly obvious to her from the very start.
Luckily, she had given very few details about herself, beyond her name and the fact that she wished to visit the market. No logical or factual inconsistencies that she had to walk back to explain how she came to own the trailer behind her.
A new narrative and backstory took shape in Luna’s mind. With a quiet, shaky breath, Luna turned back to face the guard, before speaking once again.
"I inherited this trailer from my grandfather, Spectral Moonlight. He used to be a Grand Master at the old College of Sorcery, before the Collapse. He taught my father, who in turn taught me everything I know about being a Mage. In fact, I'm currently using it to complete my Journeypony Mage trials." Luna announced in a proud voice.
It was a big, bold claim. However, with the priceless caravan shattering any hope of acting humble or inconspicuous, she did not have many available options. It was also a lie that was more likely to be believed at face value than any other claim she could make. The unique trailer, combined with the fact that she would be easily able to perform a variety of high-level spells on demand, lent credence to the false background being truthful and thus, being accepted as truth.
And she did need it to be accepted. Her strategy to initially present herself as a humble merchant/traveller had been rendered obsolete in the face of her potentially being accused of having stolen her caravan. Or worse, there was a non-zero possibility of her true identity being uncovered if any local or regional authorities didn't believe her story and sought to investigate her more closely.
Staying as close to the truth as possible would be her ally. These two low-paid militia ponies, from a backwater town, might not have the resources to dig deeper into her faux identity, beyond what could be gleaned from casual questioning, but that might not necessarily be true for other curious parties.
Travelling Mages were not a very common sight in New Equestria after the demise of the College. It's a claim that would certainly make at least a few higher powers sit up and take notice of her. This is why Luna needed to make certain that her new persona could stand up to a much greater degree of scrutiny.
The name, Spectral Moonlight, was not accidental either. He really was a Grand Master, a colleague of Starswirl and had even directly taught Luna several times, during her time at the tower. He was also deeply introverted and died ninety years ago without any known close family. Meaning that Luna probably knew more about him than any other pony alive and could easily feign any knowledge or details that only a family member would know. The lack of familial records that were recorded or kept during Discord's tyranny certainly didn't hurt her case.
Any pony that looked deeply into her claims shouldn’t be able to spot any inconsistencies. She was probably being overly cautious, but a lack of attention to detail had almost derailed her entire journey, not thirty seconds prior. She was not taking chances a second time with a half-baked backstory.
"So, not only are you a Mage, but a Legacy Mage as well?" The guard asked with an expression of awe and slight reverence.
It was a common misconception that the descendants of powerful and accomplished Mages were destined to become powerful and accomplished Mages themselves. While it's true that there were dynasties of powerful Mage families within the College, that was more due to genetics and superior education.
Common ponies placed entirely too much prestige onto the perceived pedigree of a Mage's family. Luna would likely regret claiming to be the descendant of a Grand Master of the College, because of how much attention it would draw to her, but there was no other way to justify being in possession of such a finely crafted and heavily enchanted caravan.
"How is it that we have never heard of you?" The second guard asked in a curious, but not necessarily interrogating tone. He looked just as awed as his partner.
Luna gave a disarming smile in response to the guard's question. She had also thought up a valid excuse for that potential line of enquiry. "During the Collapse, when my parents were young, my grandfather had them flee from Equestria with several members of his extended family using his caravan. They eventually settled in the Borderlands, in the Eastern Wastes, just west of the Great Divide."
"My parents founded a small homestead in the area and I later worked there as a freelance Mage for a few years, before recently deciding to travel back to my homeland of Equestria," Luna concluded in the most sincere tone that she could manage. It was probably not the most watertight backstory that she could have possibly used, but considering that she had come up with it in less than a minute, it seemed satisfactory enough.
The guards nodded in understanding at the explanation. Evidently, having bought into the utter manure that Luna was feeding them.
"I see… that makes sense." The first guard mumbled. Seemingly more to himself than anypony else.
"Valley Dale is a pretty quiet town. I doubt that a Mage of your talent will find much in the way of crises that require your specialist services, but you are more than welcome to enter." The second guard explained in a friendly tone.
Luna simply nodded in thanks and waited for them to open the wooden gate. She did not want to volunteer any more information about herself unprompted. She would have to really sit down later and have a serious brainstorming session about fleshing out the details and backstory of her fictional persona, as well as mentally reviewing the conversation that she had with the two guards to check for any inconsistencies in her story that might give her problems later.
"The mayor will probably want to see you. I'll escort you to her now." The first guard commented as he opened the gate. Luna nodded reluctantly. She had made her bed by presenting herself as a minor celebrity and now it was time to lay in it.
