Shadow of Hope
As Luna stood before the large ruined doorway, she tried to push out the doubts that had wormed their way into her mind. Whereas before she was certain that she would find her answers in the wreckage of her old home, the former Princess wasn't so confident now.
Had she expected to be struck by some sort of epiphany?
What insight did she hope to divine from exploring these old stones?
Rather than things becoming clearer, she felt more confused and lost now than ever before. She almost wanted to start crying again at how hopeless the situation felt.
It took Luna more than a few minutes of staring at the entrance to the great spire before she worked up the courage to enter. Her mind would drive itself insane though, if all she did was wallow in her fears and insecurities.
Not allowing herself to dwell on her doubts, Luna stepped through the doorway into the tower.
It was dark inside the great spire. Although it had always been dark, even before it had been abandoned. The blackened stones that made up the walls, floors and ceiling seemed to absorb ambient light and heat. Leaving the structure feeling perpetually dark and cold.
She almost couldn't see the high arched ceiling in the near oppressive gloom, but the dark didn't faze her. She had walked through the Great Entry Hall hundreds of times. She knew this room well enough that she could have probably painted it from memory.
It was, because of that familiarity however, that the changes that had befallen her old home became all the more stark to her.
The Hall, and presumably the rest of the tower, had fallen into disrepair and desolation. Collapsed arches, broken pillars and cracked walls were ubiquitous as far as the former Princess could see. The wards might have held together the spire's structural integrity and slowed its inevitable decay, but it could do little in terms of actual repair or maintenance.
She had known that the interior of the tower would not have likely stood up well against its century-long abandonment, but to actually see her once beloved home as a decrepit shell of its former self was still a painful and disheartening sight.
The massive Hall had once thrummed with life and magic. It was a place of warmth and comfort, where its occupants would often socialise. Students would fuss over their studies and the Masters of the College would obsess over their latest research projects.
The magnificent and ancient walls were once illuminated by dozens of fireplaces whose flames used to easily offset the light and heat that the black stones smothered.
When the two sisters had been mere humble students under Starswirl's tutelage, one of their daily duties was to tend to some of the many fireplaces that were located all throughout the tower's interior.
Luna and her sister absolutely hated that chore. It was laborious and the soot got everywhere. The Grand Master's of the tower said that the task was to teach them the value of discipline, dedication and hard work, as well as strengthening their pyromancy skills. Luna thought that they were just lazily hoofing off grunt work to lowly students so that they didn't have to spend as much money on a large cleaning staff.
Celestia had especially despised the task as the ash and smoke seemed to cling to her pristine white coat and would refuse to be removed by everything, but the most vicious of scrubbing and bathing. Luna used to tease her sister by telling her that they could be mistaken for twins, because of how darkly Celestia’s coat would be stained.
The memory threatened to evoke a smile from the alicorn.
It was nice to reminisce on good times, but whatever Luna was looking for, she was certain that she wouldn't find it in this Hall. The former Princess lit her horn to illuminate her surroundings as she walked across the room and over debris. Statues, art and masonry created by legendary mages and heroes from ages past, littered the floor. It felt almost vaguely sacrilegious to step over such important relics from the past, but the feeling was drowned and buried beneath an avalanche of feuding thoughts and emotions that started to bubble within her.
It was an indescribable emotion that Luna felt as she slowly picked her way through the debris. It was like nostalgia that had been tainted with sorrow. To so badly miss home, only to find said home in ruins.
The former Princess lost track of time as she wandered aimlessly through the tower. Half stuck in a numbed, dazed stupor of old memories and of better times. The reminders of what her life had once been, before she had gotten caught in the whirlwind of rulership and the throne, were like an assault on her mind.
Each new room or hallway stirred half-forgotten memories and emotions from decades past that she never thought she would see or feel again. It was near euphoric, yet indescribably painful at the same time. The shadows of love, friendship, family and happiness saturated the halls of the spire, but that was all that they were, shadows. Illusive mirages of happier times that she so desperately wished to return to, but poisoned with the crushing realisation that those times were long gone and never likely to return.
It was only when she arrived at a very specific doorway, that she was shaken from her trance. The wooden door was nearly indistinguishable from any other doorway in the tower, except for one specific detail. Carved into the wood were two Talent Marks that were very familiar to her.
A sun and a moon.
It was her old room.
It was a place that she had spent years living in with her sister. Sometimes it was even a refuge from the darkness of the world. During the worst days of Discord's reign, she would often find herself in her sister’s bed where Celestia would wrap her wings tightly around Luna and whisper her favourite stories and poems to her.
