Valley Dale (part 7)
"So give it up for THE GREAT AND POWERFUL STARRY NIGHT!"
The declaration was met with thunderous applause as the crowd stomped their hooves in approval. Luna thought that she had become accustomed to the idea of how much of a town spectacle her performance was hyped up to be, but it appeared that she had still grossly underestimated how excited the ponies of Valley Dale were for her show.
She should have probably asked Windy earlier why that was. The performance of a College Mage was something to behold, sure, but did her presence really justify such fanfare?
Maybe, though, it was her perspective that was skewed. Perhaps this was the way that common ponies had always reacted to exciting events. With cheers and jubilation. Had she become so acclimated to the polite, civil orderliness of Royal and Noble celebrations that she had become completely out of touch with the lives of her subjects?
'Former subjects,' Luna mentally corrected.
The alicorn didn't arrive at a conclusion to internal pondering before she noticed that Wind Chill and her daughter had vacated the performance stage, so as to give her enough space to conduct her grand entrance. Through a small gap in the heavy curtains that separated her from the performance stage in front of her and crowds beyond, Luna saw that the assembled ponies fidgeted in anticipation and murmured to each other in nervous excitement.
Opportunistic vendors sold food and drinks at the sides of the market square, the town's local unicorn artificers peddled their various enchanted trinkets and a group of pegasus colts played aerial tag with one another. The whole square had a festive atmosphere about it.
Not allowing herself to procrastinate any further, Luna lit her horn and started to craft the first salvo of spells that would mark the beginning of her performance. Her peerless multitasking skills in spellcraft, which she had honed over a century, showed their proficiency as she began to power multiple, parallel spell matrices simultaneously.
She had spent most of this afternoon planning her performance and debated with herself for hours over the exact spells she would use. It was a difficult balance to strike. She wanted to put on an excellent enough performance to entertain the crowd and also cement the legitimacy of her backstory, which she had now committed to, as a gifted Mage worthy of her Journeypony status. Yet, not to make such a grand display that only an alicorn would be capable of it.
To that end, she settled for a performance that would consist almost entirely of dynamic illusions. Unlike the hours of preparation that were needed to create the static illusion that hid her identity, dynamic illusions were far easier to craft, but temporary and far less convincing to a trained unicorn. However, she did not need to fool a Court Mage tonight, so her dynamic illusions should be more than enough to suffice in entertaining her audience. And as a bonus, should an experienced and trained unicorn happen to be in attendance or should her performance be scrutinised in any way, all that they would see would be an ordinary unicorn with merely a savant-like gift for illusions.
She broke from her musings when her spells were ready and her grand performance could finally commence.
The first spell that she released served to set the tone for her display of skill and power. The crimson sky, still illuminated by the recently set sun, suddenly shifted in colour. Gasps rang out from the assembled audience as they were suddenly cast under a pale purple sky. Not the deep indigo that arrived with the late-twilight evening, but an unnaturally bright lilac that left the crowd in awe. Never before having seen such a thing.
Luna grinned at seeing the spell come to fruition. With dynamic illusions being her chosen field of study back in her College of Sorcery days, she had learned everything there was to know about light and its interaction with particles, including light scattering. It took a lot of trial and error over the years to perfect such a spell and acquire the desired wavelengths, but the effects were magnificent, even if the phenomenon was localised only to the town.
A second flash of the alicorn's horn released the follow-up spell. It took a moment before its effect became apparent. Gasps rang out as thick smoke began to bellow out in immense volume from every crevice and gap in the wooden boards of the temporary stage.
The magical nature of the illusionary smoke was obvious by its bright pink colour and the fact that it did not rise as normal smoke would. Instead, it rolled across the floor like flowing water. The lip of the stage became a smokey waterfall as the magenta smog clung unnaturally tight to every surface as it spilt down into the crowd below.
Luna had feared that the crowd would have reacted with fear at the ominous fumes, but it relieved her to see that they were instead revelling in the spectacle. A particularly adorable sight was a few foals in the front rows playing a game that was some sort of mishmash variant of peekaboo, hide-and-seek and tag within the confines of the foggy blanket. Yet, the alicorn didn't want to overly prolong the pre-show spectacle, as it was nearly time to make her entrance.