The guard and the disguised alicorn walked through the gate together as his partner closed it behind him.
As they walked, Luna took notice of the town around her. It was quite a bit larger than she had initially assumed. She estimated that probably between three and five thousand ponies called this town home. Though, without knowing the population density of each building or how many satellite villages and farms surrounded the town, it was impossible to know for sure.
Speaking of the buildings, Luna could infer quite a bit of information about the town from taking note of their details.
Judging by the fact that buildings in the town had been organised into a semi-organised grid and the streets had been built with somewhat decent drainage channels. It was clear that at least some foresight had gone into urban planning and organisation. Hinting toward a strong centralised authority.
The town wasn't particularly old either. The lack of any major decay on any of the stonework or woodwork meant that the town had probably been built after the collapse. Within the last hundred years, but more likely within the last fifty years.
Most of the roads weren't paved, but she could see several two or three-story buildings. So the overall level of infrastructure in the town appeared to be mixed, with at least some architects and engineers likely calling this town home and plying their trade. Even though the town was expanding, as demonstrated by some construction projects at the fringes of the town, a lack of finance or resources probably hindered any major infrastructure projects.
While most of the houses seemed to be constructed with practicality and cost as the foremost concern, there was an undeniable rustic charm to the town. Almost every house with few exceptions had been altered or customised aesthetically by its owner. Banners, streamers, flags, gazebos and other pieces of colourful fabric seemed to decorate the streets, the houses and the spaces between, almost ubiquitously.
Windchimes, dreamcatchers, bird feeders and other miscellaneous baubles of decoration hung from window sills, door frames and porches. Much of the woodwork of the houses and businesses seemed to be carved into patterns in places with varying levels of fine craftsmanship.
There was a strong individualistic flare to almost every aspect of the town. It could almost be seen as a chaotic mess and bizarre mismatch of colour, style and aesthetic, but there was such a personable charm and authentic sincerity to it that Luna couldn't help but be endeared by. As though every pony in the town had given an honest attempt to add their own individualistic flare to their little corner of their town, with mixed levels of craftsmanship.
"Well, it's certainly colourful." The alicorn remarked as they journeyed through the main street of the town.
The guard smiled at that. "Valley Dale was founded on its textile and dye works industries. Fabric and dye are our biggest exports, so it's very cheap for our citizens to buy or make. There is also a tradition among the ponies of the town, for new home and business owners to decorate their property however they wish, however they are able to." He explained with a practised tone that implied this was far from the first time that he has had to explain the peculiar idiosyncrasies of Valley Dale to a bewildered tourist.
Luna took notice of the vibrant atmosphere of the town as ponies milled around the various businesses and market stalls along the main street as they went about their daily life. The low buzz of conversation and general noise of activity around the town, combined with the gentle harmony of the many windchimes tingling in the breeze. Created a lively atmosphere that Luna absolutely adored.
After spending countless years trudging silently through a deathly quiet castle in the dead of night. Seeing a place so full of life and energy was like a balm to her soul. She couldn’t help but bask in the vibrance of the street. She even played a small game with herself, where she would try to pick out and identify individual sounds in the general din of meaningless noise. The rhythmic hammering of a local blacksmith, the grating wood saw of a carpenter or the low rumbling of a large stone mill that was busy grinding flour and grain.
She hardly noticed as they approached their destination. Only drawing her attention away from the town when the guard escorting her began to slow down his walk as he approached a group of ponies that engaged in conversation, in front of a large building that looked to function as the town hall.
Most of the ponies looked like general labourers or artisans, like carpenters or masons, but one appeared very different from the rest. A middle-aged, pegasus mare with a lime green coat and dark pink mane, appeared to do most of the talking. Her fancy dark grey waistcoat and jewellery looked to denote her position of relative authority and wealth. That and the fact that she was quite literally issuing orders to the assembled workers, meant that this mare was probably the major.
"Would you kindly wait here for a moment?" Her escort asked before walking over to talk to the mayor. Likely to inform her of the situation and Luna’s presence.
As the former princess patiently waited for the guard to conclude his conversation with the mayor, she felt a gentle tug on her cloak coming from her side. As Luna turned to look to her side, she saw that it was a small filly that was pulling on the hem of her cloak, while looking up at her with wide awe-filled eyes.
"Excuse me miss, but are you a wizard?" The little filly asked in a high-pitched voice that conveyed so much excitement and youthful innocence, that Luna felt her heart melt. "I mean, you have a wizard's hat, so you must be a wizard!" The filly exclaimed, remarking on the purple, pointy, star-patterned hat that Luna wore in tribute to her former mentor. It was a trope in folklore that Mage wore such attire, but it had actually been Starswirl himself that had been the unintentional inspiration for the trope.