It was embarrassing to need to be comforted when she was a teenager, but some nights the nightmares were incessant. Visions from both the Bad Days from her foalhood and the horrors that Discord unleashed upon Old Equestria.
Even though they were in arguably the safest place in the world, that knowledge seldom brought her peace.
Luna didn't know how long she spent looking at that door. She tried to organise her emotions and ground herself back down to this reality, but the violent maelstrom of emotion would not let her. Staying paralyzed with her hoof hovering above the rusted door handle was the most that she could do to keep her from losing control.
'Was this where she found her answers?'
'Behind this wooden door?'
It seemed like madness. Like utter delusion that she would spontaneously have the answers to her every question and insecurity by simply opening the door. As if a divine epiphany from the gods would show her the way to her destiny. She was scared of what she would find, but she was even more scared that she would find nothing at all. That she would be right back where she started. Alone and adrift in a cold, uncaring world that she had abandoned and that had abandoned her.
'What choice did she have?'
Luna opened the door.
It was cold.
That was the first thought that had entered the alicorn's mind as she stepped through the doorway.
The glass of the windows had long since been broken and the biting wind blew inside without restriction. The blackened stones had already absorbed most of the ambient heat of the tower, but the windchill made the room near freezing.
Another consequence of the open windows was that her room had been exposed to a century of weather and outside elements.
It was barely recognisable. Her bed, her desk, her cabinet, her belongings. Everything that she had not taken with her when she left. It all lay in ruin. Wood and fabric lay in nondescript piles of rot. Metal had rusted into dust. Paint and colour had long since been bleached bare by the sun and weather. The air was musty and smelled of rot and animal excrement.
'There is nothing here.'
Luna closed her eyes and gritted her teeth. Cracks appeared in her self control as the boiling sea of volatile emotions inside her yearned for release.
'There is nothing here.'
What a fool she had been to place her hopes, so naively, into a fanciful delusion of some sort of destiny. There is a reason that she never came back to this place. There was never anything here of her, other than rot and ruin.
'There is nothing here.'
The boiling sea of conflicting feelings gave way to one emotion that ran hot through her veins.
Rage.
'There is nothing here!'
Luna was so sick of feeling powerless. She was so sick of crushed dreams. She was so sick of feeling like every single decision that she made in life only led her to greater suffering.
'There is nothing here!'
She wanted to take back control. She wanted to feel like her destiny was in her own hooves. She wanted to let out the dark storm of rage that churned and frothed within her. She wanted to break something! She wanted to destroy something!
'THERE IS NOTHING HERE!'
Light erupted from her horn as she teleported from her old bedroom. The wide, open room that she had emerged in was one that she would have recognised as the tower's magical training room, had she not been barely cognizant with anger.
With her violent and raw emotions powering her magic, Luna lowered her horn to take aim at whatever was in front of her. She didn't know what was ahead of her, as her eyes were still closed, but she didn't care. For once in the past century, she wanted to take power back into her own hooves and make a meaningful impact on the world around her. Even if that impact was only an enormous hole in the back wall of the training room.
Forcing all of her hatred, anger and frustration to be made manifest at the tip of her horn, a ball of pure magical destruction grew at the end of the bony protrusion. Luna didn't bother forming the magic into any particular spell. Simple, cathartic destruction would serve her just fine.
When she reached the point where she couldn’t hold on any longer to the magic, the former Princess unleashed it.
The ball of destructive magic burst into a high intensity beam of pure magic at least twice as wide as herself. The shock wave of the erupting magic was enough to kick up dust from the floor of the training room and saturate the air with particulates, making it difficult to breathe. The recoil of the magic was enough to actually force Luna backwards, her hooves scraping against the cobbled floor as she pushed nearly an entire body length backwards.
As the beam made contact with the wall opposite to her, the hardened black stone simply melted under the heat. With a flick of her head, Luna cast a wake of destruction as her magic tore through the walls, floors and ceiling all around her.
When she was finally forced to stop, as the heat in her horn grew too intense to bear, she panted with ragged breaths. Her horn still steamed and glowed incandescently from the residual heat of her magical death beam.
The walls still glowed too, along the edges of the trench that she had carved into the black stones of the tower. Drops of red molten rock still dripped down from certain places on the ceiling where her magic had impacted.
A section of wall had toppled and the entire ceiling structure had only not collapsed, due to the sheer will and exertion of the tower's wards.