Her next manipulation of the illusion caused the smoke to suddenly withdraw without warning. It began to coalesce within a whirlwind that manifested in the centre of the performance stage. The vortex grew in size and density as more and more illusionary mass was consumed by it.
Once almost all of the smoke had retreated into the whirlwind's confines and the miniature tornado looked as though it possessed the density of heavy cloudcrete, the top of the vortex started to collapse in on itself, while its centre bulged outwards. The swirling mass soon stabilised in form, until it took the shape of a cloudy pink marble. A swirling maelstrom of smoke and mist contained within a perfect sphere that hovered gently over the stage. The crowd looked on in awe.
Some pegasi had Talent Marks that made them extremely adept at cloud sculpting, to the point where they put on shows, similar to travelling magicians. Yet, the spectacle of Luna’s magic outstripped even the most accomplished of cloud sculptors for the simple reason that her illusions were not bound by reality or physics. They could create impossible marvels.
And with Luna mastering the highest echelons of illusionary magic, she would show the audience how far she could distort the boundary between reality and illusion. She made her penultimate alteration to the illusion before immediately crafting the spell-matrix for a silent teleport. It would be difficult, even for her, to maintain control over the next two illusions. So she needed her teleportation spell ready for immediate use when it was finally time.
A spark suddenly flashed within the smoke before the entire orb erupted into a fiery inferno. Still trapped within the confines of the sphere, the firestorm simmered with an assumedly deadly heat. The market square and all the ponies within it were suddenly awash in bright pink illumination emanating from the amaranth flames.
It spun in place like a slowly smouldering star. The crowd didn't cheer at the display. Instead, they looked too enraptured by the illusion to do more than look on in awe. Luna was pleased that they appreciated the display. Despite her talent for illusions and her famed abilities as an author and poet, she wasn't particularly gifted as a show pony or entertainer. Perhaps that was a contributing factor to her unpopularity as a ruler. She just didn't have the same charisma as her sister in creating compelling public spectacles. Even with a few hours of preparation, she struggled to think of a coherent theme for her introduction. Instead, she resorted to crafting some of the most technically difficult illusions that she could manage. Due to how dynamically they moved, smoke and fire were infamous within magical academic circles for their difficulty to convincingly replicate with illusions.
However, the talent to perform intricate and complex spells under the experienced gazes of College Masters was a far cry from the skills needed to entertain the masses and she was concerned that her spells would seem underwhelming to the laypony. Thankfully, they seemed to be amused enough and her next illusion would be sure to stun them. It was an illusion that she had thought up years ago as a way to test the absolute limits of her ability to control parallel illusions and she felt giddy at finally having an excuse to use it in front of an audience.
At the alicorn’s direction, the orb of magenta fire erupted towards the crowds. However, instead of blasting violently outwards like an explosion, the manner in which the spherical inferno came apart looked more akin to the graceful disintegration of a dandelion whose seeds were carried off in strong winds. Tongues of illusionary flame were stripped from the orb and carried towards the audience. The crowd briefly panicked in uncertainty at the oncoming rush of fire, when the shape of the embers started to shift before their eyes. The flames contorted into insectoid forms with a thin body and large, glamorous wings. Suddenly the firestorm of blazing embers, which had seemingly been about to descend upon the defenceless crowd, had completely transformed into a swarm of incandescent butterflies that fluttered above the crowd, trailing faint wisps of ash in their wake. Now, with their own means of propulsion, no longer solely carried by non-existent wind, the illusionary butterflies fluttered above the crowd in seemingly random patterns.
She directed them to hover just above the reach of the crowd and do their best to dodge any pegasi who tried to touch them. However, those incredibly simple commands were just about all that Luna could impose upon her creations. For as much as she would delight in being able to command them to conduct a synchronised flying ballet, her focus was already being stretched to its limit by trying to monitor and keep corporeal hundreds of illusionary entities. Despite her waning focus, she could tell that her efforts were not in vain.
The crowd seemed amazed and jubilant, shouting with exclamations of awe. The magenta insects wreathed in fire were a stunning spectacle and the ponies seemed overjoyed to bear witness to her magic. Luna felt her heart lighten at their expressions of wonder and appreciation. For years, she had yearned for them to revere the fruits of her labour. For them to see how much her great works could enrich their lives. Perhaps they cared little for her night, but it gladdened her to know that there were other ways for her to earn their awe.
