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Hum, interesting, not as much as a clops as I had hopped but the lore part was mostly interesting

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This story was always going to be more about the lore than the sex. (That is the point of the contest, after all.)

I considered making it more cloppy anyways, but between the looming deadline and a desire to challenge myself by writing a Non-clop incest story, I decided against it. Though I would’ve changed my mind if the wordcount had fallen short. It did make the last chapter more difficult, since without a sex-scene to fill it with, it reads more like an epilogue, to me. But that’s what you get when you try to challenge yourself. I also had to go back and take a lot of detail out of the second chapter, but that wasn’t too much work.

Deserved firat place win. Finally in a worlbuilding contest there is worldbuilding. Also does not feel like ots shoved down the throat and leaves a nice feeling about it. Clever use of numbers to add additonal snippets of info as if is a real book.

Nice. I love it! No time to write more, need to read the rest of the story.

This was an amazing read! Ten outta ten would read again ... as soon as I’m done reading the other 500 ish storys in my “read this” pile :rainbowlaugh:

But all jokes aside, I really enjoyed this. It’s creative, flows well and pulls the reader in. It’s like a dream come true!:derpytongue2:

Wow that was shockingly good. A breath air from a story that has a good pace. Just enough backstory, and narrative to keep you invested in the story. From beginning to end a very enjoyable read.

Gilded Lily shuddered at the memory of those few days without her magic. After a minute or two of silence, she finally thought of something to say.

Cozy: ...sorry!
...eh you didn't need it right? Oh you did huh? Oops
Oh well thats what happens when you learn from your past

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