The alicorn's hind legs gave out from under her and she fell onto her haunches. Her horn no longer glowed, but still felt uncomfortably hot.
With her rage now spent, Luna’s emotions gave way to exhaustion. More than just magical or physical exhaustion, but complete and total mental fatigue.
Seeing the utter desolation of her once beloved old home, combined with all of the emotional turmoil of the past day, had just been too much. She thought that she had let out all of her pent up emotions when she had cried herself to sleep last night. Obviously she had a lot more to deal with emotionally than she had thought.
Despite her exhaustion, she didn't allow herself to sink back down to those depths again now. Her expenditure of her volatile emotions, had included her near paralysing sense of hopelessness. It had left her with a sort of post-catharsis clarity. A focus that she didn’t have before that moment.
'Luna would not be defeated by this.'
She would survive. She didn't know what she would do or where she would go, but she couldn’t allow herself to crumble into despair now. She would find her destiny somewhere, even if it's not here.
Exhaustion nearly consumed her, but Luna couldn’t allow herself to shut down now. She needed to keep moving. Towards what however, she didn't know.
With shaky hooves, she managed to stand up on her hooves again.
She winced as she surveyed the trenches of still cooling molten rock that she carved around her. Not since her battle with Discord had she unleashed such destruction upon the world around her. It was a frightening reminder of her power as an Alicorn and why she had needed to exert so much self-control in the past.
It was lucky that she had stopped when she had. It didn't look like the tower could have supported much more with so much of its load bearing architecture damaged or destroyed.
With nothing better to do to keep herself distracted, Luna decided to inspect the wall that had collapsed.
Her walk started off slow, but her hoofsteps gradually increased in speed and certainly. Her alicorn regeneration had already started to lessen some of her fatigue.
As she approached the rubble, her wince deepened with the realisation of just how far her magic had penetrated into the tower's structure.
It was then that she noticed the room that lay beyond in the collapsed wall. It was an old storage room. Most of its contents had been destroyed by her magical beam or the collapse of the wall. Yet, what caught her eye lay at the very back of the storage room and had somehow remained unharmed.
She almost thought that it was a deception of the mind. A mirage brought on by her exhaustion and recent emotional anguish. She needed to get closer. Stepping over the rubble and cooling slag, the alicorn ventured into the smouldering wreckage of the room beyond.
Luna didn't know why this issue suddenly became so important to her. The need to get closer to this ancient relic of her past. Despite her fatigue, that spark of curiosity burned brightly and demanded her attention.
Yet as she came to stand before it, the object of her fixation never de-manifested. It stayed firmly anchored in reality.
The focus of her fixation was a trailer, a travelling caravan. Its wooden structure was remarkably well preserved, but she supposed that she could credit Starswirl's protective spells for that. This trailer used to belong to him after all.
It was during his travels so many years ago in this trailer that he happened upon two sisters lost, alone and starving in the wilderness. It was in this trailer that he fed, sheltered and eventually adopted them as his protégés.
It looked much the same now as it did then. Its dark blue with silver trim had inspired her own preference for colours. She could feel his familiar magic permeate the vehicle. The echo of his power still lingering strongly, even after so long.
It was years before Starswirl had taken the mantle of Grand Master of the College and accepted stewardship of the tower. He was a travelling Master mage. Roaming wherever he was needed. Using his plethora of skills and vast power to help those that couldn't help themselves.
Travelling with him in those days had probably been the highlight of Luna’s life. She was awed by his feats and his magic. That fueled her determination to become like him one day.
To make a tangible difference in the lives of those around her. Not to just sit in endless meetings debating politics or coming up with legislation that the Council of Nobles would just shoot down.
Starswirl had once promised to Celestia and Luna that a day would come when they would be called to take this trailer and use it to venture to the furthest corners of Old Equestria. To help those in need and fight evil wherever they may find it.
He promised them that once they completed their journeyman adventures, they would be invited back as full-fledged Master Mages of the College.
It was something that Luna had dreamed of all throughout her time training in the tower.
Those dreams would be shattered however, as Discord's arrival had thrown the world into chaos and the two sisters were left trying to repair a fractured nation teetering on the brink of oblivion.
Luna couldn't change the past, but perhaps her oldest ambition was not as out of reach as she had once thought.
Through her exhaustion shone one emotion that filled her with a warmth that she had not felt in a very long time.
Hope.