"I suppose that I am," Luna replied, choosing to indulge the fantasies of the young filly.
"You are!" The filly exclaimed with an audible gasp. "Oh my gosh, oh my gosh, oh my gosh, oh my gosh!" The filly breathlessly cheered, as she stamped her tiny hooves in excitement.
"Did you guys hear that? She says that she is a wizard!" The white coated, bright blue-maned filly announced as she turned to face the small congregation of about a dozen, similarly aged fillies and colts that had assembled behind her. The group exploded with gasps and excitement as they shouted over each other to ask Luna questions or chatted loudly amongst themselves, stamping their hooves with breathless energy. The two or three pegasi among the foals excitedly flapped their tiny wings with enough intensity to make a hummingbird jealous. Luna thought that they might achieve takeoff, in defiance of the laws of physics, even though they were far too young to be capable of flight.
The entire scene was so adorable that Luna nearly cried.
"Would all of you like to see a magic trick?" The disguised alicorn asked the group, deciding to further indulge them.
Gasps and cheers greeted her question, as the foals universally expressed their approval of the idea.
Luna smiled at the enthusiasm of the young ponies as their excitement melted her heart. She pondered for a moment what sort of magic trick she would show them. After giving it some thought and gazing around the town centre for some inspiration, she eventually decided on what she would show them.
The former Princess signalled with her hoof for the foals to calm down. They did so after a few seconds, but their excitement was still palpable. Seeing a magic trick performed by a supposed wizard was probably the most exciting thing that they had ever seen.
Luna detached herself from the caravan, before standing up and balancing on her hind legs so that both of her forelegs would be free to perform the parlour trick that she had decided on. She then used one hoof to lift the large hat off her head and showed her audience the inside to prove that it was empty.
"Do you see that my hat is empty?" Luna asked in a dramatic tone. The foals nodded in the affirmative. "Do you see that my hoof is also empty?" Luna asked again, displaying the hoof that was not currently holding the hat. They nodded once again.
The alicorn lowered her hat over her empty hoof so that the tip of the limb would be completely obscured. Then, with great care to not emit a visible magical aura around her horn, Luna teleported an apple from a nearby market stall directly into her hoof. A miscellaneous array of other hidden spells cast near simultaneously prevented the bright flash and loud bang, that were characteristic of teleportation, from manifesting. So that when she lifted the hat it would appear as though the apple had materialised out of thin air.
It would have been very difficult for even an experienced unicorn to manage so many simultaneous, silent and auraless spells, but Luna wasn't an experienced unicorn. She was an alicorn and a master in the fine manipulation of magic.
The reaction that she garnered from the foals, when she did lift the hat, did not disappoint either.
If their expressions were awed before, then they looked almost worshipful now. Luna didn't stop there though. She lowered and raised and lowered the hat several more times. Each time a new item, temporarily relocated from somewhere in the market, appeared in her hoof.
After repeating the trick a dozen times, Luna eventually capped off the performance by teleporting a nearby black dove into her hat. The poor, disoriented bird flew out the second she lifted the hat, giving a small fright to some of the foals that were standing very close to her.
The grandiose and dramatics of Luna’s performance had escalated throughout the trick and by the end, she had even added a few special effects. Such as ominous green smoke emanating from the hat as before the reveal and sparkler effects as she lifted the hat. It was wholly unnecessary, but as Luna drank in the unfiltered adoration of the foals, she was having the time of her life.
More foals, yearlings and even some adults had gathered around by the time she finished. Her audience of about thirty ponies gave resounding cheers and stomps of approval. The foals most of all.
It was a relatively simple trick in theory. Teleportation was an uncommon, but not exceptionally rare skill possessed by many unicorns. Yet, for most of them teleporting themselves or an object, was a feat that required their complete focus and was not very subtle. Luna's ability to layer her spellwork in such a way, as to make her teleportation completely unnoticeable, while keeping the appearance of her horn being completely dormant, was a feat outside of the abilities of the vast majority of unicorns. Making her trick appear to be impossible according to the known laws of physics and magic.
The first filly approached her once again, almost bouncing with excitement. "That was sooooo cool!" The filly squealed with unbounded enthusiasm. "Can you do more? Please do more!"
Luna was about to gently turn down the filly, but a new voice interrupted her from behind.
"I'm sure that the ponies of Valley Dale would love to see more of your magic. Perhaps you could be convinced to put on a show?" The matronly voice inquired.
