Twilight is scared. She saw Rainbow Dash on the moon, or did she? Who is on the moon exactly? What is going on again? Twilight is scared, lost, alone, confused, and she does not know what to do. She wants to punish herself, though she cannot for the life of her quite remember why. She descends. She fades. She comes back again. She is reborn. What is Twilight? Read and learn, and maybe she will learn something too, though doubtful, as she has given up all hope, or maybe not. Only time can tell.
The image is totally open source. It's an image of the moon.
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A valiant effort, but your extravagant prose is as purple as Twilight herself. As a result, the text is repetitive at best—and downright incomprehensible at its worst.
Make no mistake, you show promise, but I can't see myself reading this again. That being said, keep at it!
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I didn't want to poison the well, but I actually agree with this. I had a very hard time writing this story. There's too much hemming and hawing. I know. Some of the repetitiveness is intentional, but it's too much. Still, I wanted to post it, just to document my own work, and the genealogy of it. Thank you for reading.