It was now midday. The sun shone brightly upon Luna’s back as she secured the caravan's harness to her back and around her torso. She had never worn a harness before, so it had taken some time to figure everything out.
It was a bit humorous in hindsight. She had made a grand declaration of seeking her destiny and helping those in need. Ready to embark on her own personal odyssey, only to spend the next two hours trying to fit the damnable harness onto her.
The thought actually managed to get a small laugh out of her.
It felt so good to laugh and smile again, even if it was at her own expense. How long had it been since she had actually laughed? Not the polite, on-cue, faux chuckle that she had to give in response to a noble's incredibly poor joke, so as not to offend them, but an actual laugh, simply for the reason that she was happy.
Her mood was a bright one, but that didn't mean that all of her wounds were healed. The callousness of her sister’s words still cut deep, but she had something now that she didn’t have when she first found that diary.
Hope for the future.
Luna looked at the road in front of her that stretched off into the horizon. She didn't feel scared anymore.
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Great chapter, good to see that your clock is still ticking.
Anyway I have a suggestions on how this story can go, want to hear them?
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I'm always open to suggestions.
God I love your work:D I think the chapter is great
Huzzah, the great and powerful Luna sets forth!
It is good to see a person challenging himself, and then prevailing at given task. Nice read and character introspection
I keep hoping to hear Celestia discovering Luna is gone and hating herself for it.
You say you feel like your chapter started to go through a topic and then just switched to a different one. A choppy flow as you put it. I can see how you think that, but it feels natural. When blindly thinking about something with no goal, your thoughts drift. Quite a lot, depending on the person's experiences and mental connections. perhaps the transitions can be made just a tiny bit more smooth, but I don't believe it is something you need to worry terribly about. Very good chapter.
I think it would be a good exercise to try making a chapter where she goes down those tangents and then suddenly being abruptly brought out of them by Luna noticing something that re-aligns her thoughts or changes their topic entirely as a way to serve to move on with the chapter. An important aspect of writing is to make it fun for the author. If you genuinely enjoy writing those tangents, then encompass them into the story. Sure, sometimes they can get too far, but it's your story. You can interrupt the thinking process by adding something new or something that simply disturbs the perspective. You're good at writing.
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You'll be excited to know that the next chapter will be an Interlude, where we switch POV back to Everfree castle and see some of the unfolding events that are happening there.
I hope this won't happen - even if the writing process will drag on to years I still would love to see this fics culmination.
So, this might be horrible for you, but the fewer tangents you go into, the fewer expositions you throw at the reader, the better. Your frustrations and dead ends saved your chapter my dude.
From what I got at the beginning of this story is that this story is about Luna going her own path. Not reminiscing over the shattered past in well... Slogging detail. Aside from that, an interesting chapter and I can't wait to see how Luna's travels pan out!
Interlude, ahoy! The Romani life awaits, and Celestia's mounting mistakes!
... that sounded better in my head.
I personally think you trying to go on tangents and ultimately deleting them so that Luna can keep moving was actually very natural for how LUNA would likely feel and act in this situation. She's in a place that she had so much emotional connection to, so much nostalgia, and she would probably be having to force herself not to go down those tangents, to not lose herself in reminiscing about what once was, and instead to keep herself moving forward.
All I can say, is this chapter was worth waiting for. Without your cometary I’d have not known how difficult this chapter was for you to write. I’m going to go back and read it again and pay attention to the parts that have you trouble, to see if I can tell. I suspect I’ll not be able to tell. I’ll let you know either way.
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Reread the chapter taking into mind your comments. I still think it flowed rather well. No you didn’t get bogged down in descriptions, which is good, it leaves a lot to the reader’s’ imagination. Make them do the work so you don’t have to.
Without your comments I would not have known you had trouble. Rereading specifically taking those into mind didn’t make me notice. I liked this chapter a lot and especially Luna’s sense of hope and purpose.
Hey, writing is tough sometimes, so good on you for getting it out! And hope to see more, when it's ready!
Absolutely amazing. I understand just cringing at your own work, very inconvinent if I must say.
There was a general overuse of commas in this chapter. Individually they would be fine, but there were some parts where every sentence had one or two commas. That along with a lot of short sentences might be some of the reasons why you thought this chapter felt choppy, the distracted rambling, however, was actually perfect. It really sold Luna's confused and uncertain state of mind.