Luna turned to see the pony that had addressed her was the pegasus that she had earlier hypothesised to be the mayor of the town. The mare held out a hoof in greeting.
While the alicorn was vastly more experienced with ponies bowing to her in greeting, she wasted no time in shaking the outstretched hoof in greeting. The mayor spoke again before she could respond.
"I have to say, that was very impressive," the mare congratulated. "Sergeant Iron Guard told me that you were a Legacy Mage, trained in the old ways of the College, but until I saw your magic, I wasn't sure I believed it," the pegasus shook her head and waved away her previous comment. "Where are my manners though, I'm getting ahead of myself. My name is Wind Chill. I'm the mayor of Valley Dale and it's very nice to meet you."
Even though it was based on a falsehood, Luna struggled to suppress a grin at the genuine praise of her abilities. "My name is Starry Night and it's a pleasure to meet you as well." Luna returned the greeting. Yet, she was more interested in the first comment that the mayor had said.
"You said something about a show earlier?" The alicorn inquired. Curious as to what she meant.
"Would you be interested in putting on a full performance? An entire show demonstrating your abilities. It would be in the central plaza. We'll even have some carpenters erect a small stage." The pegasus did her best to convince Luna.
The offer made Luna very apprehensive. Her anonymity had already been fractured by her improvised backstory and luxurious caravan, but it would be absolutely obliterated if she went on stage in front of potentially hundreds of ponies and drew as much attention to herself as possible. "I'm not sure. It's not the sort of thing that I normally do."
The mayor seemed undeterred and continued to plead her case. "I know that an accomplished, powerful Mage, like yourself, would probably find it beneath you to perform parlour tricks for foals, but I ask you to please consider it. Those foals. This is the happiest that I've seen them in months and considering the several tragedies that have befallen this town recently, the whole town could use a morale boost. You'll be compensated generously, of course."
Luna still had a few reservations, but was spreading joy and receiving recognition for her actions, not the very reason that she had set out on her journey in the first place? Besides, if worse came to worst and she had to leave, then it would be very simple for her to flee. Starswirl’s trailer was enchanted with the same enchantments as a Sky Carriage. If this town didn't work out, then she could just fly away with her caravan, change her disguise and start again in a different corner of Equestria.
"I would love to put on a show," Luna answered with a delighted smile.
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Wonder how far Luna's fake identity will spread? Someone might eventually start connecting dots- maybe even Celestia herself when word reaches her ears. If there's anyone who would be capable of calling it out, it'd be her.
At least Luna gets to be happy. Celestia may take a while to see the light and find a way to show her sister that she is sorry for pushing her away and not appreciating her. She is going to have hard time realizing be careful what you wish for you might just get it.
Sounds like you are on a journey yourself. May it be long and filled with wonder and joy.
Its great seeing this get updated more frequently. Long may your groove continue.
this was the day Luna became Trixie
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Would she really? It doesn't seem like Celestia knows Luna nearly as well as she thinks she does, if she believes her to be content with her assumed lot in life. Plus, I wouldn't be surprised if Celestia didn't know enough about Spectral Moonlight to know that he never had kids. The way Luna put it, it seemed understated. He was probably the kind of mage who almost never left his tower, and he might have become a confidante of sorts for Luna at some point, at least until he died of course. Maybe it could even be that Spectral came to see Luna as a daughter or granddaughter-of-sorts, depending on how young she was when he was around. It'd be amusing (and a bit tragic) if this was the case and Luna never knew.
Behold the Great and Powerful Moonbutt!
Valley Dale? Well, as long as she doesn't get that wagon up to 88 miles per hour, she should be okay.
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Plus Celestia expected Luna to be happy with being undermine and unappreciated to the point where if she gets to more than make it night it's a rare event.
While not quite the same, that premise reminded me of King from One Punch Man
A simple show to help put their minds at ease. Wonderfully adorable. ^^
But I am curious as to what that mayor said, about the tragedies that have befallen that town. Perhaps Luna could do something about helping them out? Also I understand why they are treating her with respect, but I can't help but wonder if she will become more humble and ask them to treat her as they would anyone else.
Lastely, the talk at the gate. Even if the story had passed on or never got written, you can always use that creativity somewhere else. That's a mark of a great idea.
Let it be known that a pony a thousand years into the future took inspiration from this legendary mage and decided to become a great and powerful entertainer
Really like the chapter!
Wonder if the tragedies that have fallen on the town are the same ones as we saw with the problems on the earlier chapters.
2AM editing Les goooo
Love these “smaller” chapters.
That was a good chapter.
I loved this chapter. Keep it up.