Several dozen of her creations faded from existence as her control over the spell began to slip. There was only so long that she could maintain cohesion over so many individual illusions. She needed to finish this now before the spell unravelled entirely. The sky reverted back to its original shade of deep crimson as the alicorn sacrificed her light-scattering spell in order to divert more of her focus to the main illusion. The shimmering swarm altered their course midflight and immediately rushed back to the stage at great speeds. Some of the ponies in the audience were slightly startled at the sudden change in behaviour from the fiery insects, especially the airborne pegasi that scrambled to gain altitude in an attempt to avoid the oncoming swarm. She wished that she could have orchestrated a more graceful transition to her entrance, but she only had a few more seconds of control. Luckily, Luna had already powered up her teleportation spell and now only had to choose her moment.
Like a cascade of fire, her illusions flew just above the performance stage before disintegrating upon impacting with the heavy curtains. Right when the densest cluster of butterflies passed over the centre of the stage, Luna released her silent teleportation and suddenly re-emerged in the heart of the swarm. Her control over her creations was almost nonexistent at this point as they carried out her last order to hurl themselves against the curtains. However, the anti-pony collision-avoidance parameter that she had given them, functioned just well enough to avoid her.
That they still mostly obeying their parameters was an unexpected boon as her grasp over the illusion frayed into nothing. As the last of the creatures flew past her and the crowd finally realised Luna’s presence, she imagined that it probably looked massively impressive from their perspective as she stood tall, unmolested and undaunted by the living firestorm that rushed past her.
Their looks of admiration as Luna emerged centre of the swarm did not disappoint. The alicorn preened in self-pride as the crowd looked at her in silent awe. How long had it been since ponies had looked at her with anything other than disdain or indifference? Perhaps it was slightly pathetic how much Luna needed love and appreciation from others. Yet, this kind of attention was what she had yearned for over decades. Her problems and doubts seemed to fade into the back of her mind as she basked in the admiration of her onlookers and for this brief moment, she could shine as brightly as one of her stars.
However, unlike her stars, everypony was watching her now.
A few things to discuss:
1). This was a very problematic chapter to write. I had written about 1.5k words about two weeks ago, but after consulting with another author, I realised that there were severe problems in the chapter.
The problems were too great to just touch up, so I had to rewrite the entire chapter from scratch. It took ages.
I had hoped that I would be able to include the entire magic show in chapter, but just getting to Luna's introduction has been a great uphill battle and I swore to myself that I would never take longer than a month to write a chapter.
2). Those with keen attention will notice that I have skipped the section with Luna’s conversation with Windy and Wind Chill in the backstage. There is a reason for this. I have noticed that I may have unintentionally over-villified Wind Chill. Understandable when we only have Windy's perspective and she is not exactly impartial. However, what we know so far isn't necessarily the whole story.
Some commenters were even theorising that she orcastrated the raid on her own town.
I wanted to explain things from her point of view a bit better, so I planned to write that whole backstage interaction from Wind Chill's POV.
However, Wind Chill is not as clueless as she might seem and to explain her motivations, I would need to at least allude to greater and more sinister events that are happening in the background of Equestria.
I felt that this would invalidate the grandiosity of Luna’s magic show. This is supposed to be her moment of triumph.
So after the next chapter that will contain the rest of the magic show, I will do an Interlude from Wind Chill's POV. A sort of "1 hour earlier" type of deal.
3). This will be a fairly short Interlude and I wanted to add more to it. Pad it out a bit. Earlier in the comments of chapter 7, some of you readers mentioned that you would like it if I would share with you some of my rejected first drafts and cut content. So I thought that some of you would enjoy if it included my defunct chapter 15 under the Wind Chill POV of the Interlude. Though some of you might also hate the bloat of a completely unnecessary section that bears no relevance to story.
I've started a strawpoll to gauge opinion on whether you guys would enjoy that. Otherwise if not, I will just post a link to the Google Doc in the description of the Interlude.
https://strawpoll.com/wAg3A6OwOy8
4). A legendary reader created the first piece of fan art for my story. Windy's cutie mark
Massive thanks to https://www.fimfiction.net/user/434464/Indigo+Storyheart
Big thanks to my beta-readers:
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/424717/Themiei
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/476688/Jamie+Wolf
I love reading your comments and hearing your opinions. As well as interacting with you guys. Leave your thoughts down below.