Content-wise this chapter was magnificent. Luna's emotions just felt real in a way that I rarely see in writing. The somberness of the entry hall, the bittersweet rambling as she looked through the wreck of her old home, the crushing sadness, followed by incandescent anger and the attempt to release the pressure via violence, only for that release to be found lacking. That would have been pretty good on its own, if a lot depressing, but the final scene of her discovering Starswirl's old wagon was just magnificent. It felt like coming up for a breath of fresh air after drowning and made the whole chapter just perfect.
Actually, it was perfect, the briefness made it feel like a new beginning, a culmination of all the previous drama and a promise of what was to come. I think it was a good, not just the end of the story's chapter, but the end of the current chapter of Luna's life, with the smallest tease of what's coming next.
There were also a couple of misused commas, here are the ones I found.
Duplicated word
Mmm...
Fanfics that are written with actual effort...
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And I bet she will do a better job than Trixie
Love it, great story, nice characterization and most importantly made with love and effort. You my good sir have my full willing attention and I'm looking forward to whatever kind of adventures our fair lady Luna is about to have.
I liked this chapter.
Don't give up on writing this story. I loved how you portrayed Lunas struggles of finding her direction and although ending could be described as short I personally liked it. This is easily one of the best story's I've read and I eagerly await the every new chapter, but please take your time with writing them until you are happy with it. No need to rush them out, we can wait.
That was a good chapter goodluck with the next one.
Very nice, a nice climax for this arc! Very much worth the wait as Luna at the highest point of power, give it up and began again from scratch. I look forward to the coming adventures of Luna the wondering mage, or maybe "Luna the grey" would be good as well. The aftermath will be interesting to see for "Celestia of Many Colors" as she is the sole power. I can't wait to see to what happens next!
Thank you for not giving up, it's been a great read so far, and i do so want more :)
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Let me know how that goes.
Amazing chapter
Incredible chapter can't wait for more.
(To be honest I almost thought that this fic is dead glad that it's still lives)
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I might be slow with the uploads, but I've never given up on it.
So the next two chapters in the story are already planned.
The next chapter will be an Interlude. It will take place from the POV of a Royal Guard at the Everfree castle, who will have a front row view of the events there. I know a lot of people are very excited for a Celestia POV, but I believe that a certain level of ambiguity regarding her motivations are required for what I have planned later in the story. So we won't get her side of the story just yet.
Staff of the castle will begin to become concerned about Luna’s absence, but it won't be full panic stations quite yet.
I'm just writing this to manage people's expectations. The Everfree story arc will be on a bit of a slower boil and the very first Interlude probably won't be as spicy as a lot of people were hoping.
The chapter after that will be Luna's journey through the wilderness to reach her first town. It will be a lot of Luna's thoughts and feelings over her decision in chapter 7. I'll also use it as an opportunity to tie up some loose ends from the previous arc and It'll give us an a chance to explore some of the functions of the caravan. It'll be pretty low key. A bit of a palate cleanser from the high intensity stuff that we have had so far, before we dive head first into the next story arc.
I wonder will Luna have a disguise as she travels the world and will she come into contact with Celestia who won’t recognize her? Also, thank you for putting this much care into writing these chapters. I knew writing was hard but reading your authors notes makes me appreciate it more. I would have liked to see some of the parts that were cut out but I can never really tell when a story is dragging on and annoys people as it becomes a slog to read. It’s good for an author to be able to tell when they go off on tangents and dead ends like that. If you want you can post deleted stuff in a blog if you save some of your drafts and think people would be interested.
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Yeah i also be interested on the deleted scene.
Also will luna have students under her wing it be poetic, she was picked up as starswirl student and now she finally after centuries even without celestia will bear the torch she meant to have and she becomes what starswirl is to them so very long ago.
And its really sad in a way that she finaly have hope but she still alone and the journey that was meant for both she and celestia ia only taken only by her and i really can see her be a humbler, compassionate, and kinder version of trixie the heck trixie is incredibly fitting for luna disguises from the color scheme to the name the wagon and the traveling mage thing, heck the hat and cloak can also be explained on luna wanting to emulate starswirl i cannot belived how fitting this is.
also small nitpick how did she fit in the harness i doubt luna with almost the size of celestia is fit on a regular pony harness or is it transformation magic and she already took disguises.
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Damm i kind of sad we dont get celestia pov but god you made such a good decision on this adding a flair of mystery and speculation. And i hope we can in the future see the absence of luna impacting the population maybe using a pov of the regular ponies or is there something you planned?
