A Brony's Dream Come True

by TheGir

The Portal

It was just an oridinary day in Equestria, Pinkie Pie and some of the other mane 6 galloping around laughing as they prepared for Celestmas, Rainbow Dash flying around with a scarf on, clearing away the clouds, and Twilight Sparkle studying in her library.

"Hey Twilight, do you HAVE to study ALL the time?" the baby dragon asked annoyingly.

"Of course Spike!" answered the purple unicorn. Spike then sighed, as he lie down on the table she was sitting at. Suddenly, a light blue and white portal opened up quickly on the side of the wall. It started to suck in some of Twilight's books. "My books!" Twi whined loudly.

"Arn't our lives more important then your books?!" Spike shouted.

"It's a portal Spike, it won't KILL us!" she said yelling her answer. That's when Spike was thrown off of the table and got caught by Twilight's hoof. Twi's mane was getting blown pretty hard. Her hooves then started slipping towards the portal. She threw Spike onto her mane and screamed "HOLD ON!"

"That's all I CAN do!" Spike shouted back. They both screamed as the portal sucked them in.

"Hello? Is anypony here? Twilight? Spike?" Pinkie Pie asked as she and the rest of the ponies came in.

"What in the name of Princess Celestia happened here?" Rarity asked as they came across the piles of books strewn aross the library.

"I hope them two is okay." Applejack said sadly.

"We NEED to find them before Celestmas!" Pinkie Pie shouted. The others nodded as they were going to start their search for the two missing friends.

Twilight felt dazed as her vision started to clear, revealing that she had collasped onto the grass-covered ground when she was thrown out of the portal, with Spike still clawing onto her mane. "Spike, where are we?"

"I-I don't know." Spike answered, a little scared.

Comments

[GlitchyProductions]

It's a little short don't you think?

WAY too short. Dunno why i read it in the first place.

[Mänic]

I don't know about this one, I guess I'll wait for another chapter before making a judgement

[Mänic]

my advice is to make chapters at least 1000 words(preferably 2000 or more), a prologue can be done well with about 500 words but it isn't easy to do.

it's intresting... but there needs to be more words.

so then, in 24 hours, I expect another chapter

there better be another chapter in 20 mins

I love the plot. The way of writing in good. BUT! it needs to be longer.

so... 20 mins

im back again... an hour late to check. YOU HAVE FAILED ME APPRENTICE. You must DIE!

[Mitslits]

Well, I must say that I agree with others. Too short. I will be tracking. Good luck with your first fanfiction! (Hope it gets a better reception than mine )

[dukesofhazzardftw]

Moar!