Stats
Page generated in 0.024 seconds
Total duration
756 users online
1,059,118 hits today, 2,244,100 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Hehe ok im caught up
Luna could easily go down as a fantastic magician that a certain blue unicorn many years later would aspire to be like. She won't forget to make sure the new towns aren't neglected and will fight for them to be given fair treatment. She will do what Celestia failed to do; be powerful and caring for ALL her subjects, not pick and choose like her sister does.
I really like this story.
11707791
Yes.
Also, YOUR PROFILE PICTURE IS ✨chef's kiss✨ AMAZING!!!
Phenomenal story! Officially caught up so now I'll have to wait patiently for each chapter like all the other
plebiansreaders who started reading when the story was first published... yay"My patience is waning is this entertaining? My patience is waning is this entertaining?....
ayee ayee aye!!!! somethin somethin somethin..."
Take all the time you need! ❤️❤️❤️
great chapter
I hope to visit Celestia’s reaction of Luna leaving.
Also this chapter is amazing thank you:D
pretty sure that's a typo
Heh heh writing sure is a beast isn't it never knowing exactly what to put down and then realizing you don't like the idea and having to change it later on but I enjoyed the chapter, a few little grammar errors here and there but still good 😊
11707909
I bet she's going to be indifferent at first or slightly relieved then once things start to spiral out of control she's going to wish Luna was there to help, a far cry from the actual continuity of the show where in all the thousand years Luna was banished Celestia just forgot her and nothing bad happened, I still can't figure that out how nothing went wrong before Luna returned or why Luna forgave Celestia so easily.
11708035
I've been waiting for the last 5 hours, wanting to congratulate the person who left the 1000th comment on my story. And it's someone pointing out a grammar mistake. Talk about an anticlimax.
Congrats, I guess?
One day, after around 980 years, a young Lulamoon would listen to the tale of The Great and Powerful Starry Night in awe and aspires to become The Great and Powerful Trixie.
11708055
Honestly, not an honour I expected to have tonight- a nice honour, don't get me wrong, though if I'd known I probably would have at least tried to add something more.
Congrats on 1000 comments! So far, this is a really good story.
This line has an extra "one" and ends in a comma.
11708180
Fixed, thanks.
'Great and powerful' huh, potential origin for Trixie's claimed title? Might even make it a... magician tradition
I don’t see wind chill as a villain, she is just caught up in her own world. You can’t rely on the author alone to see other characters perspective. You must have the imagination to consider possibilities wether there is allusion to them by the author or not while also being carful in your theories that they aren’t to presumptuous.
While you make great effort as an author to deal with all the things you expressed I have the worry that you could be caught up in perfectionism and even possibly attribute the quality of your story or chapters to the lowest rung of reader, with the least imagination, the most judgment, and the smallest perspective, and wildest of theories. I do not intend to disrespect or insult any readers but not every reader will have the ability to be satisfied with good quality content or be able to see outside what the author explicitly states and draw very inaccurate or incorrect conclusions that poison their ability to appreciate every aspect of the story to some degree as the author would hope. And I don’t want such things to be tied to the quality of your story, something perfectionism will often try to tie in some way. I myself struggle with perfectionism and know how destructive and poisonous it can be if allowed to much power and I’m always sensitive seeing things that may suggest in others aspects of perfectionism as I do not want the negativity it can bring to come to pass if there is anything I can do about it in any way. And maybe I can’t do anything and perhaps I am over sensitive and seeing things that aren’t there and I am worrying for no reason
But it’s important enough to me to make the effort to express it and have a little worry regardless of outcome or wether I am wrong and there is no such thing occurring and I hope that all I have said can show the care and investment I have I’m not just your story but you as an author and person that seeing such thing may bring you a degree of happiness or joy for wether already happy or not all people deserve such good feelings and I always seek to spread it in any way I can and see because people are important to me
This. This right here might be one of my favorite chapters. And no, I don’t mean out of this story, just outright a the best chapter I’ve read in a while. It was hype all around. Based on my pfp you might be able to guess why.