It sounds like your doing great, I am very happy to hear this. I’m just waiting for celestia to realize what she has done and what it has cost her. I want to see how much she cares and what she does about it.
Unfortunately while I am invested in the story I don’t know enough about where luna’s journey is going to be invested much in it yet. However I am well aquatinted with this and I have learned that it is not indicative of my ability to be invested later once there is more story out there, and with patience I can gain investment of attention is Luna’s journey. While part of this is also the fact the story is a slow burner, let me be clear that a story that is a slow burner is not bad thing. Really, slow burners allow greater reward for readers who posses patience like me, and like any writing style it will always have its own audience
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They're still siblings that grew up together. It's not unreasonable to think that they talked to each other about these things, as siblings often do.
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LOL, I get the reference. You are a man (or should I say fox, considering the pfp) of culture!
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Even in canon Celestia had to be pushed to the brink of despair before she would confide in Luna, and before then she would glare at her little sister to force compliance. And that was post-Nightmare Moon Celestia.
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To be honest, I don't watch the TV show much, but if that's the case, it's kind of sad that Celestia acts toward her sibling like that.
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The past is not the same as the present nor the future. Maybe they were closer as children when they were still learning far before their reign. People do change, you know.
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Well, I say 'force compliance', but the glare was more a challenge, daring Luna to discredit her words. I don't know if that's better or worse than a straight intimidation attempt, but if it's better it's certainly not by much.
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Even if they were close as children, their current standing renders that point moot. It's not close-with-Luna/child!Celestia who might hear about the traveling mage who is actually Luna, it's Princess (look at me) Celestia. And Princess (look at me) Celestia, even after she realizes Luna is gone, would not be likely to connect her sister to Starry Night, not through namedrops of supposed relatives, nor through reports of specific spells. The fact that Starswirl was an alicorn-level unicorn mage (canonically stronger than alicorn!Twilight, and certainly not the only one either) is quite the veil for Starry Night to hide from Celestia's gaze beneath.
Dahahahah! A lovely update! I can’t wait for more!
Also you are very good at visual description
I mean even if someone else wrote something like your old idea, im sure the community would have appreciated your story. While you see it as making the same cake, we as readers instead think "oh shit theres TWO cakes."
I know your old idea is long defunct, but I'm saying this for in the future. That its okay to have a similar idea to someone else because you will never write it exactly the same (unless you straight up plagerize but i doubt you'd have done that)
Anyways, just remember to take care of yourself as you pick up your pace wotb the xhapters because it will probably be easier to burn yourself out!
Okay okay enough advice time for chapter review. Short and simple, loved it. It felt very organic. I loved the interactions and the descriptions as always were beautiful. Looking forward to the next chapter to see what crazy things luna gets up to.
Also i find it funny she didnt ask what those tragedies were. I know we'll no doubt find out but its funny she heard that and instead of asking just went okay. Luna doesn't care about your trifling tragedies she wants to do what she wants.
I am excited to see what magic tricks you have luna do though because the one you made her do here was very fun to read. Very nice visual in my head so I imagine it'll be sexy when she performs.
Mayor?
How long do you think this story will be, I hope like around fifty six chapters or more
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Absolutely no idea. Hopefully more than 60, but we will see.
This is getting good!
Nice chapter! I thought she was sunk when the guard pointed out her caravan. The first version of this story sounded cool! You write really well,so hearing this one will be nice and long sounds great!
The premise had me curious, read it every time after it came up the featured box.
Now this has my eyes...
Been absolutely loving this series so far. It just oozes so much character, with so many details on the world, and how were being presented not only with Luna's perspective so far. But the guard and the outlook of the world as it is in current.
Super excited for the next chapters!
Great chapter
Come on~! Come out~! Come to see THE GREAT AND POWERFUL LU... I mean... TRIXIE!!!!
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Yes more reading material l, omg, i need to read faster.
Also just realized the author of the other story is dead, sad times.
Ah, lovely. I do hope Luna gains some sort of following or followers, as it does not feel right for her influence from to dissappear entirely from Equestrian society.
And the adventure just started...
Is she talking about the Collapse of the College, or something else?
If yes, what exactly happened back then? Maybe I remember it wrong, but I understood the College was simply abandoned at one point.
Hopefully that won't cause any problems later.
This logic is undeniable!
I hope she also teleported a bit or two onto the market stall.
Edit: Never mind, it seems the put the apple back.
I'm surprised Luna didn't use that opportunity to inquire about those tragedies and offer her help.
Good chapter!
I enjoyed reading it.
Hopefully I didn't add too many thoughts here...