I dont really have deep thoughts about this chapter admitingly but i still enjoyed it. Good job at creating it. It was fun to read throught and im excited to finally have Luna moving and traveling into the wide big world.Interacting with it. Im really excited for the future of this fic in that regard. Regardless. Good writing, dont overstress. Loved it :)
Awesome job with this chapter and keeping everything well paced. Luna is being a lil’ angsty and that’s difficult to write well. I think you were able to strike a good balance on detail, sometimes it’s the things you don’t say that makes a story. Skimping on the caravan details was a good choice in that regard. I’m glad there’s some levity with the harness too, keeps things from being too tonally homogenous.
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You could make the trigger of the castle staff panicking the following scene:
Envoys from Saddle Arabia at the EverFree Castle and demand an explanation as to why Princess Luna had failed to prevent the contents of the night sky from shifting. This results in Princess Celestia, who is unaware that her sister had been gone for weeks or months, ordering a member of the castle staff (or royal guard) to summon her.
The staff, who had been aware of Luna’s disappearance and did not inform Princess Celestia, begin to become frantic as they don’t know where she is or what to tell her sister.
yay!!! updates!!!
Okay....somewhat honest skipped some of the chapter parts but then returned to reread them....love the story but right now I want to see dear old Celly's reaction of her sister missing...so might reread it 3rd time soon...love the story
I'm not surprised Luna was so upset that the tower was basically in ruins. Remembering how something was and seeing how it is now is hard to deal with. It's a good thing the tower didn't collapse from her power,that would have made her feel worse.
11547111 Yes! Let's see how Princess Sunbutt reacts when she finds out her favourite whipping pony has up and left!
Odds on, she will be mad with Luna for abandoning her 'duty', ignoring both the fact that this was exactly what she wanted, to rule alone, and thanks to Celestia and taking up all the available space Luna's duty was to sit there and do nothing but rubber stamp Celestia's decisions.
Great chapter. Always good to see a writer continue a story despite the difficulty. I avait your next chapter with impatience.
Honestly? That'd be kinda appropiate. Being Luna in this situation, your mind would surely rush to a million different tangents with all the nostalgia and the conflicted emotions. Having her literally struggle to stay focused the same way you'd struggle to keep the plot advancing would turn that "choppy" flow into a clever narrative instead.
But you've received some complaints about the pace being too slow already, so I understand the insecurities. I personally wouldn't have minded all the tangents you mentioned.
This is still very good quality writing, though, so don't be too hard on yourself about this chapter. The only rushed detail I noticed was Luna, seemingly at random, choosing to teleport to the training room and her blast opening the way to the van. A bit too much plot convenience, but you were probably fed up at that point so I can't blame you for wanting to finish once and for all. The chapter as a whole still turned out more than good enough.
Read this chapter and I gotta say, I enjoyed it. I like where it’s going, and I hope for more!
Also it flows well, has good pace.
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There was supposed to be another tangent that I would get into as soon as Luna landed in the training room, detailing how she didn't want to destroy what little was left of her room and how Starswirl had trained them to teleport to the training room if they ever experienced a magical surge. It took too long to explain though and I wanted to keep the emotional tensions extremely high throughout that scene. I felt that diverting to lore and story time halfway through that scene would have lessened that scenes emotional impact.
I feel you on the whole writers block thing. I've been writing a sequel to my biggest story for the past 4 months and basically had to rewrite 90% of it cause I had much the same issues you had. Looking forward to the next chapter and hopefully seeing Celestia now that she's realized Luna is gone.
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It's difficult, yet all of that extra effort is immediately apparent to anyone that reads those stories. "All is fair in love and war" is definitely among my favourites on this site, because I can tell that you put the effort into it.
Hey great chap! When you are writing do you do the "because this..." method or the "And then..." method?
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Well thank you <3
I'm glad you like the story :D
Here's hoping the reworks show when I finally start posting All's Fair 2 lol. Hoping to finally have it ready in about 2 more months.
Definitely a good chapter and don’t worry take the time to write your story. There isn’t any rush to get them out and I can’t wait to see traveling Luna which I wonder if she will inspire Trixie down the road? That might not happened in 1000 years…
Wondering so is Discord different in this story? Did Star Swirl disappear like in the show too? Kind of wondering the differences will be like which I hope we see a world base around 1000 years ago since sometimes authors get things mix up that doesn’t feel like we are in the past.
This chapter resonates with my current mood. I think it greatly captured Luna's view of this place of memories... I did not notice any choppiness or anything like it, I just liked it.
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Anyone that uses the latter method has no business being an author.
So luna begins her journey.