Can’t wait for the rest of the show, I would critique something that felt off in this chapter, that is if there were something to critique, but I’m afraid I have found myself empty hoofed at the moment. Honestly, after finishing some less visual-based stories this is a massive breath of fresh air, I can literary see this whole play play out (technically not a grammar mistake, right?). I’m so glad I decided to read this story, instead of deciding I had better things to do.
That was a good chapter.
11708549
I'm glad that you appreciate the chapter. As for something about the chapter feeling off, trust me, nobody is more acutely aware of it than me.
Why do you think it took me a month to write and rewrite the damn thing. And as another commenter pointed out, you can drive yourself mad pursuing perfect, so I decided that 95% was probably good enough.
11708612
Oh heavens no, you must of misunderstood me, for I meant not that the chapter felt off, but that it was one of the best I read! My way of speaking may might or might not be weird so I understand the confusion, but trust me, I meant it truly when I said I can’t critique this story for there is nothing that I could find that was, in-fact, possible to criticize.
Nice work on this chapter! The spells were described well,and felt very real.
Spectacular illusions! I hope the adulation she gets will help start to heal Luna's heart.
11708335
Good words! Now if only it wasn't a six inch block of text full of very long run on sentences
Don't worry, my mental autocorrect as an editor and grammar nut compensated enough for me to read the text smoothly. I get what you mean by not getting consumed by perfectionism
11696253
That's what I've never understood. Considering g4 ends with twilight saying as long we have the magic of friendship we can get through anything together. Her giving up and undoing everything she worked for and more seems wrong.
Loved the update!
11710001
Yes, unless I were writing a story myself I let it go because often they understand my meaning and I don’t want to waste time or get consumed myself on perfectionism of it. I will say to that although you seem to be a bit of a language perfectionist you both have it in an editor sense so your not tied to it like an author and also you simply auto correct in your head so it does not inhibit yourself in conserving with others which is good as constant unwanted correction often offends people.
The perfectionism is me always enjoys knowing about my mistakes even if I choose not to attempt to find and correct them in a situation because such knowledge could aid me when I do need or want to find and correct something I’ve written, either a story or professional document for school or a boss.
I’ve always had a problem with run on sentences, I never seem to grasp what is considered appropriate sentence length. What I often do is when I am trying to be self conscious of not making run on sentences I make all the sentences short since I can’t determine the correct length as it can vary and I cannot remember every variant nor get the natural feel of it.
I assume with you language perfectionist tendencies, you have already offered to authors to edit their work and have been accepted and have done the editing. In the off chance that you have not for whatever reason, I would definitely say you should, as such a mindset is invaluable to authors especially if they don’t posses the same talent or are already stressed out about working the plot all together.
I believe despite not editing this response carefully I have communicated myself sufficiently, but if not please tell me and I will clarify my meaning
I understand I have written way more in this response than is in any way necessary but that is simply the thinking mindset I am currently in, so I apologise for any headaches it may cause in reading it all
11711226
It's admittedly part of why I reject G5. There are so many beings that are about that the alicorn that caused the fatal fracture of equestria just... would not be able to succeed. CMC, young six, flurry heart, cadance, the retired princesses are likely still around, and depending on the timing twi and her friends. And that's just those with a heroic history. THe odds of ONE singular pony managing to effectively defeat ALL that and shatter equestria where the legion of doom failed even WITH a certain bell? No, not happening.
11714755
1) Yes, I am a bit of a language perfectionist 😂 (Nothing more triggering than watching grown adults fumble basic grammar and spelling. Not that you did that! Just run on sentences)
2) I actually do edit for one person, but I've been too busy/too uninterested to edit right now and he's decided to rewrite the story anyways.
3) Run on sentences isn’t necessarily about size, but structure. For example:
This is written as two sentences when it should be multiple sentences. The best way I can explain how to fix this is to actually fix it and then compare.
The main way to know when one sentence should end and a new sentence should be started, is to note when the topic/thought changes. For example, sentence 2-3 are separate thoughts and independent clauses (basically meaning that both can stand alone as a sentence). Sentence 4-5 I had to wrestle with for a bit to determine if 5 was a dependent clause or not (dependent meaning that it cannot stand alone as a sentence) and determined that it is a sentence. So yeah, sometimes things take more time and thinking than most deem necessary 😂 Also, for all of the sentences you already had some transition words/phrases in place, indicating a natural change of topic. As you can see, I added some more transition words/phrases to make the text flow more smoothly.
Preventing run on sentences doesn’t necessarily mean you have to write shorter sentences, it just means you need to punctuate them correctly. You may have noticed that all I did was divide the two sentences into seven, instead of making the two sentences smaller. You can say everything you need to say with the same length of words, but just divide those words accordingly.
Two main points:
1) Take note of when a thought is dependent or independent (Independent clauses contain a subject and a verb whereas a dependent clause lacks one or the other). If you find yourself saying "and" when you could just add a period and start a new sentence, take the time to check if the thoughts could stand alone ("I like eating pickles for breakfast while I read a book and Star Wars is really cool so is my sister" vs. "I like eating pickles for breakfast while reading. Also, Star Wars and my sister are really cool").
2) Use transition terms between sentences instead of "and+something that could probably be a whole sentence"
- For example, instead of "I will say to that although you seem to be a bit of a language perfectionist[lacking punctuation] you both[wrong terminology] have it in an editor sense[lacking punctuation] so your[wrong you're/your] not tied to it like an author and also[transition merits new sentence] you simply auto correct in your head[lacking punctuation or slight rephrase] so it does not inhibit yourself[wrong term] in conserving[conversing] with others which is good as[this transition needs to be rephrased into the start of a new sentence] constant unwanted correction often offends people."
- Say "I will say, although you seem to be a bit of a language perfectionist, you also have it in an editor sense. This means you're not tied to it like an author would be. Also, you simply auto-correct in your head so that it does not inhibit you when conversing with others. This is good, since constant and unwanted correction often offends people."
Two main points shorter:
1) Pay attention to dependent/independent clauses in your sentences (use Google or your grammar textbook for a more specific guide)
2) PUNCTUATION PLEASE!!! (Also Google or textbook for those rules of punctuation)
I recommend Easy Grammar Plus by Wanda Phillips. This is the texbook I learned from. (This response, also, came out much longer than asked for 😅)
11715127
Of all the comments I expected to be left under this chapter, a comprehensive grammar lesson was not near the top. Especially one not directed at me.
11715167
But it wasn’t directed at you… or is it? Huh?
Did I just respond to an alt account?
11715193
I meant that for once it wasn't ME getting a grammar lecture.
I didn't expect to find a grammar lesson in my comments and if there WERE to be a grammar lesson, I expected to be directed at me as a passive-aggressive criticism of my story.
11715235
Ah okay cool 😂 You’re story is great! Looking forward to the next chapter!
I realize I read “one” and “not” backwards 😅
I read “Especially not one directed at me” instead of “Especially one not directed at me”
Crazy how swapping two words can completely change the meaning of the sentence 😉 (just a friendly reminder to all how much words matter! Use them wisely and read them slowly)
11715127
I often still get a little confused about what is independent and dependent, but the rule about changing topics is one I can understand and implement better.
I do know about varying my transition words, and sometimes starting new sentences instead. With those it’s a choice to be aware of them. When I choose not to be aware of them I miss them.
You sound good enough to be a English teacher. Or maybe you could be a career editor. You would do great.
Easy grammar sounds easy. Definitely will check it out so I can have it when I really need it in the future
11715456
I actually considered being an editor as a career, but I don’t think it’s a job I could do long term. I’d eventually get bored of it and I’d also have deadlines to get it done (unlike the more chill, free of charge editing I do on this site).
Is it weird to have editing be a hobby? 😂
Career wise, I’ve settled on being a cake decorator. The bakery I’m working at is still getting settled, so maybe when things are all set I’ll get moved from front house to decorating (the job I applied for and got). I suspect the demand at the moment for custom cakes is not high enough to need two decorators either soooo… yeah
I think the surprising thing to me is the lack of showmanship or presentation. No talking to the audience? No patter, no shtick, no warming them up? No friendly audience abuse? Trixie would be disappoint.
You could just name the next chapter/interlude "... (part 7.5) - optional".
If readers have requested it, and you're willing to write it, then there's no reason to stress.
This is an excellent story. I look forward to future chapters.
Awww...